[SD] The Colors of Youth

Although the competition is also very interesting to watch, so many original content in the VIP chapter always makes people feel that it is not cost-effective...

All the famous friends were defeated. Why was it still with famous friends in the finals?

[... Actually, I have written it a long time ago, but I never had time to send it out] It's a very soft article... The first chapter is a very sunny, cute and burning (can they be used together like this?). It's also a different feeling to use the first person of a girl to describe the first person. The main character's name is Huaying, En Huaying... What a strange name, so Chinese-style and manly? Okay, man, although it gives people a strong sense of being a celestial being, it's actually not important. Is the male protagonist Mitsui Hisashi? It seems that Hisashi Mitsui is particularly popular in SD articles recently? Has it already entered the Mitsui era? ! Obviously all the articles I read before were about Sakuragi Daidai or Rukawa Kaede Daidai! As for the plot, it's pretty good. Although the author's ability to grasp the first person is not very good, and there are many awkward sentences, the general feeling of the plot is really good! Ah, having said that, I have to talk about the copywriting. It really feels like that! Especially the first sentence [I was not a very successful child in my last life], it was the feeling of being stabbed in the heart by the arrow of love. It made me go against my own life principles and sold V without hesitation, and I watched the whole thing in one breath. Ah - the words about love and dreams are really nourishing. Of course, it may be because I have watched too many dark and heavy tastes recently. It is really eye-catching to see such a soft girl in a situation where the three views are incorrect! Well, after reading the last words, the biggest problem is the author's writing style. Every game has the same feeling of being short of words, and a few scenes are still not expressive enough... Well, what should I say? Passionate? Because the first-person perspective is inherently difficult to write, many characters' perspectives cannot be directly expressed. We can only rely on the protagonist's own perspective to figure out the psychology of other people, and use the protagonist's words and deeds to reflect the emotions of other characters in the scene. Because of this, when the protagonist only has his own inner activities, the reader will feel that he is reading the protagonist's autobiography and cannot feel the existence of others at all. But on the contrary, if there is too much description, God's perspective will appear. So far... Uh, Chapter 66, well, yes, the author's relationship situation in Chapter 66 is obviously biased towards the former. Other characters are represented entirely by dialogue and action. Moreover, the first-person psychological changes used by the protagonist also seem a bit artificial in some places. The narrative is also a bit fluid. If you want the article to be more substantial, you might as well use the psychological activities of the protagonist girl to highlight the following other important roles. The simplest method I have seen before is I saw someone's face, and I thought about how he must be now, what kind of person he is, what kind of things he has experienced, and how he must be... ↑I saw a tutorial in a writing magazine whose name I forgot, and I think it is quite useful when writing first person. Well, I forgot to mention that adding some appropriate modifiers can also improve the readability of the article. Of course, this kind of adding modifiers is not the kind of writing method that imitates Guo Mousi (Lying Gun), which makes readers dazzled by all kinds of unclear meanings and can't find any other highlights at all. But then again, emotions like bright sadness are really not suitable for this novel of pure love, campus love, new dreams and youth (lots of attributions) written by the author himself. Okay, I've almost finished writing it here. In fact, in terms of the overall feeling, this article is still very good. Anyway, I am still looking forward to the next chapter. If there is not a plot that is too outrageous, I will probably continue to follow it firmly! Damn it, author girl! (Hey, I always feel that the tone of writing this long review is not my usual style. It's really strange.) [Light-colored small building BY Ayan]

The same thing... Big insect~change it quickly!!

Qingtian Nobunaga, you think too much. .

=-=I don't like the Ah Shen you wrote. . Ah Shen has always been a gentle, gentle and shy child in my heart QAQ

They are all good children who study hard=,=

Qingtian boy, you can't do it~

\\(=3=)/Same feeling. I also have 5 courses where I have to submit papers, and I finished one of them two days ago. . . I'm busy~I definitely understand~[Feipu~~~~~Come on~! !

I want to see more interactions or comics drawn by the heroine. I've read the comics, so I don't feel passionate about it.