When I see the Far East Army, I think of Zichuan, and when I look at it again, I think of the bandit...
Traces of history
Regarding the article "Longxing", I was almost shocked when I first read it - it turns out that there are people in Jinjiang who write such real and profound historical themes! I am really surprised and happy, and I admire your courage and magnanimity, Mu, because I think this genre is the most difficult type of story I have ever seen to write.
I originally planned to write a recommendation as soon as I finished reading it and put it in places like Bishui. However, after I finally figured out its historical background, I began to hesitate again - it was obviously about the Revolution of 1911 and the Anti-Japanese War. To be honest, I am not very interested in history, especially the part about modern history. This is of course my own flaw, but using this background to frame an article like this makes me feel a little confused about your original intention of writing this article. Mu, the Long Xing you wrote is probably based on □□, right? Although it is my guess, there should still be a lot of clues to follow - please forgive me if I guess wrong, my history is really not very good. So, what kind of point of view do you want to express? If this story was a completely fictional history, I shouldn't have such doubts, but there are actually many battles and names that people are familiar with, which makes me have all kinds of strange associations... I'm sorry, I didn't mean to belittle you. It is quite rare in Jinjiang to be able to write an article in such a grand manner, but to mention politics and the tragic history of the Chinese nation in such a veiled way is not serious enough? Moreover, the position of your characters is novel at best, but under our political conditions, it seems to be a bit confusing? I don't know if that's too much to say. Please forgive me, and forgive me, a person who is not very familiar with history, for speaking nonsense here.
Let's talk about the article itself. The first drawback is that the beginning is too confusing. I think some introductions in Chapter 3 might be better if they were introduced earlier. Your article needs to be read slowly in order to taste it, but here in Jinjiang, if the first chapter cannot attract people's attention, basically not many people will be able to read the rest. And I believe that not many people here have the patience to read this kind of story that is similar to a history book. I would like to say that if Mu treats it as an orthodox novel with a profound historical background, then don't expect it to be popular in Jinjiang. If you want your article to be popular, changing your style is the only feasible way - but I look at Mu's writing style and guess that your character is not the kind of person who gives in to the world, right? If this is indeed the case, while admiring me, I would like to advise my sister to write the article and submit it to some place that likes such articles, so that it can be useful - it may be easier to publish it in Taiwan, but it will be more difficult to publish it in mainland China.
The structure of the article is huge, but it feels a little confusing. I personally think that the lack of detail is one of the reasons. Long narratives often make people lose interest. In fact, the following chapters have greatly improved on this point, and the details are better than the first half. In addition, regarding the portrayal of characters, due to the large number of characters, it is probably inevitable to pay attention to one thing and lose the other. For example, the portrayal of Long Xing is not as plump and dazzling as Feng Wu. As the protagonist, it is a bit of a failure. I personally like Feng Wu the most, and Mu Mu must be the same? The creation of other characters is somewhat external and cannot penetrate deeply into the heart; some are just a formality and cannot leave a deep impression on people. After reading the text, you have to recall where this person appeared and what he did. Of course, maybe it's because I didn't look at it carefully enough, so please forgive me.
The last point is the connection between the plots. The connection between each chapter is mostly a bit abrupt. Would it be better if there were a few more lines at the end of the previous chapter? I always feel that this chapter is still unfinished, and the next chapter has already changed the door. The plot changes in another chapter are also a little hasty. In fact, I think some battles are boring, and some are too simple, mixed with the emotional changes of the characters, which makes it a bit confusing. Or after completing the full text, Mu can expand on some parts and write it into a grand historical volume - the premise is that the political views must be correct!
Don't be discouraged by the low number of clicks. I think "Longxing" is a very good article. Come on!
Sure enough, it's someone's one, Mu~~
I admit that this article is not as beautiful as the average Jinjiang novel, and not as powerful as the average Longkong novel. At least let's put the plot together.
I always feel that it is a bit strange for the emperor and queen to add family members and modern weapons.
And that's not to say it's impossible. How should I put it? When I look at it, I feel that all the products of time and space are mixed together and it's a bit confusing. It doesn't have its own characteristics, and it seems a bit nondescript.
I always feel that this kind of thing should have happened in a time similar to the late Qing Dynasty and the early Republic of China in China, but it has no taste at all. . . Sweat
Another point is that I don't know whether Mu is a boy or a girl, but I always feel that the momentum of the whole article is a bit inferior. I always feel that articles on this subject should give people a more powerful momentum.
- -|| I'm just talking casually, please forgive me for any inaccuracies.
This article is really great
But it gives me a headache when I look at it, and I don't really like this style.
Need a schematic
Just a gossipy question, is Mu a boy or a girl?
What a great article. How does the man named Yang who passed the revolutionary meeting look like Lao Mao? And Xuanyuan, could he be Premier Zhou?? I'm dizzy. The adult's writing is actually very wrong. I can write a picture of the current situation at that time. I inserted it directly into the text as soon as I started. There were so many relationships that made me dizzy. It took me a long time to figure it out. Haha, ^_^
I came to read your article, Mu.
Very good!
I have used your adult's pen name before
Looks like I'm not the only one who likes "mu"
When I see the Far East Army, I think of Zichuan, and when I look at it again, I think of the bandit...
Traces of history Regarding the article "Longxing", I was almost shocked when I first read it - it turns out that there are people in Jinjiang who write such real and profound historical themes! I am really surprised and happy, and I admire your courage and magnanimity, Mu, because I think this genre is the most difficult type of story I have ever seen to write. I originally planned to write a recommendation as soon as I finished reading it and put it in places like Bishui. However, after I finally figured out its historical background, I began to hesitate again - it was obviously about the Revolution of 1911 and the Anti-Japanese War. To be honest, I am not very interested in history, especially the part about modern history. This is of course my own flaw, but using this background to frame an article like this makes me feel a little confused about your original intention of writing this article. Mu, the Long Xing you wrote is probably based on □□, right? Although it is my guess, there should still be a lot of clues to follow - please forgive me if I guess wrong, my history is really not very good. So, what kind of point of view do you want to express? If this story was a completely fictional history, I shouldn't have such doubts, but there are actually many battles and names that people are familiar with, which makes me have all kinds of strange associations... I'm sorry, I didn't mean to belittle you. It is quite rare in Jinjiang to be able to write an article in such a grand manner, but to mention politics and the tragic history of the Chinese nation in such a veiled way is not serious enough? Moreover, the position of your characters is novel at best, but under our political conditions, it seems to be a bit confusing? I don't know if that's too much to say. Please forgive me, and forgive me, a person who is not very familiar with history, for speaking nonsense here. Let's talk about the article itself. The first drawback is that the beginning is too confusing. I think some introductions in Chapter 3 might be better if they were introduced earlier. Your article needs to be read slowly in order to taste it, but here in Jinjiang, if the first chapter cannot attract people's attention, basically not many people will be able to read the rest. And I believe that not many people here have the patience to read this kind of story that is similar to a history book. I would like to say that if Mu treats it as an orthodox novel with a profound historical background, then don't expect it to be popular in Jinjiang. If you want your article to be popular, changing your style is the only feasible way - but I look at Mu's writing style and guess that your character is not the kind of person who gives in to the world, right? If this is indeed the case, while admiring me, I would like to advise my sister to write the article and submit it to some place that likes such articles, so that it can be useful - it may be easier to publish it in Taiwan, but it will be more difficult to publish it in mainland China. The structure of the article is huge, but it feels a little confusing. I personally think that the lack of detail is one of the reasons. Long narratives often make people lose interest. In fact, the following chapters have greatly improved on this point, and the details are better than the first half. In addition, regarding the portrayal of characters, due to the large number of characters, it is probably inevitable to pay attention to one thing and lose the other. For example, the portrayal of Long Xing is not as plump and dazzling as Feng Wu. As the protagonist, it is a bit of a failure. I personally like Feng Wu the most, and Mu Mu must be the same? The creation of other characters is somewhat external and cannot penetrate deeply into the heart; some are just a formality and cannot leave a deep impression on people. After reading the text, you have to recall where this person appeared and what he did. Of course, maybe it's because I didn't look at it carefully enough, so please forgive me. The last point is the connection between the plots. The connection between each chapter is mostly a bit abrupt. Would it be better if there were a few more lines at the end of the previous chapter? I always feel that this chapter is still unfinished, and the next chapter has already changed the door. The plot changes in another chapter are also a little hasty. In fact, I think some battles are boring, and some are too simple, mixed with the emotional changes of the characters, which makes it a bit confusing. Or after completing the full text, Mu can expand on some parts and write it into a grand historical volume - the premise is that the political views must be correct! Don't be discouraged by the low number of clicks. I think "Longxing" is a very good article. Come on!
Sure enough, it's someone's one, Mu~~
I admit that this article is not as beautiful as the average Jinjiang novel, and not as powerful as the average Longkong novel. At least let's put the plot together.
I always feel that it is a bit strange for the emperor and queen to add family members and modern weapons. And that's not to say it's impossible. How should I put it? When I look at it, I feel that all the products of time and space are mixed together and it's a bit confusing. It doesn't have its own characteristics, and it seems a bit nondescript. I always feel that this kind of thing should have happened in a time similar to the late Qing Dynasty and the early Republic of China in China, but it has no taste at all. . . Sweat Another point is that I don't know whether Mu is a boy or a girl, but I always feel that the momentum of the whole article is a bit inferior. I always feel that articles on this subject should give people a more powerful momentum. - -|| I'm just talking casually, please forgive me for any inaccuracies.
This article is really great But it gives me a headache when I look at it, and I don't really like this style. Need a schematic Just a gossipy question, is Mu a boy or a girl?
What a great article. How does the man named Yang who passed the revolutionary meeting look like Lao Mao? And Xuanyuan, could he be Premier Zhou?? I'm dizzy. The adult's writing is actually very wrong. I can write a picture of the current situation at that time. I inserted it directly into the text as soon as I started. There were so many relationships that made me dizzy. It took me a long time to figure it out. Haha, ^_^
I came to read your article, Mu.
Very good!
I have used your adult's pen name before Looks like I'm not the only one who likes "mu"