Ultraman: Becoming Zetton to Fight Alongside Leo
奥特：变成杰顿与雷欧并肩作战
- Status
- Completed
- Length
- 545k Words
- Genre
- Anime Fanfiction
- Updated
- 10mo ago
- Source
- Fanqie
Synopsis
169Chapters
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To comment, it seems that the author is writing a book for the first time, so some parts of the book are a bit green. My suggestion is that the next book can be narrated in the third person, and the protagonist can be more involved, and pay attention to the phrasing and paragraphing, so as not to make people look too tired; but!! But!! I can only say that it is my first time to write a book. To be able to write like this, you definitely have the qualifications of a great emperor. You must stick to it. There are not many good-looking Owen books. You definitely have this potential. I am optimistic about you!!
It's very good. The descriptions in some places are very similar to the tone of the Showa Oku story, but the descriptions in some places are a bit private. The Space Guard of the Land of Light is not so weak, and the atmosphere does not need to be suppressed all the time. In the early stage, during the difficult growth process of the protagonist, there can be some fun and relaxation. The other biggest problem is the problem of paragraphing. For general online novels, if "." Is used as the benchmark, a paragraph will not exceed 2 sentences, and if "," is used as the benchmark, a paragraph will not exceed 5-8 sentences. However, come on author, this kind of story tone is still very interesting in Oven.
I can feel that the author is writing seriously, but is there a lot of content that is the author's personal creation? I always think it looks a bit weird. I still haven't figured out what type of Jayton the protagonist is. Will the protagonist's form be more humanoid in the future? And I always feel it's a bit strange to use the first person, but the plot is still very good 💕
Generally speaking, the theme is very good, but the protagonist's role is a bit weak and I hope something changes.
What I want to know is whether the protagonist's Chiton is that version of Hypa or that kind of one?
Yes. As a newcomer, it is still possible.
Fatty beef rice is almost the same
Oh, yes, I love this so much.ごメさんはブ.
Really fine chaff, nice looking