Three Bamboos Stand Together

Okay, actually I didn't leave a comment on Viper, I just forwarded it when I saw it on the forum. . . To be honest, I think the author is a lively and energetic person. (Guess) After reading the preface, I felt a little confused. Then I read Chapter 1 and felt that the whole structure was a little scattered. (XiangSANWEN)

Talk. I think... Fire should overcome metal, and then... Metal should overcome wood. Look at the sky.

Let's talk about the copy first. The author's copywriting is a bit confusing. What message do you want to express? Does the first line [Male Protagonist: Black] describe attributes? What's going on with the thing at the back that looks like a character introduction? The three childhood sweethearts all lacked the five elements and gave them names that are worthy of ridicule... (I sincerely suggest that the heroine be renamed Yan Yan, and then Jin Xin, Tu Yao, so that metal, wood, water, fire and earth are all in the same place) There is no point, there is no point! However, the tone of the copywriting is very cheerful, and since the name and setting are so worthy of ridicule, the desire to see what will happen is also very strong~ So look forward to the location and enter the text~ Poof - LZ squirted a mouthful of water onto the computer screen. Author, how can you be so cute? QUQ, this article is full of flaws! LZ, who has so many flaws, didn't know he was going to vomit like this! (Turn over the table The article is very thin, so LZ read it in one sitting. Author GN The setting of your article is actually really cute, but why does the narrative feel so childish? This childishness is not due to the use of emoticons, or the cheerful tone of the heroine, but to the anecdotal story development. How should I put it, it feels like reading a junior high school student's diary. LZ doesn't know what kind of story the author wants to write. I read the copy and the existing articles but still can't get any clues. The happy and ambiguous college life of three people is like reporting what happened every day and writing about their four years and then OVER? Where is the theme of the story? LZ can't find it! Another thing I want to say is that the way your characters are introduced is very... Distinctive, with a uniform introduction. Three characters appear in the first chapter, three senior students who play soy sauce appear in the second chapter, two new characters and roommates appear in the third chapter, and two new characters appear in the fourth chapter... This frequency It's really too high. A new character is introduced before a character is completely created, and a bunch of descriptions of appearance are attached. I can't remember it (+1 for flipping the table). Moreover, the scenes after the appearance of those characters are quite soy sauce, there is no need to rush to reveal them all! The author of LZ Sensen was influenced by comics. Unlike comics, the writing does not have a direct image impression. The author needs to slowly penetrate the characters into the readers' hearts... The characters in the author's current articles are all two-dimensional and flat instead of flesh and blood. In summary, the author's setting is good, and the characters are cute; but the theme is unclear, the narrative is too plain and streamlined, and the characters appear too quickly, too complicated, and incompletely created. Another point, girl, your first-person cheerful narration tone and frequent emoticons will be liked by those who like it, but it will be very shocking by those who don't like it. It is a quite extreme narration method. Finally, I hope the girl will continue her efforts~

When I first read the text of this article, I thought it was an ancient proverb... [Sweat] Unexpectedly, it turned out to be a modern novel. I think the title "Three Bamboos Standing in Tripod" is very innovative, so this is one of the reasons that directly led me to mistakenly think that it is an ancient proverb... [Kan Zai Khan] But from the first chapter of the kiss, we were struck by the cuteness. To describe it in one word, it would be: cute; to describe it in two words, it would be very cute; to describe it in three words, it would be very cute! Ah... It's been a long time since we've seen such a cute article, so please give it a thumbs up! Then there is the character of the heroine in the article. I wonder if it is our misunderstanding. We felt that when the heroine stood in front of the two children (that is, her childhood sweethearts), we felt a little baffled. This scene suddenly happened. I think you can add some detailed descriptions on this matter so that the transition of the article will not be too rigid. The above statements are all my own thoughts. If I am wrong, please forgive me. Finally, I wish you the better as you write. PS: This is a very cute article. I hope you can carry out the "cute" feature to the end. I wish you success as you write more! Thumb

Come on, author, it's good to cheer yourself up. The author has just come to Jinjiang, so the number of words in the chapters is a little less. In Jinjiang, Shenma relies on points, and the number of words accounts for the largest proportion of points. Each chapter of 3,000 words or more is good. And you can climb the new list. Specifically, you can ask the authors around you what the new list is and how to climb it. You can also search on Baidu. Come on, take advantage of the opportunity you just posted!

Collect it first~~Read it slowly~~