You Shou Yan: Bai Jie's Everyday Life in the Mortal World

It feels similar to my book, but the beginning and writing style are better than mine. The third suggestion is that the writing style can be more refined and just use vernacular. The cultural level is too high and it is a bit of a drama. Come on

Overall, this is a great piece of fan fiction, but the writing style is a bit immature. It looks as if it is a composition. And the whole book seems to have a lot of unnecessary plot points, such as the part about paying five yuan for a taxi. It is dispensable to the plot and should be deleted as much as possible, but it is still a rare masterpiece! ! !

I think this book is quite good, You Beast Yan Daily Wen. So far, I have read the daily life of the crew, followed by this one. The daily life of the crew was very good at the beginning, but now it has gradually fallen into the cliché as the chapters have become more and more. Then this book is a new one, so these chapters are flavorful and fresh to me, so here I hope that the subsequent plot will not fall into the cliché, so I put forward some suggestions. 1. The world view of the daily novel is basically fixed, and it is difficult to develop outwards. At this time, the role of extra chapters appears. They are called extra chapters, so they are definitely not limited to the world view of daily novels. You can write this extra chapter at will, including cultivating immortals, ancient times, weird and other types. If you don't want to write like this, you can also write it in the ancient or medieval times when there were beasts. 2. Since this book is very interesting, I suggest that the author start a book group. Why do I suggest starting a book group? First of all, a person's thinking is still limited after all. In other words, I am afraid that the author will use up his talents and have no more to write. At this time, the book club group will be useful. You can ask the book friends for their opinions, and then the author can sort out your opinions. You can probably continue to squeeze out toothpaste. Secondly, if you open a group It's better to facilitate updates and prevent the author from losing contact. It's almost impossible to make much money from the derivatives of Youshouyan, so this road is still relatively difficult, because if you want to make money, you can only write blockbusters, such as derivatives of Douluo or Cangqiong, or brainless cool articles, so the author actually chose to write derivatives of unpopular comics. You should also have thought of the limitations of this book, which can only be seen by people in this circle! Well, at least, if I don't have money to buy gifts, I will also watch a few videos to support the author. In short, I hope the author can continue writing like this.

It perfectly hits what I like, and it is still my favorite daily routine. Although I may not necessarily catch up on time due to work reasons, I will stay up late to catch up. The main theme is tired and tired, and staying up late is a must. As long as you update, and I don't work overtime until ten or eleven o'clock, I will come.

Okay, ok, it's pretty good. Okay, it's pretty good. You can learn more from fan stories, so that it can be richer. Come on. Very good, keep going! ! ! !

It's very good. This is the second good book besides Youshouyan's daily life of the crew. Has the author read the daily life of the crew? It's very good.

Come on, great author

It looks good. I would like to ask if the protagonist has CP? It's a bit hard to get along with Tianlu [laughing evilly]

I hope it won't be interrupted and I will come back often ⸝⸝⸝ ╸▵╺⸝⸝⸝

I hope my dear can fulfill the promise to me. Chapter 2778 will be updated during the New Year~