In the Martial World, I Convince the Chosen One to Cultivate Immortality from the Start

The one star missing is that if you don't give money for meals during this period, you would have been beaten to death before. Now it's better. If you don't give money for meals, you can't do this even if you become an immortal!

It looks good, I like it very much... When recruiting children, we should not only teach them how to practice, but also teach their character... A decent, lively and lovely apprentice can make people like... In addition, as for martial arts, since the background is written, it is recommended that students include martial arts female protagonists and decent male protagonists during their training period, such as: Xiao Huang Rong, Xiao Long Nu, Xiao Guo Xiang (if Huang Rong has a baby [smirk] [laugh]), A'Zhu, Wang Yuyan, Mu Wanqing, Qing Qing, Shangguan Haiyi... Qiao Feng... Lin Pingzhi... Not like Linghu Chong, too many people don't like White Eyed Wolf [laugh] [laugh] [laugh] Hahahahahaha doll...

In the void, a lazy sound, but with enough energy to freeze the endless chill of the nine heavens and ten earths, sounded slowly. "Alas..." Overall, is it okay? I've seen Chapter 48. You could say he was protecting the calf, but he insisted on letting his apprentice get hurt. You said he doesn't show off, right? He didn't take action until the last time every time. We don't know what to think either.

The writing is good, much better than the grinding ones of the same type. In fact, you can also do something more stylish, such as letting Yinyin fly a few tens of centimeters above the ground, which will absorb the spiritual energy anyway. Well, let the protagonist get some special effects skills, and make the whole body covered with stars, or have a halo to look more stylish!

I won't say anything else. I only give it five stars because the author can see the problems reflected in the comments and correct them in time. After finishing this book, the author's writing style should become better and his basic skills should be more solid. I look forward to the author's next book. Come on.

This is a fairly good apprenticeship novel. It cannot be said to be amazing, but it is quite enjoyable to write and reads very smoothly. Under normal circumstances, it is also the best in Tomato. However, there are five or six different types of apprenticeship novels in Tomato. All of them are amazing. I am afraid of comparison. If I go back and forth, they can only be regarded as high-quality products.

I just hope I don't get a bunch of vests.

Hurry up and update. I'm doing Douyin. I've got over 10,000 likes. If it's even slower, I'll ask a hundred people to give you bad reviews [smile]

The plot is okay, but the character of the apprentice is not good

Brother, you have to write faster, otherwise your book will be difficult, because I see a lot of the same thing