Love is like playing chess: you need an opponent. Only when both sides are evenly matched can the fun last.
Let's see how Lin Yi and Shen Rui warmly scheme against each other in love.
How will she counter every move?
How will he stay one step ahead, no matter how clever she is?
(This is my first novel. My friends' comments were: The plot is bland, with few twists and turns; the sentences don't flow very smoothly, and some of the word choices are a little exaggerated. I hope everyone will take the time to offer some guidance.)
Theme:
I have read a chapter today. It lacks facial expressions and psychological portrayal of the characters. The language is too written.
When I first read it, my first impression was that LZ should portray herself as the leading actor/heroine.
It's not tacky, it's energetic, and it really gives people a relaxed and happy feeling. Yes, the plot is quite imaginative and the language is clever, but the rhythm and tension of the storytelling are not enough.
The description of the urban management characters is not very good! The contradictions are not outstanding! There is no plot to the story! And the foreshadowing for the first meeting between the two protagonists is not very good! If only the contradiction between Shen Rui and the urban management could be highlighted! Lin Yi joins. Then the second meeting will be dramatic!
I want to eat meat... T^T
What a kiss from CJ~~ shy
I like female pigs~~so refreshing~
A sense of familiarity comes over me, author girl, I love you!! ^_^
Although I have undergone a major revision, I feel that the author's level is still very good, but I feel that writing such a novel should require experience.
Yes, the writing is delicate, the feeling is fresh, and there is a faint joy in my heart.