One man raises a little girl into a woman; another man steals her away. Two powerful men fight over her, and the heroine cries out to the heavens: "God, can't I have the best of both worlds?"
God twitches at the mouth and strikes her with lightning!
That's the story in a nutshell.
And here's the poetic version:
"I'll stay and help you."
"No."
"Then I'll go back and wait for you."
"No."
"I love you."
"No."
"Nothing's allowed! Are you trying to drive me to my death, you jerk?"
"...I want you to stop worrying about me and go live your own life."
"Hey, darling, you're so wonderful, and I'm so selfish. If I ever hurt you, I'd hate myself forever."
"Hey, little girl, you're so wonderful. Even if you make my heart feel pierced by ten thousand arrows, I'll still love you with my soul."
Buddha said there are seven sufferings in this world: birth, aging, illness, death, separation from those we love, meeting those we hate, and not getting what we want.
Shunhua said, "There's one sorrow in my life: loving him but never having him. And one joy: sharing life's hardships with you."
I deeply understand, sir, come on. . . . Is this chapter missing something?
Sir, you are so diligent in updating~~~~~What is Xiaomu's life experience like? Looking forward to
I can say that I am here to support you! Saving character. In addition, I think the beginning is very well written, and I really want people to continue reading. I have collected the article and will take the time to read it slowly. I also wrote an article, welcome your advice! ~
It looks very artistic~~~~~Spreading flowers By the way, I can't see the cover of the adults.
Although it's not a cute first-person article, I still decided to continue to pay attention~~~~~~~~The movie recommendation is very good.
_(:з∠)_ Because I am also new to JJ. I wandered around and entered by name. There were a lot of "quiet" in the beginning (I am very sensitive to words). You can try to use other words to replace it, and then the layout and dialogue, try to reflect some connotations and foreshadowings. "Cat Princess", I think it is no longer available in JJ! Have! Green! Spring! School! Garden! City! Field! Got it! (Pause face...) There is also the section of the Book of Songs. I shyly say that I am the kind of person who can recite the Four Books and Five Classics in its entirety, but if it is not for class or exams, I will never recite poems... First, others will think you are showing off, and second, you will be indifferent... ^_^ That's all... I have also opened a new article. Welcome to visit~
First of all, my cover has popped up. I suggest you go to the forum to ask for a cover. I think the copywriting is okay. As for the text, it is actually recommended to leave a blank line in the middle of each paragraph instead of listing large paragraphs together. It is best to have less than 4/5 lines for each paragraph so that it does not look tired. There is also the first chapter, the focus is to attract When living with people, there should be suspense, and then there is the matter of the first person. Generally speaking, the first person is less common now, because although such a person has advantages and the description of psychology may be more prominent, the disadvantages are also very obvious. Of course, each author has different considerations, and I still hope to work harder! From the forum Xiaoyan
. . Um. . . I can't help but continue to say, these 2 points are for "the author has something to say", Highly recommended, love it ~
In fact, your writing is pretty good. . . But it's hard to watch it calmly. For my personality, dramas are the best. . . Bored. . . ╮(╯▽╰)╭, There is a big gap between clicks and ratings. Calm down, calm down, just stick to what you like~
First of all, this is a new article for a newbie, I hope you can continue writing. Let's talk about some questions. "The weakly acidic transparent liquid smeared on the page into a kind of embarrassing and heartbreaking." This sentence is a bit strange. The liquid is understood as tears. It seems that there is no such thing as a page in the previous article. Stripped of the adjective, the sentence is liquid tearing through the page. It feels a bit weird. "Turn around and grab the corner of his clothes. But I didn't" would make it more natural to add the word "think" in front of the sentence. In short, everyone will have problems with their first article. I wish the author better and better, so keep up the good work.