An apocalypse story, slow to heat up. The male lead is undecided, and the number of male leads is uncertain. The heroine is powerful, though perhaps a bit naive. Don't read if that's not your thing.
Before the apocalypse began, Chu Ci gained a living space in an accident. Though she had no family, she was determined to live freely in this chaotic world.
She doesn't want to hide away in her space. She wants her life to shine, and to live more brilliantly than anyone else!
Later, when she learns the mission she has been burdened with, how will she struggle to survive?
I also noticed that the heroine is a bit noob, although I don't really like the noob heroine. However... Given the nature of the world that I set up... It's not a Meteor Street-style realistic world of human nature and evil like [Betrayal exists from the beginning], so just... Just be considerate.
For example, in One Piece, partners are one's second life and are used to back-to-back. In such a world, it doesn't matter if you are kind, nonsensical, or even a noob. But in Hunter, partners are maintained by profit. For example, Hisoka can become number four just because he wants to fight Chrollo. In this world, if you want to Xiaobai... It's impossible, because in this kind of world, strength cannot explain everything. If you don't have the IQ of a knight, you can't be black. If you don't have the strength of Hisoka, you can't be cool. If you don't have the figure of Madge, you can't be seductive... Bah, where did I go? In short, different heroines are suitable for different worlds.
So you don't have to change your writing style at all, as long as you feel that the kind and innocent heroine is already perfect, because if there is a standard for the heroine's character, wouldn't all the writing in the world be the same?
But let's fix the loopholes...
PS: The post-apocalyptic article I wrote has some similarities with Daddy's. Daddy wanted to make the article more hunter-like as possible, while mine was based on One Piece... It's not a background, but it will have some influence.
I always feel a little confused, and the heroine feels very virginal and naive. .
I hope that the heroine who trusts others too much will not end up raising white-eyed wolves, and that she won't save any more school belles.
What a shame. When I introduced Wu Tong, I gave him so much aura, this champion, that champion, but he turned out to be cannon fodder. I thought he would be a good player >_<
After reading the first paragraph, I really feel that the heroine is too savior, so compassionate.
The author writes the heroine as a savior in the end of the world. She is fair enough and behaves like a child. How old is she? ? ?
There are some contradictions in the story.
I remember that the heroine's father only told her that the research he was doing was a national secret, so some people would want to deal with him. The final plane crash might also be a conspiracy. The other heroine's father didn't say anything to the heroine, right? So how does the heroine "recall" what her father told her? Especially the naming of viruses. The terms T1 and T2 in the story were also spoken by the heroine first, and no state agencies or other channels released these rumors. And where did the heroine learn this information?
Would a person who knew that the research he was doing be a state secret tell his daughter the information he was researching so easily? And my daughter is still a little girl in her teens. Even if these parents train her to be capable in both literature and martial arts, in medicine, surgery, martial arts, and many skills that ordinary teenage girls do not have, would a father so easily tell his daughter these data that he knows will bring danger, and then bring more danger to her?
I have to admit that these parents have good intentions for the heroine, and they even let her know the map of China, including the location of the gas station. However, these parents did not teach their daughter to be on guard against others.
The heroine knows that the space she owns is invincible, but she easily tells others about it. Forget it about my friend Qin Shichuan. For the next few team members she received, she loudly displayed the message that she had space, and verbally told the team members to obey her instructions, not to betray easily, and to keep her secret. But when she was escaping with the army, in order to recruit a female supporting role, Ruan Sisi, she easily told the female supporting role the information about the team. She knew that what she said next was a secret, but she did not look around or guard against others, so she easily told the female supporting role the information about the team. Even though he said it was a secret, he told it openly and generously. I have to say that this heroine is very optimistic and naive.
There are some details in the article that you can think about more carefully and try to close the loopholes. Maybe the heroine will not be so white.
The heroine is very majestic and powerful, with years of experience in martial arts, medical skills and knowledge passed down by her parents, but she can be given more substantial and convincing reasons. Not just one space is enough for other team members to be willing to follow her. Only the heroine is strong, and it is not of much help to others. Only if she has experienced it herself and brings others to become stronger together, will mankind be more confident in the face of the end of the world, and the story will be more exciting. Otherwise, there will only be a bunch of ordinary cannon fodder. After the cannon fodder dies, the heroine and her party will continue to move forward, and then meet an endless stream of new supporting characters. After the new supporting characters die, they will meet new and new supporting characters, and then the plot will repeat the cycle.
Just a few thoughts, just for reference. I understand that writing an article takes a lot of effort, but I still hope that the author can continue to work hard.
The heroine's surname is Doomsday. .
The full name is "The Songs of Chu in the End of the World". .
What are you doing?
I like the heroine's kindness o(≧v≦)o~~
Children are the future~
I also noticed that the heroine is a bit noob, although I don't really like the noob heroine. However... Given the nature of the world that I set up... It's not a Meteor Street-style realistic world of human nature and evil like [Betrayal exists from the beginning], so just... Just be considerate. For example, in One Piece, partners are one's second life and are used to back-to-back. In such a world, it doesn't matter if you are kind, nonsensical, or even a noob. But in Hunter, partners are maintained by profit. For example, Hisoka can become number four just because he wants to fight Chrollo. In this world, if you want to Xiaobai... It's impossible, because in this kind of world, strength cannot explain everything. If you don't have the IQ of a knight, you can't be black. If you don't have the strength of Hisoka, you can't be cool. If you don't have the figure of Madge, you can't be seductive... Bah, where did I go? In short, different heroines are suitable for different worlds. So you don't have to change your writing style at all, as long as you feel that the kind and innocent heroine is already perfect, because if there is a standard for the heroine's character, wouldn't all the writing in the world be the same? But let's fix the loopholes... PS: The post-apocalyptic article I wrote has some similarities with Daddy's. Daddy wanted to make the article more hunter-like as possible, while mine was based on One Piece... It's not a background, but it will have some influence.
I always feel a little confused, and the heroine feels very virginal and naive. .
I hope that the heroine who trusts others too much will not end up raising white-eyed wolves, and that she won't save any more school belles.
What a shame. When I introduced Wu Tong, I gave him so much aura, this champion, that champion, but he turned out to be cannon fodder. I thought he would be a good player >_<
After reading the first paragraph, I really feel that the heroine is too savior, so compassionate.
The author writes the heroine as a savior in the end of the world. She is fair enough and behaves like a child. How old is she? ? ?
There are some contradictions in the story. I remember that the heroine's father only told her that the research he was doing was a national secret, so some people would want to deal with him. The final plane crash might also be a conspiracy. The other heroine's father didn't say anything to the heroine, right? So how does the heroine "recall" what her father told her? Especially the naming of viruses. The terms T1 and T2 in the story were also spoken by the heroine first, and no state agencies or other channels released these rumors. And where did the heroine learn this information? Would a person who knew that the research he was doing be a state secret tell his daughter the information he was researching so easily? And my daughter is still a little girl in her teens. Even if these parents train her to be capable in both literature and martial arts, in medicine, surgery, martial arts, and many skills that ordinary teenage girls do not have, would a father so easily tell his daughter these data that he knows will bring danger, and then bring more danger to her? I have to admit that these parents have good intentions for the heroine, and they even let her know the map of China, including the location of the gas station. However, these parents did not teach their daughter to be on guard against others. The heroine knows that the space she owns is invincible, but she easily tells others about it. Forget it about my friend Qin Shichuan. For the next few team members she received, she loudly displayed the message that she had space, and verbally told the team members to obey her instructions, not to betray easily, and to keep her secret. But when she was escaping with the army, in order to recruit a female supporting role, Ruan Sisi, she easily told the female supporting role the information about the team. She knew that what she said next was a secret, but she did not look around or guard against others, so she easily told the female supporting role the information about the team. Even though he said it was a secret, he told it openly and generously. I have to say that this heroine is very optimistic and naive. There are some details in the article that you can think about more carefully and try to close the loopholes. Maybe the heroine will not be so white. The heroine is very majestic and powerful, with years of experience in martial arts, medical skills and knowledge passed down by her parents, but she can be given more substantial and convincing reasons. Not just one space is enough for other team members to be willing to follow her. Only the heroine is strong, and it is not of much help to others. Only if she has experienced it herself and brings others to become stronger together, will mankind be more confident in the face of the end of the world, and the story will be more exciting. Otherwise, there will only be a bunch of ordinary cannon fodder. After the cannon fodder dies, the heroine and her party will continue to move forward, and then meet an endless stream of new supporting characters. After the new supporting characters die, they will meet new and new supporting characters, and then the plot will repeat the cycle. Just a few thoughts, just for reference. I understand that writing an article takes a lot of effort, but I still hope that the author can continue to work hard.
The heroine's surname is Doomsday. . The full name is "The Songs of Chu in the End of the World". . What are you doing?
I like the heroine's kindness o(≧v≦)o~~ Children are the future~
Hey, hey, the kid is only thirteen years old! ! !