The Immortality Tribulation (Cultivation)

The part about searching for a master is too thin. Well, the cuteness of the master and the apprentice was not written out. It would be better to write more about the development between the two. I always feel that the senior brothers appear more than the master, so it would be better to write more about the master.

It's finally over, and it feels like it ended a little too quickly. However, I still like this article quite a lot, because novels about cultivating immortals are basically about male protagonists, and there are very few novels about girls cultivating immortals. I think the characters that impressed me the most after reading this whole article, besides Yunqi, Brother Baishu and Master, the cutest ones are Sanbao and the little fox, they are really cute. And like the exclamation point friend downstairs said, if this article could add more detailed descriptions and some emotional scenes, I believe it would be better. Come on come on! ! Looking forward to the author's new works~~

I feel that the character image is a bit thin. The master only appears more in the beginning and there is no scene at all in the middle. The impression in my mind is that the master is a person with a strong sense of responsibility, a cold face and a warm heart. What about the more humane aspects? Some little habits and the like. And it's probably because the master and apprentice spent too little time together. There was very little interaction. What I felt was the relationship between master and apprentice at most. I even felt that my relationship with my senior brother was deeper than my relationship with my master... Because Yun Qi is the protagonist, he has a lot of descriptions, but there seems to be a little lack of psychological descriptions. The big main plot is good, but you can also write more loving details and stories, which will make it more exciting and rich. The above are just some personal thoughts, I look forward to new articles.

This ending made me unhappy to watch it. It ended suddenly and I couldn't accept it.

I've been waiting for a long time to update~~

This article starts off well. . . But there are many things that the author throws away after writing them. 1. JQ 2. The heroine tells fortunes. . .

O(∩_∩)O~ It wouldn't have ended so quickly. To be honest, I feel that neither Yunqi nor Master has developed any JQ... I feel so resentful~~

It sounds like a lot of hard work, so you have to balance work and rest~

The barrier is broken? ! I always feel that Master Master is very weak. Can he still defeat the Sky Demon like this?

As expected, something is very wrong. I still know too little about the abilities of the Sky Demon.