[One Piece + wish fulfillment + dramatic twists and turns + passionate adventure + traveling with the crew + huge rewards for charity + jokes and emotional moments, if I pull them off]
Su Hang transmigrates into the world of One Piece and awakens a Charity System. He can earn rewards by doing good deeds and helping others.
The day the System awakened, the whole world changed!
Sengoku: “This pirate Su Hang has done every good deed there is! He doesn’t act like a pirate at all!”
Garp: “Why does everything Su Hang does, despite him being a pirate, make our Marines look bad?”
He punches Morgan, kicks Kuro, and roasts Arlong with lightning.
After entering the Grand Line...
He goes to Drum Island and builds a public hospital.
Then he heads to Alabasta...
Crocodile: “I’m the most popular person in Alabasta.”
So Su Hang builds irrigation projects across Alabasta and becomes a national hero. “No one understands charity better than me.”
The Summit War...
Su Hang: “Ace can’t be killed. I’ve said my piece. Who’s with me? Who’s against me?”
① It is recommended that each chapter be longer and two chapters can be combined into one.
② It is recommended to add more elements of your own. If it is well written, it will be like Bai Yueguang. If it is poorly written, no one will want to read it. (Of course, I personally don't like joining groups, and I will most likely give up. This is a purely personal opinion.)
③Can you determine the main theme? What is the goal of the protagonist? What does the protagonist want to do in the future? What is the character of the protagonist? What about the protagonist's relatives, friends or opponents? (What I can see is that the protagonist's system presence is not strong, and he should be just a tool man. What should be highlighted should be the protagonist himself, his ideas, and what kind of impact his beliefs have on the people around him and the world? There are also things like the improvement of his own strength. He is also a person who needs to grow, so you can focus on this.)
④In fact, the setting is relatively good, and it is a very attractive point (that is, I was attracted by the setting), but I did not see the advantages of this setting, or it is not very perfect (?)
Note: This is purely my personal opinion, please correct me if I am wrong. (But if it doesn't convince me, I still think I'm right.)
① It is recommended that each chapter be longer and two chapters can be combined into one. ② It is recommended to add more elements of your own. If it is well written, it will be like Bai Yueguang. If it is poorly written, no one will want to read it. (Of course, I personally don't like joining groups, and I will most likely give up. This is a purely personal opinion.) ③Can you determine the main theme? What is the goal of the protagonist? What does the protagonist want to do in the future? What is the character of the protagonist? What about the protagonist's relatives, friends or opponents? (What I can see is that the protagonist's system presence is not strong, and he should be just a tool man. What should be highlighted should be the protagonist himself, his ideas, and what kind of impact his beliefs have on the people around him and the world? There are also things like the improvement of his own strength. He is also a person who needs to grow, so you can focus on this.) ④In fact, the setting is relatively good, and it is a very attractive point (that is, I was attracted by the setting), but I did not see the advantages of this setting, or it is not very perfect (?) Note: This is purely my personal opinion, please correct me if I am wrong. (But if it doesn't convince me, I still think I'm right.)