Becoming a Witch in a Fairy-Tale World

Although it's not nice to say this, it's really very similar to the one generated by AI, because I have also generated it. Although I haven't published it, I feel that the articles between the two are very similar [face covering] [face covering]

It's actually quite good, but it really feels a little heavy on the AI. I didn't think so at first, but later I discovered that the endings of the last sentences in the previous pictures had a slight resemblance to him, and then I realized, does this article feel like an AI? Then it started to look more and more like the feeling I had before. Here's a little writing advice. I don't write novels myself. This is just something I feel can be improved after reading it. The most important thing about this article so far is the system, because without the system, there would be no time travel, and there would be no series of things that happened next. So put the system first. And then the second most important thing is the elf. Yes, the heroine is not considered a heroine at all. The heroine is very facial, and anyone else can take her place. The role of the heroine is only to take care of the farm. But the elf, the elf is the initial assistant first. He would help people take care of their farmland. And then he can deliver gifts every day. And obviously the value of this gift is not very low. So let me ask such a wealthy elf, he comes to help the heroine for a few pieces of moonshine lettuce, what does the elf want? It can be said that the elf is the living being that has accompanied the heroine for the longest time. Since they are elves, don't they know how to speak? Why don't they have any communication with the heroine? The heroine was able to make a nest in the farm for the moonlight beetle that arrived later. So why not just invite the elves to stay or visit their homes? Many important props that the heroine now obtains can be said to be obtained by relying on elves. So don't you think the heroine just needs to sit on the farm and do some work every day, and then it's too leisurely? The heroine's life is entirely supported by the elf. Add a little communication with the elves, even just talk, go to the elf's house as a guest, go out on adventures with the elf, and collect some magical magic items in the forest. It can make this article more interesting. After all, the elf can come back unscathed. The danger in the forest shouldn't be that high, right? Wouldn't it be better to just think of it as an outing? Need to add a little more ups and downs to the heroine's life Then I said that this article has too much AI feel. The obvious thing is that in many chapters, the heroine likes to say repetitive words and do repetitive actions. The heroine always says that today is a great day, and tomorrow will definitely be better. The heroine has been dreaming, dreaming about something, dreaming about something, of course this refers to the beginning of the article. Is the heroine always getting gifts from elves, and then always saying this is for me? Thank you so much. Then give a little gift in return. Couldn't he even say something else based on this gift? Even if you ask some elves, where did you get it? It's so hard. Words like that or rejection. It's too hard. You should keep these for yourself. I believe they will be useful to you. It would be nice to have the heroine add a bit of adult hypocrisy. Come on, I didn't ask for this, they forced it on me. Although it sounds hard to say this, it is always better than the heroine accepting it without hesitation and saying thank you for coming. There are still some places. For example, the description of psychology, the description of scenery, and the description of actions. He is a bit neat, like a student writing a composition. But when I write a novel, I also want to write an essay. If I write like that, I will feel a little bit uncomfortable about it. This subtly adds to the AI ​​feel of this article. The role of the heroine in this article is really a bit low. Just like an automatic farmer. Apart from that, what else does the heroine do? Defeat the evil dark mage. It was given by an elf. Magic attacks the staff given by the tree spirit and the heart of oak. Are there any talismans that the heroine learned from the system and then made? The first two are completely external forces It seems like the heroine feels like anyone can do it. Add a little more plot, the heroine does not need to rely on spring elves, tree spirits, elves, or the system, and then she can get something by herself, even if it is just to go out for a collecting outing. Otherwise, the heroine would appear to be useless.

👌I like magical witch novels, the writing is really good.

Well written! Like

I like this very much

It's a good casual article, it can cultivate your mood when you have nothing to do.

Super pretty! ! ! Very warm! ! ! Special farming essay

So heart-warming [Sending Hearts] I felt warm after seeing the human body

I like this theme very much. The daily life of a witch is very warm.