In the Martial World, I Convince the Chosen One to Cultivate Immortality from the Start

The reason I'm missing a star is because they don't pay for meals in this part. I was about to be beaten to death earlier, and now they don't pay for meals. Even if you're cultivating immortality, you can't do this!

It's beautiful, I really like it... Recruiting children not only involves teaching them cultivation techniques, but also nurturing their character... A righteous yet lively and adorable disciple would be very likable... Also, since it's a wuxia story, and given that background, I suggest recruiting female wuxia protagonists and righteous male protagonists during the disciples' training period.

In the void, a lazy voice, yet carrying an endless chill capable of freezing the heavens and the earth, rang out. "Well…" Overall, it's alright, I guess? I've read up to chapter 48. You could say he's overprotective, but he insists on getting his disciple injured. You could say he's not showing off, but he always waits until the very last moment to make his move. I don't know what he's thinking.

It's well written, much better than those other similar works that are slow and drawn out. Actually, you could add some more sophisticated elements, like having Yin Yin fly several tens of centimeters off the ground and keep flying, since she can absorb spiritual energy with her Devouring Heaven Demon Attack. Hmm, you could also give the protagonist some special effects skills, like being covered in starlight or having a halo to make him look more sophisticated!

I'm not saying anything more. Just the fact that the author saw the comments and made timely corrections is enough for me to give it five stars. I expect the author's writing will improve after finishing this book, and their fundamental skills will be more solid. I look forward to the author's next book. Keep it up!

This is a decent novel in the apprenticeship genre. It's not particularly amazing, but the writing is quite enjoyable and the reading experience is very smooth. Normally, it would be considered top-notch on Tomato Bookstore. However, Tomato Bookstore has five or six other similar apprenticeship novels, each one truly outstanding. This makes comparison difficult; after a while, it only qualifies as a "good" novel.

I just hope they don't create a bunch of fake accounts.

Hurry up and update! I'm making a Douyin video, and it's already got over 10,000 likes. If you're slower than expected, I'll get a hundred people to give you bad reviews. 🙂

The plot is alright, but the apprentice's personality is problematic.

Brother, you need to write faster, otherwise your book will be in trouble, because I've seen many similar ones.