[Sherlock Holmes] The Book of Janus

The introduction was about him, and then I saw that she was a girl, and she felt like she was eating shit_(:з∠)_

Dear ╭(╯3╰)╮, happy July~ The heavy exams are over, and the friendly summer vacation is finally coming On such a good day, my mood seems to be much better, This article really made me... How should I put it, it seemed like it was the first time I read a Sherlock Holmes fanfic. When I accepted the review, I was filled with trepidation, fearing that I didn't understand the characters of that era. Fortunately, the article is not long, and the copy reveals that the author's writing skills are not weak. I came in with interest Let's get to the point [Long comment for Xiaoqing and Abu]—— European-style writing can be regarded as a Western preference. This style often gives the illusion of reading the translated text of a classic. From the tip of the pen at the beginning of the article, there is such a strong Western color. Just as the text says, those speeding carriages, those gas lamps that glow dimly at night, those Earl Gray tea accompanied by the ringing of afternoon tea bells. Just thinking about it, I can't help but fall in love with it. Copywriting The copy has a lot of words, and I became very interested in the introduction of Janus. The god of time, looking at the past and the future, is really a mysterious and attractive figure. The text briefly introduced the male protagonist, and Sherlock Holmes was also mentioned, but there was no mention of the female protagonist or other characters. I almost thought this was a danbi article [Fujoshi Mudou] My personal suggestion is that you can talk about other characters, and you can also introduce more about the exciting plot to attract readers' attention. Character There are actually not many characters when they first appear, but because they are foreign names, the translation will inevitably be a bit long, such as: Ruth, Roberta, Spann, Ellen, Poe, Jack, London. It is recommended that unimportant characters be simplified for the first time, such as the dog. [Article/Style] I am very partial to the writing style, but it may be a matter of two people co-writing, which may deviate from the style of writing. Another very important issue is that blindly pursuing gorgeousness and literature in language can easily weaken the sense of plot of the article. As far as I am concerned, when I am surrounded by gorgeous words, I lack the ease that reading text should have. There will be some passages that you can't read in one go, and you have to read them slowly to understand them. To give a few examples: ①It was as cold as the year-round weather in the land where the Edinburgh accent he was about to imitate was located. I was a little distracted while reading this sentence, which means I had to read the last sentence twice before I understood it [you idiot] ②Time seems to flow ruthlessly through the coffee shop and on the heart with this gentleman's winding narrative like London's famous Serpentine Lake. If it is so difficult to understand, I really need a physical book and a pen to draw wavy lines while reading, otherwise I will definitely miss a beautiful sentence. In fact, through online reading, through the rapid movement of the mouse, a relaxed sentence segment appears directly facing the reader. Xiaoqing and Abu can consider some sentences to be more civilian and normalize the word order. [Ideas] The foreshadowing of ideas is one of the highlights of the article. The reasoning plot is great. I feel that the author has a clear outline and is unfolding his carefully laid out things to the readers step by step. I hope I can stick to it. Does this count as a big bet ⑦? (⊙O⊙) Overall I'm sincerely glad that this article doesn't have to focus on simple words and short sentences. The author's writing style is great and allows me to appreciate the details. Looking forward to the following, the plot development and conflicts can be strengthened again!!! {Liangpin Changping Shop Changan Chichi} ~\\(≧▽≦)/~

Why haven't you updated it yet?! Where did you die?!

Hey, I thought you had updated it.

In fact, I don't understand why this article needs to be co-written by two authors. If we are honest, Abu's ability to control words is indeed inferior to Xiaoqing, and some of the reasoning plots are quite far-fetched compared to Xiaoqing. Although it seems that the two authors are "classmates", Abu's writing style is indeed immature, and the details are not carefully dealt with. The two authors have different styles, but the feeling of Xiaoqing's article is more suitable for this era. I don't know if Abu will be angry, but I just expressed my feelings.

I feel very confused about so many names.

Ah, Ah Qing, you are the kind of person who doesn't beat me and doesn't write anything... Right?

Shit, here I come~~~ I can't stand you! Our Xiaoqing is really good~ [Applause] I always support you and Abu~~

What is the background music? It sounds good

Come on, Xiao Qingjun~ I'm waiting for Ke Luo and Xiao Fu to meet...