Honkai: Star Rail: The Journey of the Withering Echo Maiden

A very good book, but there is one question that runs throughout the text: For dialogues, the author can actually not add names before unimportant dialogues, or put the names at the end. If this problem is not changed, it will be very unfriendly to the people who listen to the book.

The subject matter is very interesting, and it is a very good book. However, the whole plot seems strange to me, but I don't know where it is. It is not recommended to submit characters. Generally, you want to make your submitted characters strong and impressive, but doing so will easily destroy the book. Generally, a book has two or three important characters that do not exist in the first place (the ones with many scenes and the protagonist, unless you are an original worldview and have nothing to do with others). Other suggestions: The protagonist should be more normal. I personally think the protagonist is a bit sugary. I suggest opening a new book (side story) to include the emperor's content. Just treat this book as a normal combat novel and enjoy it. Don't want both [Like] [OK] The first part is pretty good, but the second part is useless. There is a lot of water, and there are multiple time travelers + multiple submitted characters + clones. This setting is very humorous.

Meng Li's fighting scenes are a bit sparse. I just came in after watching him play the warden. What I wanted to see was the kind of warden who punches hard and fights violently, but is actually a cute girl. But there are so few fighting scenes, which is a bit disappointing, but overall it's good.

Very nice, who else came here via video tweet like me.

It's okay, but could the description of appearance be a little less detailed? Too many.

Hey, how about giving the main character a whole crutch? When you encounter an unfamiliar place, tap it, and then listen to the sound propagation through your sense of hearing.

Fortunately, the writing style needs to be improved. I just wish that there could be more scenes of sound-following guards.

How should I put it? Although I feel a little regretful about regaining my sight, the author just wants to be happy. The writing style is a bit immature and some parts make it uncomfortable to read [face covering] Too many irrelevant descriptions

Feelings after reading a certain novel The universe in the ink is hidden in one volume, The role of love takes a lot of thought. The foreshadowing is a thousand layers of waves, Finally, the sweetness fills the room with fragrance. A gift of seven-character rhymed poetry from the novel When you open a scroll, you will forget what is missing, and it will move your heart through thousands of twists and turns. When people are born, they are filled with warmth, and when things are like flowing clouds, they are also filled with sourness. When I close the book, I still think about the lights being out of class, and when I cover up my book, I still think about having fun in the snow. Such good ink is hard to find, I would like to share it with my colleagues.

The idea is good, but it feels like there is no outline. I suggest you slowly develop the plot and don't be too anxious.