A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: Beginning with a Broken Family Furnace

Yes, it can be seen that the author has worked hard. The setting of spiritual roots has novel characteristics (a breath of fresh air in the flow of mortals), the events are clearly described, and the character descriptions are relatively accurate. But can you make a small suggestion? (I'm not saying it's not good. I may have a bit of obsessive-compulsive disorder. The author please don't mind.) The wording in some places may not be very good. For example, is it a little inaccurate to call the sloppy old Taoist he met while eating in Xianlou a "beggar"? Or is it Chunqiu brushwork? I will continue to work hard in the later period. The Zhongzhou section is well written (it would be great if it could be mixed with some joy), and the foreshadowing is well laid. I personally feel that the protagonist should break through the Zhongzhou section, come on! I've been chasing him for a long time 😢

You can read it, and you can put it on the bookshelf or not. Although the story is not very interesting, and some of the developments of the story also make readers feel confused, it still keeps following the main plot inexplicably. Moreover, some settings are indeed different from common routines. For example, people around him know what his golden finger is, and people who can be united by fate have love and justice... You can't say that this setting is too simple, and you don't have your phone robbed every day on the way to work.

I think this work is well written, with a thrilling story of cultivating immortality, but it also has a lot of bugs. I read the comments about telling the secret to the heroine, and I also read the author's comments on Chapter 98. First of all, secrets must not be told, and the same is true in reality. If you often pay attention to the news, you will find that some people who have been reported in recent years were reported by their ex-wives, ex-daughter-in-laws, or ex-lover... This is the reality, and the environment for cultivating immortals in the novel is even worse... Of course, in the author's conception, it must be I'm sure the heroine won't tell... But I still feel uncomfortable... Chapter 2:36 is also a problem. Since there are so many secrets, the plot shouldn't let Yuan Daoyi live. When I just watched this chapter, I thought I would kill him to get the secret method of the soul... But he ran away with the protagonist's secrets such as the fast upgrade and the silver-threaded fruit. Then looking at the names of the following chapters, it's still early for Yuan Daoyi to die!? Ordinary enemies can run away, but those who know the big secret must not run away... Yuan Daoyi's future plots can completely create another character to replace him, but those who know the secret must kill decisively! This is also very important for the reader's perception! It must be uncomfortable to have people who know the protagonist's secret running around, and the protagonist in the novel will also be uncomfortable! No. 3: It doesn't matter whether there should be a female protagonist, etc., But I also think that the heroine is not well designed in the plot. I won't go into details, that would take a lot of writing... But I only read Chapter 36, and I didn't read the rest because Yuan Daoyi escaped to heal and sucked all my blood...

After reading dozens of chapters, it attracted me. The subsequent story should be detailed and logical. After all, handwriting is not an AI product. You should check it more, read it over more than once, and be more rigorous about every link. The protagonist is still too single-minded at present. Please diversify your writing. If you have a golden finger, you have surpassed 80% of immortal cultivators. Tangled. . . I can't let go of my handwriting and can't express the world I belong to

/Well, well, well, well, well, well

Looking at it now, it's okay. There is nothing that makes me feel unreasonable. Come on, author

Warmly recommended, recommended

Nice! Just focus on the emotional aspect! The other foreshadowings are also good, and the feeling of immersion is very deep!

It's quite to my liking so far, I'll check it out later

Xue Xuanzi, what is his real name?