The Outcast: From the Start, I Become a Member of the Lu Family

Well written. It would be better if the protagonist is not a girl control, comparable to Sa Itachi The rest of the story is a bit boring. The protagonist has seen through the world of mortals when he was a teenager... (Has the total of his two lifetimes been over forty? [Laughs and cries]) Then he wanders around in the world and encounters bullshit, and then solves the problem of recruiting disciples.

It looks very nice, but I have two small comments. The first one is that at the beginning, the description of Goldfinger was a bit stiff, and the introduction of 100 years was very abrupt. The second thing is to deal with the relationship with the family. He is not just a sister. He has parents and family members. Don't act like a sister-controller. Uchiha Itachi? But the second one depends on the subsequent plot.

AI retouching marks are serious

It's not bad. Now that I see a fan's requirements, I have really lowered my requirements. It's good if there aren't any big mistakes. 👍 The AI flavor is too strong, the starting sentence is very long, and it's uncomfortable to watch.

Author, you are guilty of making me addicted to books, do you know? Can't see the book, crawling in the dark... Crawling... Crawling... Crawling... Crawling... Crawling... Walking [sneaky laugh] [sneaky smile] [sneaky smile] [sneaky smile]

Chapter 10: What novel are you putting on the shelf? 🙂 Do you know the feeling of getting stuck in the middle of reading?

The content is good, and there is no obvious AI feeling. Disadvantages: The author is too short.

There is nothing wrong with the thirty chapters so far, it has the flavor of one person

It's very interesting, keep writing, there are just some details that need attention!

Very good, very strong one-person flavor