Children, please pause this article until I finish "I Love the Goddess" and then come back to it.
Make a fist! I will definitely work hard! ! !
Her childhood wish was to become a famous pastry chef in mainland China
But fate pushed her step by step away from her ordinary dream
It is destined that she cannot be an ordinary person
Yes, fate can be changed, but she can't
The price for defying fate will be losing him forever
In order to prevent him from disappearing into eternal darkness, she embarks on a journey to find the fragments of his soul
Let fate decide, step by step on the road to becoming a queen
A relaxing and loving conclusion----------"The difference between a man and a woman"
A relaxing and loving conclusion----------"The Beauty Arrives"
New pit---------"I Love Goddess"
Reader comments
It's really drunken sex! Don't even know what happened? ? ? ? ? ?
Why is there still no trace of 00?
I really don't know when I can see the complete color 2
This book was unfinished when I read it two years ago, and it is still unfinished two years later. QAQ author, please spare my life. This book has become my obsession. I beg for updates!
Not feeling OTZ
Haven't seen it
Follow me from Beauty Drive. Ah! ~I'm going to start squatting again
I come from BS to support LZ. I have asked the person who is about to die of pain in Xihuan Danmei to say... Hold hands~hug~=3=
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Like other ngs said, LZ should change the names. This kind of combination of Chinese and Western things looks the most uncomfortable.
Using things like a kingdom, a mayor, and a war academy with Ergou, Chen Yifan, gives people a very disharmonious feeling.
If you want to use a "cheap name" like Ergou, you can directly consider names like Paul (meaning fool) or John (bad street). You will know that you are a passerby at a glance and can be clearly distinguished from the protagonist. By the way, the combination of Chen + Ergou... Reminds me... Uh... Of... Beacon Fire...
Then, the "test paper" is actually... How should I put it... It looks quite uncomfortable... It feels like time and space traveled through thousands of years and then mixed up various things and pieced them together... (Indicating that the first reaction after seeing the Western Fantasy was to bring it into the European medieval background) LZ, you actually did not fully reveal the characteristics of this time and space in the first chapter... For example, people's living standards, social customs, daily necessities, technological level (? If there is any) These things can be brought out through dialogue actions... Maybe I scanned these three chapters too fast? 0 0 I haven't formed a general impression at all... Could you please tell me whether this should use a European medieval background? Or is it a medieval fantasy? Or the future? Or is it completely empty?
When I read the second chapter, I had a distinct feeling - a novice guide for playing online games... We have these professional balabala... This information is placed in the work related section and can be read or not... Because most readers will involuntarily skip these long paragraphs of career introduction and background information (such as me) [The emphasis is on large paragraphs, mine are large paragraphs. Duan Zhi, more than 200 words]... In fact, these things can be slowly understood by readers through various channels... Myths and legends, a certain great hero passed down by word of mouth, parents chanting about the protagonist when he was a child, the protagonist going to the library to look up information, chatting among classmates, etc... It is not necessary to instill them all at once through this novice guide. This kind of indoctrination actually puts a lot of pressure on readers.
Also, in Chapter 3, the problem is the same as above, but the background information and names are Westernized. His classmates are all Westerners. Why is the protagonist named Chen Yifan? ! This civilization should obviously be a story about cultivation + upgrading + occasional jq... But this comparison is just like time travel... 0 0 By the way, are you sure this is really not time travel?
Okay, so much nonsense... I feel so sweaty just looking at it...
The main thing is to change the name Chen Yifan. If you want a Western fantasy, be more thorough and don't mix Chinese elements with modern elements...
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Well, I don't dare to support LZ in bs anyway, HJJ is too kb and not suitable for blx kids like me.
Let's just say it in the book review below this article: "Come on, LZ~Ignore those who are too excited."
╮(╯_╰)╭ Finally saw a man writing a beautiful article again (the first one I saw was Feitian)... Excited...(Is there anyone else? Please educate me...)
Why don't you leave your contact information? Please communicate privately... JJ is really DT without a website shortcut, but I guess I don't dare to use it if I have a website shortcut. Who knows if it will cause...
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= 0 I suddenly realized... It's already over a thousand words... So embarrassing... Come on, for the sake of me being so good to you... Please hook up~
It's really drunken sex! Don't even know what happened? ? ? ? ? ?
Why is there still no trace of 00?
I really don't know when I can see the complete color 2
This book was unfinished when I read it two years ago, and it is still unfinished two years later. QAQ author, please spare my life. This book has become my obsession. I beg for updates!
Not feeling OTZ Haven't seen it
Follow me from Beauty Drive. Ah! ~I'm going to start squatting again
I come from BS to support LZ. I have asked the person who is about to die of pain in Xihuan Danmei to say... Hold hands~hug~=3= -------- Like other ngs said, LZ should change the names. This kind of combination of Chinese and Western things looks the most uncomfortable. Using things like a kingdom, a mayor, and a war academy with Ergou, Chen Yifan, gives people a very disharmonious feeling. If you want to use a "cheap name" like Ergou, you can directly consider names like Paul (meaning fool) or John (bad street). You will know that you are a passerby at a glance and can be clearly distinguished from the protagonist. By the way, the combination of Chen + Ergou... Reminds me... Uh... Of... Beacon Fire... Then, the "test paper" is actually... How should I put it... It looks quite uncomfortable... It feels like time and space traveled through thousands of years and then mixed up various things and pieced them together... (Indicating that the first reaction after seeing the Western Fantasy was to bring it into the European medieval background) LZ, you actually did not fully reveal the characteristics of this time and space in the first chapter... For example, people's living standards, social customs, daily necessities, technological level (? If there is any) These things can be brought out through dialogue actions... Maybe I scanned these three chapters too fast? 0 0 I haven't formed a general impression at all... Could you please tell me whether this should use a European medieval background? Or is it a medieval fantasy? Or the future? Or is it completely empty? When I read the second chapter, I had a distinct feeling - a novice guide for playing online games... We have these professional balabala... This information is placed in the work related section and can be read or not... Because most readers will involuntarily skip these long paragraphs of career introduction and background information (such as me) [The emphasis is on large paragraphs, mine are large paragraphs. Duan Zhi, more than 200 words]... In fact, these things can be slowly understood by readers through various channels... Myths and legends, a certain great hero passed down by word of mouth, parents chanting about the protagonist when he was a child, the protagonist going to the library to look up information, chatting among classmates, etc... It is not necessary to instill them all at once through this novice guide. This kind of indoctrination actually puts a lot of pressure on readers. Also, in Chapter 3, the problem is the same as above, but the background information and names are Westernized. His classmates are all Westerners. Why is the protagonist named Chen Yifan? ! This civilization should obviously be a story about cultivation + upgrading + occasional jq... But this comparison is just like time travel... 0 0 By the way, are you sure this is really not time travel? Okay, so much nonsense... I feel so sweaty just looking at it... The main thing is to change the name Chen Yifan. If you want a Western fantasy, be more thorough and don't mix Chinese elements with modern elements... ___________________ Well, I don't dare to support LZ in bs anyway, HJJ is too kb and not suitable for blx kids like me. Let's just say it in the book review below this article: "Come on, LZ~Ignore those who are too excited." ╮(╯_╰)╭ Finally saw a man writing a beautiful article again (the first one I saw was Feitian)... Excited...(Is there anyone else? Please educate me...) Why don't you leave your contact information? Please communicate privately... JJ is really DT without a website shortcut, but I guess I don't dare to use it if I have a website shortcut. Who knows if it will cause... ========= = 0 I suddenly realized... It's already over a thousand words... So embarrassing... Come on, for the sake of me being so good to you... Please hook up~