He is a dashing, carefree young gentleman who won her affection with his romantic and sincere love. He is a leisurely, secluded wanderer of the martial world who gives her a steadfast shoulder to lean on with his reason and cold demeanor. Yet fate played a cruel joke on her, making her, after transmigrating, experience another unforgettable love in a different way…
I don't know if I can make up for the points... I support your entry into the new author list, and you should also add more!
The writing is too simple, the emotions are not expressed very well, the heroine's personality is quite strange, I don't understand why I figured it out when I came to this time and space, the execution is not good, it feels abrupt, I need to pay more attention to the details. Come on, update faster, no one will read this if it continues, work hard to update, don't give up on the article, the last chapter got a negative score, I'm sorry! ... Woooo, that's not intentional...
The writing is too simple, the emotions are not expressed very well, the heroine's personality is quite strange, I don't understand why I figured it out when I came to this time and space, the execution is not good, it feels abrupt, I need to pay more attention to the details. Come on, update faster, no one will read this if it continues, work hard to update, don't give up on the article
The writing is too simple, the emotions are not expressed very well, the heroine's personality is quite strange, I don't understand why I figured it out when I came to this time and space, the execution is not good, it feels abrupt, I need to pay more attention to the details. Come on, update faster, no one will read this if it continues, work hard to update, don't give up on the article
Gee, are you also eager to be abused...? I'll pretend to be Yunxiu and let's act~ Haha, brother, come and see you. Write well, but don't neglect your studies. You are still a student. Read more books, it's not okay to write martial arts like this!
It's better written than before. The thoughtful heroine is quite cute~
Isn't Yunxiu very cold... He looks fierce but he is actually very caring... In fact, the heroine is not abused very much.
Come and take a look to cheer me up, your update speed is too slow, people who are waiting are still anxious... I can have more words in each chapter... But students understand... Next, let's talk about the writing style. Yun Xiu's character is not well portrayed. Maybe he wants to write it more coldly? But it feels a bit wooden and not very expressive of emotions. The heroine feels silly and does not have the slightest flavor of a heroine. Maybe it is to give the heroine a growth process? The writing is too sketchy in some places. Although it is a quick summary that makes it easy to read, it is too brief and lacks detailed descriptions that make it difficult to tell where the foreshadowing is and where the plot is. It feels more or less like running water. Also, there are too few characters. At this point, few characters have appeared, which makes people less interested in reading. You are writing about martial arts, but at this point, the romance is more intense. Maybe it's because it's just the beginning? The plot is not very new, but it is still sloppy. When writing, I need to prioritize and strengthen some adjustments and details. Although the content of each chapter is linked to the title, the summary of the content is not attractive at all, and it does not make people want to read it. The key points are not well written. Please take the time to read more books and learn to describe things. To write martial arts well, you have to pay more attention to historical and political knowledge, otherwise it will be written by a novice. This is not to say that novices are not good, but do you want to write martial arts in your style? You need to change it later. There are also issues like life experience in the first chapter, which are not well connected. Please pay attention. Finally, I want to remember to proofread the article before publishing it. Don't wait for readers to point out typos... There are also problems with paragraphing and formatting. If you don't know, you will think you are piracy. Haha, this is your first time writing an article. This is not bad. Come on! I support what you said and will never abandon the article! Take good care of you!
Well, please write more carefully. There will be more chapters during the Mid-Autumn Festival. Please use more words in each chapter.
The character's personality and image are not particularly well expressed, but the concept is okay. Don't stop updating. It would be better if the update speed is faster~ Keep up the hard work.