Honkai: Star Rail: The Flame-Chasers' Story Begins Again

Rating B, future star. At least the first chapter of Sky Dream is pretty good, and I'm curious about the follow-up Su, Ancestor, and Alicia at the end. It's a bit of fun, but it's not easy to hurt enough, and the knife isn't harsh enough. But if you don't grasp the balance between joy and knife, it will be disappointing♪~. The vulnerability needs to be increased, and the knife needs to penetrate deeply. The first part is not easy to hurt enough, about 3 layers, the knife is not deep enough, and the knife is small. Therefore, the chapter should be as long as possible, and the description of the determination to die should not be too bloated, too empty, or too watery. Let her develop and live her daily life, and when the time comes, she will die on her own, just let nature take its course. In the first chapter, Kong Meng's death was a bit hasty and a bit fluid. I believe the author has his own plans.

Good-looking, a rare simulation article. The simulation of Pado that I have written so far is very good-looking. The emotional line with Saifeier is quite delicate. Bai E's description is also good. Later, Pado's death successfully made me cry once.

Please give me five-star praise [love]

Let me tell you how I feel. It feels so fast. This is my first feeling. The narrative is fine, but the writing is a problem. It makes me feel that it happened so fast. I started betting in the blink of an eye and then won all the way. Then I lost in the last game. Then I wrote something to make me cry. I didn't even react before I started to cry. So I felt very baffled. This is not meant to be ridicule or anything. It was just my first feeling. The author still has a lot of room for improvement.

Come on, come on, I invite you to share this delicious novel with me

To my liking.

Very good ^_^♪

It's okay, it's worth tasting [note], it's delicious.

For now, it's worth a taste

You actually secretly released a new work, Haji Shu, you guy [laughing evilly]