The Legend of Luo Xiaohei: Luye Confesses to Me!?

The current concept and logic of the book work, but the description of communication between the characters needs to be slightly improved, because their communication methods and vocabulary use do not fully connect with the movie's characters. All in all, the main body is pretty good😌👍. The downgrade from 4 stars to 2 stars is purely because the author's writing style has not changed much, but the butterfly effect of using the protagonist as the protagonist did not change the cruel ending of the goblins, and the wind was also very sloppy. The plot and story haven't changed much at all, except that a love scene has been added. I personally guess that because the plot started to develop into unknown areas, the author actually didn't know how to expand the character's experience, or the story outline only added some flowers to the basic original story structure. I don't think it's necessary at all, after all, they're not sophisticated at all. Might as well watch one more movie.

Let me tell you, it turns out this is already the second Luye book. The character description, narrative and plot are all very good. If I want to evaluate it, the advantage is that the narrative is smooth and the writing experience is very good. I can tell just from the character dialogue alone that this author is definitely not a novice. The whole paragraph is very good. The plot has no obvious poisonous points, the scenes are connected smoothly, and the protagonist is also well portrayed. But the shortcomings are here. It can be seen that although the author is a veteran in online articles, the scene descriptions are mediocre, the vocabulary is not large, the narrative techniques are not perfect, and it is not friendly to passers-by, and there are too few descriptions of other characters. And it seems that Lu Ye's personality charm is not fully highlighted. (This is also a common problem in fan works, the author often subconsciously substitutes his own perspective) However, there is no idea of ​​​​slandering it. It is already very good in the online article. In the end, I like you as the author! ! ! [Blowing Kiss][Adoration] is my favorite type, straight five stars. [Please update]

Pure Love, the writing is not bad, there are not many plot lines, the main thing is the emotional line. The emotional line is not particularly well written. Sometimes Lu Ye is a bit OOC, and Lu Ye's personality charm is not written out. However, it is not satisfactory for a fan novel. The character is not OOC to the point of being unacceptable. The character design basically adheres to the original design, and the character arc is a bit... It's okay to just eat dog food without any brains.

The writing is very delicate. I feel that the writing is from the perspective of a female author, but the plot is arranged by a male author. The two are surprisingly good considering the senses. I don't know if it is because there are fewer people watching it, but it is indeed better than expected. Logically speaking, it should be between 8.9-9.2 Points. Moreover, the plot of Luo Xiaohei's movie is not very detailed. Most of it is original and daily, sweet and greasy. I like it.

What impressed me most about this fanfic was that the CP tension of "White Mu × Lu Ye" was mixed into Lu Ye's fireworks - without losing the core of the character, but also giving the sweetness of love a unique romance. The author understands Lu Ye's "decisiveness" and "strength": in the end, as if he had exhausted all his strength, he asked directly, the voice was not loud, but it clearly echoed in the space: "Bai Mu, do you like me?" There is no prefix, no modification. "Lu Ye suddenly raised his hand, and with a "bang" sound, his palm hit the wall next to his ear hard. He gave him a solid and powerful "dong". It was like a glass of strong wine, drank directly in one gulp. It has no gentle fruity aroma, and no sweet modification. There is a burning sensation in the entrance, going straight to the throat and heart, making you awake and dizzy in an instant. Good fan creation needs to deeply bind the emotional line with the world view of the original work. Luo Xiaohei's setting of "coexistence of humans and demons" provides a natural carrier for the plot: the work draws on the gradual expansion of human territory and the shrinking of the living space of goblins in the original work, resulting in Feng Xi and Lingyao's actions. Let Lu Ye and "I" resolve the previous oolong through cooperation, and the relationship gradually heats up. Instead, through this line, the two gradually transformed from senior brothers and sisters who rarely saw each other after leaving Infinite to "careers". The "Luo Xiaohei" series explores profound themes such as "coexistence" and "anti-war". As a war orphan, Lu Ye's personal experience itself carries reflections on the war. A good fanfic might have an emotional story that resonates subtly with these larger themes. A cross-racial relationship can itself be a micro interpretation of the issue of "coexistence". Judging from feedback from readers of Tomato's similar works, the common highlights of this type of creation are "smooth writing and lovable characters", but it is also prone to the problem of "rigid transitions in relationships". What makes me a little regretful is that when the author told Bai Mu and Lu Ye that they were children, exactly this happened. The author did not spend much time writing about how the "frozen snow mountain" collapsed. But if you can add a lot of extra stories after the ending to tell stories about your childhood. The story will flow more smoothly. If the author can design a complete emotional chain of "ice-breaking-testing-trust-heartbeat" in the extra story and keep the bottom line of "the characters are not OOC and the world view is not out of touch", it will be a masterpiece that fits the temperament of the IP. Then again, as a novice writer, it is already very good that the author can write like this. I hope that the author will continue to work hard and reach the ceiling of Luo Xiaohei fandom as soon as possible.

It's a very interesting fanfic. The relationship between the male and female protagonists is not fickle and can be confessed very quickly. It's just too short, and it's hard to have a child between a human and a demon. It's so sad. I originally wanted to see the warm scene of the male protagonist's family of three😞😞😞Come on author, I also hope the author can change it [cry][cry][cry]

It can be regarded as the pinnacle work among Luo Xiaohei's fans.

To be honest, this is really a good fan novel about Lu Ye, but I don't know if there will be children in the future [laughing]

Originally I wanted to just take a look at it, just as a browsing or reference result. The more I looked, the more I wanted to see it, and the more I looked, the more I wanted to see it. Highly recommended. 5 Stars, 5 stars is the limit of this evaluation, not my limit.

This fan work is really wonderful! The author has an accurate grasp of the characters of the original work, and the characters' personalities and interactions are perfectly restored. The storyline is cleverly designed, which not only retains the world view of the original work, but also adds new and unique ideas. The writing is smooth and beautiful, and the emotional descriptions are delicate and moving, making people completely immersed in it. I look forward to the author continuing to create more high-quality fan works like this.