An Encounter Beneath the Pagoda Tree

You focused on the male protagonist's perspective. Why are there other perspectives in the article? Sometimes I, sometimes the male protagonist, and sometimes the female protagonist? It's very confusing [Eh~] The writing is good, but the character design is not visible yet [Loading]

You really scared me Why not divide it into sections, and then divide it a little bit later, but you have to divide it into more sections, it looks so tiring. First-person perspective is okay, I thought you were writing a diary. Your writing is so good, I envy you. But your big problem is that you don't divide it into paragraphs. You tell the story from the first point of view instead of him telling the story. What happened? The one about transferring to school needs to be written from a third perspective. You are the main God's perspective and the character's first perspective. Do you understand? If you look at other questions, you will know how to write them immediately. Your writing skills are very good, but the remaining questions are huge.