A New Life as a Human Girl, Starting This Winter Break

It is almost the most realistic and humanistic novel about transformation/time travel that I have ever read. It can be seen that the author is not very skilled in writing, but the writing is very good and the ideas are very good. I hope to continue writing. It was the first time I saw this kind of book that made me curious and then my eyes lit up. I really don't like reading cool articles, but this kind of realistic subject matter is really good.

It's a very durable young fanfic. It's not clear yet that the author is really serious enough to write about changing marriages. The advantages are obvious. The author has carefully planned the book. Judging from the nearly ten chapters of an ordinary trip to school, there are enough foreshadowings in the later chapters, and it cannot be called a mess with too many foreshadowings. At least it is more stable than my "Sea Power". As for the shortcomings, it may be that it is too procrastinating. After all, there are 10 chapters to prepare for going to a school... However, these ten chapters do put enough effort into burying some gadgets. If this is the author's Virgo sign, then the author has great writing potential. Above If the author wants to reopen, the current chapter layout is a sinkhole, which will dissuade most passers-by, even some readers who are not very sentimental. My suggestion is to start a new book directly, or revise the structure, throw away the scraps, or post it in your own book club.

I have also thought about the idea of ​​the protagonist turning into a human form, but my idea at the time was that the protagonist was transformed into a human form after discovering the ruins, and his body was a scarecrow. The male protagonist was retired from the Army's special operations, and then he killed people all over the world [face covering]

Brainstorming [Like] But the chapter setting is confusing. I suggest that paragraphs or chapters such as [Character Settings] and [Background Supplement] should be integrated into a volume [Setting Collection] and placed at the beginning of the novel, which can be set as [Volume 0]; and a mark should be placed after the chapter name of the [Supplementary Explanation] chapter in the main plot to avoid indistinguishability, such as adding "(Supplementary Explanation)" [Salute][Salute][Salute] There is also a problem with the person. The first person and the third person are used interchangeably. If you don't explain it at the beginning of the article, it will be very confusing, and some even change the person in the chapter [send heart][send heart][send heart]

The writing is okay, the characters you write are very real, and Lao Zhou did what I would only do in my dreams. Half a year ago, I turned into 40 twice in my dreams. I practiced shooting and did missions with the 45-year-old girl in the dream. The 45-year-old girl in the dream was really gentle. Well, that's a bit off topic, but it's really great to be able to see the author write what I wanted to write a year ago! After reading your book, I feel better after being depressed by life.

I must keep writing it, it's very good, I finally found a book about Shaoqian's change of marriage.

Let's see at what point. First, as a 45 chef, I have met a lot of other 45 chefs, and I have also met 9 sister chefs, but 40 chefs are really rare, so this can be considered a kind of support. Second, I haven't read many books on this subject, and this author's book is the first book on this subject that I have read. Third, there are really too few early works on foreign persimmons, and the author's book is considered to be of high quality. Fourth, the author must have an understanding of Shaoqian's worldview, and he wanted me to learn about the worldview in disguise. Based on this, I am willing to give it five stars. I hope the author will get better and better, keep it up. One additional point. After reading most of the chapters, I feel that the structure is a little confusing (?) And I feel like I have put together a good book. I suggest that the author can improve it when he has time.

The book is very nice, but I can't make an objective and clear evaluation due to its current size (I've already said all that needs to be said about the former) At least for me personally, this is one of the same type of fanfics that I can and like to read in Shaoqian. I also helped create the book cover The only problem I want to say is that the author may lack self-confidence and self-doubt. Of course, this is what I said in the article. Find what you think, there is no other meaning. The author can be more confident and write according to his own ideas. Readers should not put pressure on you (personal views should be viewed rationally) (¬▂¬)

It feels okay, I hope the author can continue writing it

It's okay [I learned it] It's a bit confusing in the middle but it gets better later on, remember to find a better cover