Traveling Through Funina: Taking Charge of the Reader's Path

The writing is very detailed, and the screenwriter did not need to think about anything compared to the original plot. He only had to add the sentence that Funina has been acting for five hundred years. Compared with other fan fiction, this book shows a corner of Funina's actual situation in more detail. The distribution of paragraphs is very uncomfortable. A large string of text is stacked on top of each other. There are only two or three paragraphs on one page. It is very uncomfortable for readers to read. In addition, there are too few descriptions of the progress of Funina, the protagonist, and she has been describing detailed politics and trials. It is a bit uncomfortable to read in this fast-paced Tomato novel, but it is okay to update 4,000 words a day.

Don't be political, don't be political, I'm here to read novels

In terms of writing alone, the essay score is at least 8, and the content is also good, 9 or 9. I have read many of his previous books and sealed them. The writing is too dark, which means it is too real, and does not allow for traffic. The settings are all good and I love watching them👀👀👀👀

It's a very interesting book. It's actually a political and economic article disguised as the original god, but the writing style is very good and it's not boring to read.

It's pretty good, except that the combat power is a bit too heavy. After all, the secret system is relatively fast compared to other systems, but it may have some minor side effects. Of course, the combat power should be enough now, right? In 500 years, you can't even reach the level of an angel if you have all the sequence characteristics.

Year-end summary: This is the best Genshin Impact fanfic I have seen this year. The author's control of the characters and the rhythm of the plot are quite perfect. The characters in the pen are flesh and blood, with plenty of tears and excitement. At the same time, it is basically not bound by the original plot. It depicts a complete world view starting from the time of the game five hundred years ago, and perfectly integrates the mysterious settings into the original world view. Even those who have not understood the original work can basically understand it. The only fly in the ointment is that some of the economic descriptions in the early stage are too complicated and are a accumulation of professional knowledge. Although I personally don't dislike this kind of thing, most readers probably won't want to read it. However, this kind of problem basically does not appear in the subsequent content. The protagonist's combat power can probably be taken on alone from Chapter 46 onwards. Although he does not have enough divine power, he makes up for it with the "knowledge" he has obtained. He uses mystical knowledge such as Kabbalah and astrology as his combat power. Generally speaking, it is in line with my aesthetics. It has general versatility and strong countermeasures. The overall evaluation is very large, but I think the author is more suitable for writing original works. Can you keep updating and writing novels for a lifetime, oh Neigai! If you can't see the new chapter soon, Wadasi... [Sending my heart]

This article is a good work, but I think some detailed knowledge can be put into the comment area to make the plot move faster. Otherwise, it always feels a bit hydrological. I think some parts can be briefly summarized and not too detailed to make ordinary people think too stupid. My suggestion is to write this source. Not only can the writing be more authoritative, but also people who want to know more can search for it. People who want to know more can search and check by themselves.

Now that I've seen it, I think it's actually pretty good. The writing is average, but the content is wonderful. Although there are many shortcomings, for example, the content of economics is too detailed, I feel like I am back in class There are also some subjective feelings that I have. The portrayal of Reindot is actually different from what I remember. But if I think about it carefully, Rene has created achievements comparable to Reindot in his short life. In the article, it is set that he is more genius than Reindot. In fact, it is acceptable, and Reindot is indeed crazy. (Also, the arrows of the hunter are not that gentle. Don't they say that "the rescue of the hunter is often accompanied by destruction"? Forget it, just leave it as a private design) In the first volume, Fu Nina's power cannot match the position of the Water God. Even though she knows that she is growing, she still feels a little awkward. In the second volume, it will feel much better. All in all, the shortcomings do not hide the good points, and I look forward to the author's subsequent articles.

Marguerite is not handled well, she saves Fontaine but is sentenced to death, even though she chose to go all out and cause the death of an innocent person. But all these people are dead, who will take the initiative to sacrifice in the future?

A very good book, but be sure not to use a knife!