After the System Turned on Me, the Yandere Heroine Set Her Sights on Me

The writing is very good. I also like the subject matter. The resistance to the system can be said to be the highlight. As for the female protagonist, I hope that the male protagonist only likes one and does not have too many ambiguous links with other female protagonists. Of course, normal communication is necessary. Also, I hope that all female characters will not have "feelings between men and women" towards the male protagonist. It would be good to have some pure friendship. The above are purely personal opinions

Do a task and give it to yourself, although it feels a bit shameless to give yourself five stars. This is my first completed novel, and I had only one idea at the beginning. The male protagonist did not listen to the system's orders and let the female protagonist go, and the ending of the world changed as a result. Then I picked up my pen and started writing... Kavin got stuck many times, and he was thinking about how to make the plot more reasonable every day. The plot at the beginning was too rushed and the heroine was not well portrayed, so he tried his best to make up for it later. Overall, no matter what others think, this book has a special meaning to me.

It's very interesting. I've read more than 100 of your pictures in one go. What can I say? I'm looking forward to having a single female protagonist, okay? Don't be a single heroine. I was really shocked when I read what you wrote earlier about Fina liking something. It's okay, but it's not love. But next time, don't do it again. It's really pretty. Anyway, this novel has a good concept and theme. I don't have much objectionable things so far. In the beginning, the protagonist did not kill Navina, but was almost killed by the heroine. This time, I actually think this is normal, because I have killed him probably many times in the game, and it is normal that I don't want to kill him now. The subsequent plot development is quite interesting. If you don't hear it, I will write it slowly in the afternoon, don't be anxious. Even if it's just one picture a day, it'll be ok if you've thought about the details. Don't write so many pictures. You have to do well with the details in two pages a day. Even if you want to write more, your details must be well drawn. Don't blindly pursue writing a lot. Anyway, it is very beautiful. Come on, you are one of the most wonderful novels I have read. Alas, after reading it, you have written too little. It is not satisfying at all. There are only more than 130 pictures. So few

The early writing was very good, and it can be seen that the author probably wanted to write a level-by-level adventure, and then bring the heroine who originally had a bad ending back to a good ending, but it felt that the ending was too hasty. It may be that the author was bored or the writing was a bit broken, but overall it was okay. It suits my taste quite well

If it's a harem story, it can go on forever. If you go through the original game plot and save other heroines, this world view can be written for a long time. But if it is a single female protagonist, if many, many female supporting characters are saved, and the male protagonist chooses Neville in the end, it will actually not please either party. The pure love party is not satisfied with the entanglement between the male protagonist and the female supporting character. Naturally, there is no need to say more about the harem party. But I didn't expect it to end abruptly after only saving two people. I think it's better to go through the plot slowly and let the male protagonist find the truth slowly. I felt something was wrong at the beginning. I only had three lives, but I ended up using two in the second level. If there were more than a dozen levels later, it wouldn't be a big deal. It ends in such a short time. There are not enough emotional scenes and not enough plot scenes. Whether it is a geek or a yandere, it does not show much, but overall it can be justified. There is no obvious poisonous point, but the shortness is the biggest poisonous point. Considering this is the author's debut novel, it's still acceptable. This novel obviously doesn't have an outline, otherwise it wouldn't be so short. In the future, when writing novels, I'll first focus on the framework and then the details, first the whole and then the parts. I hope the next novel will be better.

I promise the author five stars, Oh Beibei, holy water, please purify my heart, so the author writes quickly, the child is hungry [almost crying] [almost crying] [almost crying]. Cough, I went crazy. . . . . . I'll comment later!

Good stuff, a yandere novel that you can read, but the [Cthulhu] element in it only borrows from the monster image and part of the settings, and can only be regarded as a less important "flavoring".

I didn't like Yandere novels at first, but Navier came in with the intention of trying it out after seeing the cover picture. After reading it, I was surprised by how sweet it was. It's very good. The Yandere style is just right, and there is no annoying feeling. The system is the boss setting that makes people shine. It also allows the full text to perfectly avoid the common points of most novels in the bookstore. It also focuses on the plot development and the emotional line of the characters without rambling. Highly recommended! @Amano Kuriko The writing is very good, and the character portrayal is just right. (Already sent as a gift [plus one on the bookshelf] [top post] [bird food masterpiece] [send heart]

The rhythm is not that fast, but the lyricism is very strong Calmly telling a story, a dream, I listened quietly under the starry sky, listening to the passage of time and the flow of adventure in another world

Although the writing is still lacking in some small areas, overall The pacing is okay and the plot is interesting. The character traits are also very distinct. The setting is also very interesting, the system conspiracy theory. Overall, it's not very brainless, and it's still a bit subtle in hiding things. I hope I can keep writing, and I hope Carl can clear the level as soon as possible and return to reality (preferably with a bunch of beauties from another world and some plug-ins and stuff haha) Come on