National Fate: Playing Doma from the Start

I think it looks pretty good after watching the early stage, but it must be free of cp [crying]

It is very good at the moment, it completely fits the original work, and the writing is good and there is no AI. However, if the proficiency of this card is maxed out in the later stage, the second card obtained will be a poisonous point if not dealt with properly. After all, most people currently come here for grinding. My feeling is not to change it. Now I accept it all without getting the settings, otherwise it will be poorly written. This book is very good, with good character design, and good writing. I will write an infinite stream directly, and it will definitely be popular. In fact, it is handled well. One of the disadvantages is that you can switch roles instantly, which is not acting at all, but there are many branch lines. It is obvious that dots are used to bring out a world view. However, the problem with this writing method is that it takes time to connect the dots into a line. Connecting the lines into a plane takes time. Although the branch lines are well written, they are only good. It is difficult for people to have the desire to read more. It is more necessary to connect the branch lines with the protagonist, not too tightly, but it cannot be like a separate story that can be read separately.

A very good book\^O^/ The character of Mo Mo Tou is not OOC at all, and the writing style is also very good. Members of the team can read it with confidence. It can be said that the quality is very good among Demon Slayer fans.

The first part is really good, but the second part is mostly about memories... In fact, I feel like I don't particularly like to read the story of the protagonist of Under the Skin. I just hope that the author has fewer memories. That is, most of the main text is about acting, because I feel that a lot of the latter part is about reviewing the protagonist of Under the Skin (just a suggestion)

Looks good, looks good, looks good, looks good, looks good, looks good! So pretty! The character creation is really perfect. Well, maybe Tongmo itself is easy to write, but it is very beautiful! There is no serious drawback at all! … In the later period, the protagonist always discussed his high school life as Tong Mo, which was a drama... Well... No one suspected that Tong Mo was actually a high school student... Even the official record (tampered by the system) of the school that Tong Mo attended... Hmm... It feels like there is a risk of forced intelligence reduction. What else can you say? The author is too temperamental, do you think this is nonsense? A good author for the people, this book deserves to be popular

I read more than a dozen chapters and thought it was very good! But from my personal point of view, some places don't look very good (just a personal point of view!) 1. As a ghost and a child, the sense of inhumanity is too low. I understand that this is just an acting, but it is a bit out of place because of the inhumanity that is not so consistent with the original work (but it is understandable if the author really wants to create a "protagonist" with such a low inhumanity) 2. There is a conflict between flashback memory and words. As a child, it is impossible that he has never eaten people (but the "protagonist" has indeed never eaten people). At this time, I personally feel that some acting points can be deducted. 3. The barrage is really too dramatic. He is so cute and handsome all the time... Mo Mo Tou is very cute and handsome, but I think real people would be panicked and afraid after seeing Mo Mo Tou's true face. He was afraid that what he told was a lie (he had never eaten anyone), he was afraid that the ghosts he said existed in reality would come to him, and he was afraid that the people around him were also evil man-eating ghosts. As a national destiny, the real world and our attitude towards two-dimensional characters are absolutely different! (Refer to our three times and the team members and ordinary people who know ghosts in the original world of Demon Slayer: Kimetsu no Yaiba) At present, I only see these questions in Chapter 17. Maybe I will add more after reading it (?) Also give encouragement to the author! It can be seen that the author really likes the character of Mo Mo Tou~ Although it is not very inhumane! But in fact, the character and actions, as well as the psychological description of certain acting moments, are very close to each other, and the interaction is also very interesting! I want to see the "protagonist" act without misery and bloodshed! ✧*｡٩(ˊᗜˋ*)و✧*｡ So I'll give it five stars. So far, except for my personal aspects, it's really good! After reading it in one sitting, my impression improved a lot! Generally speaking, I feel that there is a sense of inhumanity and inadequacy? The feeling of inhumanity improves a lot later, and it feels like a ghost) Now I'm very curious about the "main character"! I'm really looking forward to the author's description of the "protagonist", but while focusing on it, don't forget to play the role! In fact, I have always been a protagonist. Hey, this feeling of doubts is really uncomfortable, but the more foreshadowing, the more exciting the story will be. I can see that the author now wants to tell the story of the "protagonist", but does the author still have no outline? If there is a two-line narrative, I feel it is better to write a Jian Gang, otherwise it will easily collapse later. . . I hope that while the "protagonist" is hanging on the wall, no one can beat him. I want to watch a cool fight scene with a sense of evenly matched power, which is the most enjoyable! If the next dungeon is Muichiro, I can't imagine what the next dungeon will be like... I'm really curious and excited! This book is now a treasure trove. No matter what kind of dungeon the next one is, single player or multiplayer, I'm so excited! In fact, what I wanted to see later on at the beginning was the gradual integration of the "protagonist" and the role he plays. Everything was forgotten at first, but now I am more curious about the story of the "protagonist" himself!

Well, I won't praise anyone, I can only say that the author's writing is really great. I don't see anything OOC at the moment. It was really cool to write! Well, I probably read it when it was about 10 chapters old. I didn't pay attention to the chapters at first. It wasn't until I suddenly saw the shitty yellow button that I understood the seriousness of the matter. Is it my destiny to like serialized articles? [Laughs] I also want to ask, will the protagonist continue to play the role of a child molester, or will he become another character? I can only say that I can clearly feel that the author's writing is getting better and better. These shortcomings are slowly changing, and I can really see that the author is really making progress little by little, so please update more by the author. It is rare to find a book that suits my taste, in which the national fortune plays the role of a child. I hope that one day I can wake up and read the author's 100th chapter [Adoration] After typing, I realized that I seemed to have said a bit too much [face covering] Anyway, come on, author!

It's good-looking and fits the character's personality, but it's just that there are few reviews so I can't rate it.

The teacher's writing is super good~ After reading it around, I feel that the grinding head written by the teacher has no OOC at all, it is so realistic! Super awesome!

Hey hey hey so pretty🥺 Men are menstruating when they see it 🙄 Women get crazy when they see it 💪 This is the nemesis of depression 😎 It's the alarm clock for vegetative people 😭 So cute that tears flow out of the corners of the mouth and flood into the Qiantang River 😱 So handsome 😘It is God and it is my rose that illuminates my dark life and makes my world meaningful😊I run, I jump, I dance the tango on the balcony of the 20th floor😮It makes me realize that God does exist and I am so cute The tears won't stop and the world will no longer be short of water. The nemesis of depression 😋 is the alarm clock for vegetative people 😨 It's so cute that tears flow out of the corners of the mouth and flood the Qiantang River 😈 It's so beautiful 🥰 God is my rose, it illuminates my dark life and makes my world meaningful 😙 I ran, I jumped, I danced the tango on the balcony of the 20th floor 😎 It made me realize that God does exist, I was so good that my tears did not stop, and the world no longer lacked water.