Every detail of this devilish man's appearance has been perfectly sculpted. He's domineering, and his sharp gaze can corner anyone with effortless elegance. She is caught in his spell. She's just a single mother raising a child, so why does he alone want to control her? With his methods, he has changed her entire destiny.
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This is a friend's story, and it's better than mine! "An Entire Universe in Exchange for One Red Bean"
I don't know why I suddenly remembered this article, and when I came back to check it out, it was still not updated. . I feel like most of the articles I've read are written in such a way that they fall apart in the end. It's unbearable = =.
Author, where are you?
Wow, you actually updated it! I'm so excited, so excited, excited, moved... Mr. He is also afraid of the dark. It is perfect that he has such a small mental disorder, but it makes people think he is very cute. Jian San's panic was related to him, but he thought she was afraid of thunder. It was a pity that he couldn't hear Jian San's heartfelt words in the darkness. But I believe that one day he will feel her sadness, her distress, her love, and all her emotions will bloom unbridled for him. By the way, this chapter you wrote is very warm and touching. Keep up the good work and wish you a smooth life in a new environment abroad O(∩_∩)O~
Damn, why don't you update it? I check the status and results every day. . . . . . Going to other places? I really want to see them together, looking forward to it.
My dear, where have you been?
Please be sure to watch until the end. "Why Jane Eyre", what does the name mean? When I first saw this name, I wondered in my heart, why, Jane Eyre, how can I love simply? (Haha, of course, it also reminded me of two other books, "Why Sheng Xiaomo" and "Jane Eyre". The author expressed his mind that Momo's thoughts tend to be random.) Later, I saw the names of the protagonists: Jian San and He Yongqi, which seemed to be a little interesting. (Quietly ask, is that so?) Let's get straight to the point! Momo felt that the beginning of the work was a bit jerky. Whether it was the language or the development of the story, some parts felt unreasonable. "There was a bang, and an unknown object hit the front of the car. It took He Yongqi a second to confirm that there was a car accident." The driver must be He Yongqi! There's no way you can't see someone bumping into you, right? The truck he was driving was not a large truck, and it was too high to see. "Miss, are you serious? I'll send you to the hospital first." If it's not serious, why don't you go to the hospital? It feels like the question is a bit strange, and the language is too literal. "Jian San, female, 26 years old", the heroine appears. This introduction is too simple, right? The characters given at the beginning are not clear, there is no deep impression, and the narrative is very bland. A good opening is the capital that attracts readers and is the criterion for readers to continue reading. Therefore, I hope the author can think about it again. At the beginning of the second chapter, between Jian San letting Jian Zhichen watch TV by herself and "Jian Zhichen didn't even look at her, staring at Zhu Bajie on the children's channel with bright eyes", I always felt that there was a bit of a transition missing. Didn't you just enter the house? Or as I mentioned before, he turned on the TV as soon as he entered the room and told Jian San how old you were. "So Jian Zhichen wants to make him happy with a happier and better childhood than her own." That doesn't make sense! The subject and the subject are inconsistent! Changing it to this might make it much clearer, "So for Jian Zhichen, she wanted to give him a happier and better childhood than herself to make him feel happy." "It's one of the drugs", he said it very awkwardly, and this sentence is still in the first sentence of the chapter. It's a flaw! "Wherever, if a beautiful woman like Director Yang, who is as beautiful as Director Yang, has to say this, all the ladies in our hotel should jump into the river." Such words were too inappropriate for the occasion! (Don't think Momo is being picky. That's how I feel about my fingers.) There are some sentences after that, but Momo won't list them one by one. I feel that the author's ability to organize language in the first few chapters is still a little immature, maybe because he is still a newbie, and it may be better to practice his writing more. I see a lot of people supporting Liu Ying's words, so keep up the good work! However, the subsequent description of the past events of Jian San, Lu Qifan and Jian Xinhui, and the description of Jian Xinhui's ambivalence are very exciting, and the writing style is also relatively skillful, so it is well written! It's obvious that the author has made progress! The boyfriend who had already discussed marriage had a relationship with his sister. Although it was just an accident, it caused pain to three people! My sister suffered from blood cancer and died prematurely because she insisted on giving birth to a child. Jian San became the baby's mother and has been taking good care of him. However, Lu Qifan always thought it was an erotic dream, but he and Jian San gradually drifted away because of this. The appearance of He Yongqi is a ray of sunshine for Jian San and a romantic encounter. The plot in the following article is particularly rich and touching, which makes me want to overturn the previous statement. Wow, I love the author's description of the rest of the story! The author's description in the following chapters is very different from the first dozen chapters, and it can even be said to be a leap. In the section where Lu Qifan meets Jian San and asks about the child, Jian San's reaction and psychological description are well grasped, making people become nervous along with Jian San because of the mystery of the child's life experience. The plot of the story is well grasped, making people fall into it unconsciously and eagerly looking forward to the subsequent plot. Yang Suhuai's sharpness and extremeness, Lu Qifan's despair and frustration, Jian San's transformation along the way, and He Yongqi's gentle companionship and care are such strong presences. The story suddenly became deeper and had a sense of layering. Ever since, the author's problem is obvious: start! You should always be careful when opening a chapter and choose your words carefully (actually it is not that demanding, at least it must be logical and make people feel reasonable.) Therefore, it is recommended that the author revise the first few chapters and pay attention to this issue in future chapters. There is also the issue of chapter word count. Some of the author's middle chapters only have a few hundred or more than a thousand words. This is not only detrimental to points, but also makes readers feel that the author is not practical and seems to be dealing with readers. Neither is good. As the number of words decreases, there are more chapters. Now the author has already reached 71 chapters before reaching 12,000 words, which seems very tiring. Neither is good. Therefore, I hope the author can pay attention to this issue in the future. I must have heard a lot of praise from the author, so Momo looked for shortcomings. If there is any bias, I hope Hai Hai will correct it! [Assorted comment shop]
Does He Yongqi look like Jane's Rochester?
I can learn this lip reading so quickly. . Like an agent. . Hey-hey. .
No matter how calm and calm He Yongqi appears on the outside, he must be experiencing unprecedented hardship and pressure in his heart right now, right? Fortunately, he is not a man who gives up easily. Regardless of career, life, or lover, if he has made up his mind, he will definitely stick to it to the end. It always feels like there are still many obstacles between the two. Perhaps in He Yongqi's view, Lu Qifan, Yang Suhuan and others do not pose a threat to them. It's a pity that Jian San definitely doesn't think so. She has always lived a cautious life, and she would feel excessively inferior when facing such an outstanding man as He Yongqi. In fact, why do you need to worry so much? It doesn't matter if you have no education or identity. These things are never what maintain true love. He is already good enough and does not need a woman with a distinguished family and outstanding ability to stand beside him to help him and make him even better. Jian San is kind and strong, and her unique charm is enough to give this man a reason to be attracted to her and make him pay attention to her until he can no longer look away. If it weren't for love, how could a proud and aloof man like He Yongqi be willing to pay for her? So she doesn't have to imagine herself to be so humble. She really deserves a more confident and colorful life, and deserves He Yongqi's love. I was really afraid that Jian San would do something stupid if she asked Lu to meet. I was also afraid that He Yongqi would misunderstand that she did this because their old relationship was unresolved = =. I wish she could just tell him everything, tell him her insecurities, tell him she's afraid of getting him hurt again, and then they can face it together. They both know that they like each other, but they are not completely sure of each other's feelings. But if they fall in love, they will be happy with this uncertainty. I was thinking, if Sansan was brave one day and confessed her love for He Yongqi in front of He Yongqi with a fearless spirit, what would He's expression be like? Hehe, I think he will be extremely shocked, and then turn into ecstasy. What's more satisfying than having love reciprocated? I really like these two characters, and I envy He Yongqi's mature and responsible feelings. Looking forward to the next plot developments and praying for them. PS, there is no need to rush. After all, things in life are more important. You can take your time when updating articles. = =.
Come on Yingying~ Take your time and don't rush~