The story is good, but the pace is too fast. It feels like I am always rushing forward without caring about anything else.
Past events, emotional development, psychological evolution of characters, and even sensationalism... How many things can be expanded~
Like. . . However, I can actually write a longer one. . That way the characters will be more fleshed out
I like your work very much! I hope you can continue writing!
It's not just an ordinary scrawl, there's only a rough outline of the story, but the character descriptions aren't deep enough.
In the end, it turned out to be HE. I thought the abuse would continue.
Good writing, good writing~~That's the ending
Well, I didn't expect the hasty ending...
Alas, sacrifice always hurts.
The emotional entanglements of the previous generation...
Ah, this is the ending. The story is pretty good, but if the details can be expanded upon, the plot will be richer.
The story is good, but the pace is too fast. It feels like I am always rushing forward without caring about anything else. Past events, emotional development, psychological evolution of characters, and even sensationalism... How many things can be expanded~
Like. . . However, I can actually write a longer one. . That way the characters will be more fleshed out
I like your work very much! I hope you can continue writing!
It's not just an ordinary scrawl, there's only a rough outline of the story, but the character descriptions aren't deep enough.
In the end, it turned out to be HE. I thought the abuse would continue.
Good writing, good writing~~That's the ending
Well, I didn't expect the hasty ending...
Alas, sacrifice always hurts.
The emotional entanglements of the previous generation...
Ah, this is the ending. The story is pretty good, but if the details can be expanded upon, the plot will be richer.