I Transmigrated into The Return of the Condor Heroes, So I Hid in Shaolin to Master Nine Yang

One thing to say, this novel is well written. The plot setting of teasing Li Mochou is very novel at the beginning. The characterization is also more vivid. Give the author some advice. I hope they won't randomly recruit female leads in the future, and just accept Li Mochou. Otherwise, it is easy to focus on one thing and lose the other. If it is not written well, it will become a harem novel. Another suggestion is not to follow Yang Guo's route, otherwise it will deviate too much from the original work and there will be no sense of immersion. The plot can be written more around the conflict between the Mingjiao and the Beggar Clan. At this time, during the Lizong period of the Song Dynasty, the Mingjiao sect advocated three guns to start an uprising in Jiangxi. The Beggar Gang secretly assassinated the leader of the Mingjiao sect, which led to the failure of the Mingjiao sect. The protagonist saves Zhang Sanqiang, who is seriously injured and on the verge of death. Before his death, Zhang Sanqiang entrusts the protagonist to help take care of the Ming Cult as they move to the Western Regions. At this time, Shaolin Huo Gong Tutuo escaped for twenty years and founded the Vajra Sect in the Western Regions. Zen Master Ku Hui also traveled to the Western Regions and prepared to establish Shaolin in the Western Regions. I hope that the protagonist can start from these aspects and go to the Western Regions. Rich plot. Then rush back before the Dashengguan Heroes Conference to participate in the development of the original plot. What does the author think?

After reading it for a few days, I feel pretty good. I have only written dozens of chapters now. I would like to give some suggestions to the author, which may be somewhat helpful for your subsequent writing. First, don't impose too many secrets on the protagonist, otherwise you'll have to pick up secrets wherever you go, which will become a commonplace. With Jiuyang as the foundation of internal strength, there is no need to practice other internal skills and mental methods. It doesn't matter how much internal strength you have learned, one plus one equals two. The fuel tank is just that big after all. As for the palm technique, other book friends suggested that the protagonist start a plot with Mingjiao, Huo Gong Tutuo and Ku Hui. There is absolutely a chance to learn the Great Vajra Palm or Prajna Palm from Ku Hui. Both of these sects are not weak to the Eighteen Dragon Subduing Palms. There is no need to chase the dragon in the same way every time. As for the Great Shift, the protagonist can have some drama with the Mingjiao. Firstly, it can gain magical power, and secondly, it can enrich the plot. The second suggestion is the same as other book friends' comments, just include a female protagonist. The third suggestion is not to affect too much the plot of the original work, nor to affect the historical trend. The outstanding characteristics of martial arts novels are love and justice, not hegemony. Many authors get stuck while writing. Finally, I wish the author's book will be on the hot list. Come on!

The book is quite good and the author is very active. I wonder why the rating is so low?

Take Li Mochou away The author is so stubborn, Yang Guo is like the protagonist in this book

The plot of the story is exciting and exciting. It is a very interesting novel.

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

How can an author make money if he doesn't update 10,000 words a day? There is traffic and there are many people watching, so it is even more important to update more [shy]

Good, good-looking, really good-looking. …

A good martial arts fanfic

Yes, the description is detailed, the plot is closely connected, and it has connotation. It is worth watching.