One Piece: I Become the God of Water in the New World!

If you want to write it for a long time, you can actually slow down the pace a little and write it as a slow-burning travel rescue novel without a nanny. It is best to strengthen Funina to be the strongest in the world. Her character will not pursue world domination. It will be fine if she just changes the introduction. When you are comfortable writing, you can add "If you can't stand the previous part, you can jump directly to somewhere" in the introduction to narrow the early stage of the poisonous circle in time. If it is reduced to less than 70 chapters, readers will actually be willing to bite the bullet and read the early stage. Moreover, the author's previous writing is not completely unreasonable, and there are also admissible points. Let me talk about some of the more common taboos in rotten tomatoes: 1. Try not to forcefully add other characters and settings. 2. Don't forcefully add unstable factors to the protagonist. Everyone comes to see Funina's ease in crossing the pirates. Adding unstable factors will lower everyone's perception and test the author's writing skills. It's not good to kill two birds with one stone. 3. Don't be unreasonably depressed. Conflict is certainly inevitable, but no one can bully Funina. These are my humble opinions, but it mainly depends on the author's own ideas and arrangements, keep your own pace, and don't make major changes because of too many opinions. In the end, the gain outweighs the gain and the loss is greater.

It looks good, but there are too many descriptions that are unnecessary. I can tell you at a glance. It's very interesting at first, and the plot is novel. I really like Fufu. The follow-up was the Pan Rock Fruit (Zhongli's vision.) And the Shao Shao Fruit was given to a camel 😂. Fire Fist Ace is gone, and what appears in front of him now is the Flying Fire Camel.

The characters are created very well, whether it is the cute Funina, the little Lu Fei, the bold Shanks, or the awkward Zoro, they are all written very well. And the setting is not uncomfortable. After the end of the plot in Teyvat, Funina and Fukalos traveled through time, instead of inexplicably coming to a person with Funina's appearance and strength. This is very praiseworthy. I hope the author can keep writing 👍👍❤️[Admiration][Admiration]! I'm really looking forward to the ending of Luffy growing up and meeting other people. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 Come on author!

How can I put it, for the time being, the plot is just mediocre, it's just the protagonist group wearing travel clothes when they were young, and then the serialized part of this article from the beginning to the present is all about eating, I feel like the name can be changed to "Fu Fu Another World Food Travel Story"

The writing is very good, but I hope Fufu can be strengthened and have more confidence, so that she won't be scared to death when she sees a villain.

As a person who likes silly things, I can only say that this work shows his cowardly and awesome state, which is so cool.

Didn't the protagonist grow a little after going through the incident?

The author writes so well, it's super beautiful. Keep going, don't stop, really don't stop. It's not as good as the last time I saw such a beautiful novel. It's the last time. I beg you, author, don't stop. Keep following until the end, okay? 😢😢😢

The writing is very good, but I can't accept the fact that Funina calls Fukalos mother.

It's normal to suffer losses in the early stage. Just don't write it as "love to eat" in the middle and later stages. Of course, don't pretend that I don't eat beef or that I don't eat real pirates. It looks pretty good so far