Starting with the Creation of a Poker Organization

The writing is pretty bad, the writing is good, but the reason why I gave it four stars is because the author used to update more than 1,000 words a day when the traffic was at its best. At that time, I kept trying to persuade him to do more to retain people. The author didn't listen, and the traffic plummeted. But it's okay now, with two updates a day, 4,000 words [][]

Original text Seeing his silence, Wang Peng glanced at the mediocre car and the empty place behind him. The corner of his mouth curled up with a hint of contempt, and his voice was deliberately raised so that the guests around him could hear it: "What? Can't get it out? Or is there no invitation at all?" He took a step forward, with an aggressive momentum, "You want to sneak into the Zhou family's banquet in a broken car? Boy, you are not timid!" The author really doesn't know whether this kind of banquet stopped by nosy people to show off will be seen by more or less people? If you are writing for yourself and just writing casually, then forget about it. If you want to write a lot of plots for readers, you have to think about the readers' feelings [face covering] [face covering]

The theme of using poker as an organization is good, but some of the descriptions of family love are a bit too much, and the fact that girls are fawning over is not a good idea. , But it is also reasonable to hope that Duoduo will have organizational tasks or the protagonist's decisions, as well as looking for people's loyalty to the organization. I still hope there will be less family affection. It would be nice if they had a deeper misunderstanding and explained it away.

It's okay. You said this is your first book, so I'll give you a few suggestions. The biggest problem is that the character description is not obvious and the writing is very green. The people you summon all have the same character. They are unsmiling, respect their superiors, have a calm mind, have an online IQ, and are excellent employees. But it shouldn't be like this. People should be diverse. What kind of novel can capture people the most? I think there are only two words: contrast. The same goes for characterization. You can write about an old man who is romantic and popular every day after being summoned, a middle-aged man with a cold face and a dark belly, a royal sister who likes to listen to gossip, a submissive girl who usually fights like a perverted little loli, and disrespectful ones. The middle-aged boy who opens his mouth and shuts up, the middle-aged boy who is powerful but simple-minded and warm-hearted, the scarred face who always wants to cross the road with his grandmother, etc., I can think of countless of them. Different characters have different views on things, and they can jump out of the readers' thinking stereotypes, just like eating ice cream in the summer. The advantage of this is that if a character is injured, trapped or even killed in battle, readers will really care about it, instead of no one mentioning it again when the a cards are gone. Overall, your writing is pretty good, it's quite satisfactory, but it's just not popular. I'll forget about you when I see your updates and then look at other things. Come on.

Not bad, not bad, much better than others, at least the male protagonist will not work hard for human beings It's really getting worse and worse later on, and there's more and more nonsense.

I've read a few chapters and the writing is pretty good. I'll stick with it for now. I'll be an old fan later. Hehe. Good luck. Recommended. I hope the writing won't be bad in the future. The poker organization is cool. I have read about dozens of chapters and I personally like it very much. One reason is that I personally like things about poker factors. Another reason is that I think the plot of this book is okay. The content is compact and the writing is also very good. It is not so fantasy and the background stories of the characters are also emotional. The protagonist appears as the leader of the poker organization. He is very handsome and considerate of the employees (although it is called squeezing in a sense). The members provided by the system are also very good. The name is pretty good too [laughing evilly][laughing evilly][laughing evilly][face covering] And I will continue this book later to see if it will be unfinished or something. For me, this book is haha. I think the score should be 8.0 To 8.5. Of course, everyone's preferences are different. This is just my opinion.

If it looks good, you can write more about it. There are characters transformed from playing cards, and there are also people from this world. Everyone has different characteristics and charms. If it looks good, you can write more about it. Can the author sleep after writing so little? More updates! ! !

I rarely post book reviews, but this one is really good. The description of the group portraits is very detailed and fascinating.

After reading a few chapters, you can roughly guess the general structure. Tomato creates an organization with a similar framework. Except for the content, there is no desire to read more. Although it is an organization, it is not a group portrait. The members of the organization are all fake people given by the system. The protagonist is like a butler hired by the system [laughs]. This kind of novel system is the protagonist, right? But I didn't stick to it until the end. Maybe there is a twist in this book? Does anyone recommend a group portrait article in which the members of the organization are real people? [I learned] It is best to have no system or the system is just a platform.

It's okay, but there are a lot of pretense and slap-in-the-face plots. Also, if possible, Liu Tianming and Su Qingxue hope to have a good ending. If it really doesn't work, I hope it can be written more reasonably and not leave any poisonous points.