I can't stand protagonists who start out with divine beasts and are already overpowered. Do you think divine beasts are just lying around on the roadside, there for anyone to pick up?! I also can't stand all those abandoned Pokemon fics =.= I resent how our Xiao Zhi gets weakened over and over, even Pikachu gets nerfed!
(╯‵□′)╯︵┻━┻ If Xiao Zhi had set out as a sensible but still passionate boy =.= everything would have been different. A thousand readers, a thousand Xiao Zhis... Please don't throw rocks at me... I'm new and scared of pain -,- This story pairs Du with Xiao Zhi. It's about the uke working hard to catch up with the seme, then accidentally getting together with him =.= I'm terrible at writing blurbs... This is a serious story, a serious story!!
Look! I changed the cover~ Thanks to Baozi for making it (≧ω≦) I want comments~~ Criticism is fine too, I don't mind~~ Though positive ratings would be even better~~
The story will end this Thursday, with an early VIP chapter release. Consider yourselves warned... This is all I can do for you... Those of you who've followed me all along are in luck~ All I can do is apologize to everyone who comes later... I've already tried my best to delay it =.=
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It felt a bit confusing at the end, but at least it made sense.
Although it's a bit messy... But it's rare to see a special article (although it's just soy sauce...), And it also writes a less stupid Ash, who loves and is loved by elves, so I read it in one sitting without even realizing it. The writing style needs to be improved, and the character creation is very good. I hope to see more elf writing ^_^
… What the hell is this? ! ! ! ! !
After reading the whole article, I found a lot of typos (am I just here to catch typos, lol)
However, the original Xiaozhi written by the author is very suitable to my taste. I hate the kind of writing that has to be worn around and has to be worn on the protagonist, making it look very powerful and popular.
When I saw Leolu, I felt sad, but when I went back later, Xiaogang's words about missing the game made me laugh (I felt so sorry for Leolu)
Yes! ! Great author! ! You wrote this article well... But I always feel like there is something missing [beat me]. I thought that as a prosecutor, Watari would be so free [even though he was running away], but when something big happened, Watari wouldn't care? [For example, Team Rocket or something] I don't believe that Team Rocket would be so calm when Watari and Ash were traveling together. Compared to Pokemon Traveler, it's really... But you finished it and finished it. It's good to finish it, but after finishing it, you have to pay for it! ! ! Is there no charge? I saw some completed projects without charge. Hoho! ! !
What a wonderful extra! But Zhi has lost his memory? Or does it go back to the past and it seems like he has never experienced it before?
Extra, I feel completely fulfilled when I see Riolu come back. Its death was my biggest resentment. It's great to be back now! Especially Riolu remembers everything that happened, this is a real 'come back'!
Then the author should pay attention to the use of symbols. Regardless of whether they are used right or wrong, at least the sentences of a sentence must be clearly separated. It is really difficult to read a large paragraph without symbols, and it will definitely choke you to death if you want to read it out.
In addition, after reading this fanfic, I went to read the elf fanfic. It turned out that it was either a time travel or a Mary Sue. It was very stressful to read. Although the writing style of this article is not very mature, the original Ash Ketchum meets the requirements. The most attractive thing in the article is the interaction between Ash and the elf. Being liked by the elf and loving the elf is the main reason that attracted me to read it. If the author also writes a fanfic of this animation, I hope to keep this theme!
Like this extra chapter
There are just a few missing words and punctuation marks.
I have a question after reading this article
Riolu doesn't use wave missiles, does he?
I remember you have to evolve into Lucario to use it?
This is a BUG
Can you continue writing a sequel? ? I like this style very much! Just keep writing! Let's see how this adventure is different from the last one^-^ To be honest, I didn't feel anything JQ...
It felt a bit confusing at the end, but at least it made sense.
Although it's a bit messy... But it's rare to see a special article (although it's just soy sauce...), And it also writes a less stupid Ash, who loves and is loved by elves, so I read it in one sitting without even realizing it. The writing style needs to be improved, and the character creation is very good. I hope to see more elf writing ^_^
… What the hell is this? ! ! ! ! !
After reading the whole article, I found a lot of typos (am I just here to catch typos, lol) However, the original Xiaozhi written by the author is very suitable to my taste. I hate the kind of writing that has to be worn around and has to be worn on the protagonist, making it look very powerful and popular. When I saw Leolu, I felt sad, but when I went back later, Xiaogang's words about missing the game made me laugh (I felt so sorry for Leolu)
Yes! ! Great author! ! You wrote this article well... But I always feel like there is something missing [beat me]. I thought that as a prosecutor, Watari would be so free [even though he was running away], but when something big happened, Watari wouldn't care? [For example, Team Rocket or something] I don't believe that Team Rocket would be so calm when Watari and Ash were traveling together. Compared to Pokemon Traveler, it's really... But you finished it and finished it. It's good to finish it, but after finishing it, you have to pay for it! ! ! Is there no charge? I saw some completed projects without charge. Hoho! ! !
What a wonderful extra! But Zhi has lost his memory? Or does it go back to the past and it seems like he has never experienced it before?
Extra, I feel completely fulfilled when I see Riolu come back. Its death was my biggest resentment. It's great to be back now! Especially Riolu remembers everything that happened, this is a real 'come back'! Then the author should pay attention to the use of symbols. Regardless of whether they are used right or wrong, at least the sentences of a sentence must be clearly separated. It is really difficult to read a large paragraph without symbols, and it will definitely choke you to death if you want to read it out. In addition, after reading this fanfic, I went to read the elf fanfic. It turned out that it was either a time travel or a Mary Sue. It was very stressful to read. Although the writing style of this article is not very mature, the original Ash Ketchum meets the requirements. The most attractive thing in the article is the interaction between Ash and the elf. Being liked by the elf and loving the elf is the main reason that attracted me to read it. If the author also writes a fanfic of this animation, I hope to keep this theme!
Like this extra chapter There are just a few missing words and punctuation marks.
I have a question after reading this article Riolu doesn't use wave missiles, does he? I remember you have to evolve into Lucario to use it? This is a BUG
Can you continue writing a sequel? ? I like this style very much! Just keep writing! Let's see how this adventure is different from the last one^-^ To be honest, I didn't feel anything JQ...