There’s Definitely Something Wrong with My Kaiju Fighting

It's well-written! I feel the biggest flaw right now is the use of descriptive words, such as: "Upon hearing the name Yapool, the protagonist's brain exploded"; "That's not a monster, it's… the final darkness," etc. Don't make the characters so easily startled; people don't react that easily 🤦. Remove some of the extreme descriptions; they're a bit cheesy. Keep it up!

It's well written, but removing unnecessary modifiers would improve the reading experience.

It's ridiculous that Hyper Zetton gets chased and attacked by mobs.

So far, it only has one female lead; I hope there will be more pure romance storylines. (The word count is a bit low.)

Dude, those who know you're writing about the legendary Hyper Zetton might think you're writing about the third generation Zetton. While calling Hyper Zetton "Hyper Zetton Girl" is a plus, your Hyper Zetton is so weak it gets easily beaten by mobs. I'll give you 3 points (2.5 + 0.5). ୧⍢⃝୨

You've made Hyper Zetton seem really weak.

Well, it's a bit strange. The power of Hyper Zetton isn't really highlighted; it feels like just an ordinary Zetton. 🙂 And the earlier descriptions of Hyper Zetton's strength and the bond between the protagonist and the main characters feel a bit clownish when Zetton is fighting a bunch of monsters on equal terms later on. 🥺

He looked rather dim-witted, like a child playing with a toy gun.

Two stars at most 🙂

The language is too ornate, it's like a novel from the Dragon King era 🤦😅