A wuxia-world version of Romeo and Juliet...
The feud in which the leaders of two great clans kill each other every thirty years came to an end in a great fire atop Biluotai,
unveiling a buried story from twenty years ago.
One was a wandering dragon, the other a startled swan.
They were once a pair made for each other, but what had caused them to turn against one another twenty years ago?
What is the truth behind the fragments of a broken past?
"I searched the heavens above and the underworld below, yet found nowhere we could live together in peace."
Ahem, I'm a new author, writing during winter break. This is a novella, so I'll be off now...
I hope you'll give me plenty of advice. Flowers and bricks are all welcome!
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Spread flowers and cheer! The writing is quite steady and smooth.
Romeo and Juliet, like Liang Shanbo and Zhu Yingtai, are mine... I guess I won't accept them anymore, just give me more flowers to support...
After reading Chapter 7, I no longer have the patience to read any more. There are many problems, the most obvious being varying degrees of drag on the language and plot. To tell a suspenseful story from different angles, one must not only pay attention to the appropriate transitions, but also the writing skills are also very important. There are many descriptions and lines in the article that are too cumbersome, and there are frequent inappropriate wordings. I will not give examples here one by one. When the author writes more and more articles and his writing skills become more solid, you will look back at this article and you will see which words are used inappropriately. The story itself is still beautiful. From the initial guesses of the tea guests, the shopkeeper's report, and the white-faced maid's narration, one can vaguely feel that there must be an unknown story behind the various rumors about the two protagonists. Later, the truth is further unfolded from the perspective of the moon. I have to say that this method of storytelling is very wonderful. It is like making a suspense movie, peeling off the truth layer by layer to the audience. But this way of writing is rarely used because it is too difficult to master. If you pursue a gorgeous style of writing, you must pay attention to the smoothness of the sentences. Gorgeousness is a beautiful thing and does not conflict with simplicity. I have seen some authors describe beautiful pictures with very simple sentences, but when I took those sentences apart, I found that they were composed of some ordinary words. Too many words can make it difficult for the author to grasp the balance and make readers unable to grasp the key points. It is best to start with simple sentences when you first start writing, and gradually add key words to them. (Actually, there are several wonderful descriptions in the article.) The story made me look forward to it, but the sluggish way of writing broke my patience. I have saved the article and will read it when I have the patience to come back. The above are my true thoughts after reading it. If it offends the author, please delete it. Writing requires accumulation just like reading. As you write more and more articles, you will naturally get better and better. Until inspiration comes to me, I can put pen to paper. I hope the author can do this one day.
There is no place for you and me to stay together in peace. The title is unique and the truth in it is heartbreaking.
The author is so quick, I collected it first~
The story unfolding from other people's mouth really piqued my curiosity. Without further ado, continue reading. Come on, author!
Yes, yes, the most important thing is to persist.