The Second Senior Brother with Facial Paralysis Felt Too Happy

It could be a little more descriptive, less metaphorical, and concise. There's nothing to say about the writing style, it's big enough to eat. The plot is also okay, if you want to see the emotional line, come on

The author is great, the setting is very good, and the writing style is very good. However, how can you make the novel the same as a composition or prose? [Laughing and crying] The writing is very good, but it is too cumbersome, which makes people feel conflicted about wanting to read but not wanting to read [crying]

I would like to express my personal opinion. The book is good, the content is novel, and the volume is large. People who are short of books and can accept my label below may consider reading it. The author can refer to this article. According to the content I saw, the key words are: There are two male protagonists (most likely the eldest brother and the second brother), awakening memories and writings (the past and present lives are not about souls passing through the body), voices, cultivating immortals, prophecies to break the situation and save the world, and the writing style uses AI to expand a lot, which makes it a bit literary. Focusing on a few keywords: The author defines the work as an imaginative two-male protagonist, and defines the protagonist as a cold and gentle person, but after the memory is recovered, it brings the setting of a happy person and a cp lover (just think of it as the author's split soul) The character design makes the second senior brother more vivid. A person who is usually cold and taciturn but cares about you has a very active mind. This kind of contrast is really jarring. There is a bit of foreshadowing in the subsequent details. In my opinion, the main line of this article should be to solve the big problems of cultivating immortals (common immortal cultivating articles are probably the invasion of demons, world compatibility and war, and world promotion), and at the same time, it should be supplemented by the story of getting along with the senior brother, plus the problem of deputy CP (this point is based on the second senior brother knocking CP or the author's imagination to develop various branches) So when it comes to the main plot, the story should be based on the common harem Long Aotian story originally centered on the senior brother as the reference world line (why I say this is because in the author's description, the original plot line does not have many situations where the senior brother solves the world's problems, and the first chapter of the author writes about a disaster similar to the annihilation of the world). Now it has been changed to avoid risks based on the original world line through the second brother's voice, and then the first brother's harem is cancelled, and he saves the world with the second brother, and develops feelings during the process. Because the author thinks that the writing is not good, he most likely uses AI to expand and polish many parts of the article. As a result, the current article generally feels a bit awkward. This problem is actually not bad, but when the author describes the branch line, which is the CP expenditure line, it marginalizes and eliminates the power that may have been needed by the main line (referring to the career female protagonist in the first dungeon). If you care about the second senior brother through the senior brother, and slowly advance the emotional line through awkwardness and the like, the original heroine will be useless, and some content in the dungeon will be dispensable and can be appropriately reduced. But your main plot is to save the world, but there is no basic content about saving the world. There is only one thing that is relevant, and that is the sect leader's request to keep it a secret. There are also salvation stories where the protagonist needs to become stronger. The female protagonist in the original world line provides a role similar to that of a logistics medic. The article also mentions that it is very important to the male protagonist. This also shows that the help provided by the female protagonist in the original world line will not be less than other hidden functions (referring to using the entire sect as a dowry). At first I saw that the junior brother you described who was just playing with medicine could indeed be used for development to fill this hole. But the junior brother you suddenly described avoided him, and even did not go to the competition. In this way, the connection between the two sides is basically gone. Then it is superfluous for you to write in the previous article that the other junior brothers in the master sect took a fancy to this invisible benefit and made preparations in advance. Moreover, the main character did not participate in the competition for the sake of a dispensable "gossip" story (two men who are rivals, and may also include a "straight man" and a gay). The description of the deputy cp is too redundant and makes the chapters about Zou Zou's martial arts competition particularly confusing (what feels weird is not as clear as the following simple and clear description through the main character, but there is no such awkward feeling, so it feels very redundant) In addition, using expanded writing to polish your writing description is also important to highlight some of your shortcomings. For example, in the photos of the secret realm, you have a problem with many perspectives. You can write the perspective of the junior brother, but when you write the perspective of the junior brother, you bring the protagonist. Many things are described repeatedly, and it is a bit unclear when changing the perspective, which makes it a bit boring to read. Since you are the protagonist, why is it always explained through other perspectives? You can follow the perspective of the protagonist, and then let the junior brother describe what he has experienced before in the form of narration. In this way, there will be no repetitive and redundant content, and the logic will appear simpler. When talking about branch lines, I specifically refer to cp, which is a feature of the article, but the description is a bit redundant. How should I put it, it feels a bit strange. The world view described is quite large, so it is understandable that there are many characters. However, I can't remember the characters among your senior sisters and junior brothers, because the division of the characters is not very clear. At first I thought they were all disciples of the same master at the same peak, but it turned out that there was one here and one over there, and it turned out to be very confusing. I suggested using the surnames of those who commonly practice immortality, plus senior brother/brother/sister. It would be better to use a few junior brothers who have the same master as the protagonist. Although I don't know what you want to write about the branch plot, the distinction between characters is still very important. (Personal opinion) I feel that it was originally intended to be a story about a relationship between a senior brother and a second senior brother, but in the end, I ended up writing it as a narration about the parts I had in mind that were in conflict with other junior brothers and the second senior brother. You, the author, may be feeling frustrated and a little happy, but I feel a little uncomfortable with it. (Maybe because of a bit of mental mysophobia) You can change it to the kind where senior brother sees the gossip and then the second senior brother knows about their private chat. This way I feel it is smoother and maybe more enjoyable🤔

It's good to watch, although it's a bit lacking and too rambling, but I still really like the plot in it. I don't know why Junior Brother Eleven is so at odds with the male protagonist [facepalm], Senior Brother has a long way to go [shy], the recent plot is a little tighter, but it's just too little.

I feel that it is different from other writing methods that use dialogue to advance the plot. The teacher is a delicate cook who attaches great importance to detailed description. He has a visual sense of eating delicious rice cooked passionately by old Ford or Ao 3 CP circles. The long paragraphs of text description are really suitable for people with poor eyesight who still like to read. It is really suitable for people with ADHD to listen and answer questions at the same time (the efficiency is very high! It feels like another piece of fresh air among the many voices written by foreign persimmons. It verifies the rationality of the protagonist's voice from another angle. Regarding your forward-looking description of the worldview in the first chapter, boss. When I read similar heart-felt articles in the past, I felt that everyone's acceptance of heart-felt messages was as tolerant as foreigners communicating in broken Chinese. Although there are facts to prove it, I felt that there was no acceptance process and I suddenly believed it. It looked weird. All in all, it's a blast to watch! It's so awesome to watch! So far, it looks like a very cute and interesting group portrait. Hao couldn't help but run over to give a rating (pass a rose to the boss🥺🌹)

It's pretty good, just a little stained, but the plot is pretty good.

Well, it feels like it is a large piece of Chinese language. Friends who like rhetoric in Chinese compositions can come in. Friends who like me more like it are rougher, more emotionally prominent, and very strong, and there is not so much rhetoric. Friends who directly say yes can already go out with me, because people like us are not welcome here. I finished reading it, but I was confused. I read 312, and then just a little bit of the plot. , I pay more attention to the plot and the cp and so on, because if you read too many books like this, it should be the one from Lao Bat. What I am more in line with is the characteristics of our usual kind of writing.

Super pretty! [Send heart] I hope Xiao Xi will be happy every day [Shy] Also! The eldest brother and the second brother are locked in a locked position. [Laughs]

It's very interesting to watch, and the plot is good [Sending Hearts] [Blowing Kisses] [Attention], but the emotional line is too slow. After watching it for so long, only the eldest brother seemed to be enlightened, while the second brother felt not enlightened at all [face covering] [face covering]

Although I like to watch group portraits, are there too many supporting roles? Moreover, the main plot has not gone through much, and it is not worth mentioning the transitional years of cultivation. Maybe it's my personal feeling, I think the second senior brother is a bit OOC, and now I can't combine his face and his voice at all. Senior brother, I haven't appeared for a long time, and there has been no interaction when I did appear｡°(°¯᷄◠¯᷅°)°｡Ross, does this mean that your love line is longer than your life? Finally, it's not easy for Rouse to write so much, come on! Finish it

How should I put it? The writing is very good. Maybe I can accept it except for the fact that the boss is forced to conceal his ability to hear his voice, which makes me a little uncomfortable. I can understand that it is for the sake of the overall situation, but it is inevitable that he will feel uncomfortable for the protagonist. I just want to ask if there will be a plot in the future where the protagonist discovers that his voice is heard?

It's pretty good-looking, but there are too few reviews to get a good rating, so I gave it a review. It seems that it has no CP at the moment, but I don't know if there will be one in the future. Although the second senior brother is a mess in his mind, he is a giant in action. He is a rare protagonist of this type who is hard-working and able to fight. It is not that the setting of strength is based on small tricks and tricks. I quite like this article, keep it up! But I hope that when the word count is low, it won't be too verbose with AI expansion, hahaha. There's nothing wrong with adding more nonsense to make it more cheerful!

It's very good. The author's writing is very delicate and the plot is very coherent. I can keep reading. Unlike other books, this book describes the plot and characters in detail. As long as you have the patience to read it slowly, you will find that the author's writing style is getting better and better. The author describes each character in the book in a three-dimensional way. They are not just supporting characters, they have their own character, their own life, their own path, and what they pursue and stick to. The author writes every plot very fully, and quotes a paragraph: If some books you usually read are fast food, then this one is a real meal. Of course, there are some minor shortcomings. The author's descriptions are very delicate and vivid, which are both advantages and disadvantages. The description of the environment of some scenes does not require three or four long paragraphs to be written in such detail. Although the scene you want to express is indeed more three-dimensional in people's minds, it is inevitably a bit complicated in the eyes of people who read for entertainment. I have a small suggestion. The setting in the book is that Xuantian Sect is the largest sect in this domain, but I personally feel that its strength is not highlighted. It seems that small and medium-sized sects have the courage to provoke a little. Secondly, it is not strong enough. It is the largest sect in the majestic world. When going to some secret realm or competing in a competition, the pomp is a bit lacking. As the first genius of the first sect, the senior brother has arrived at Nascent Soul early, but the description of his strength is not enough, and he does not have the feeling of crushing other people of his generation. The eldest brother's character does have some shortcomings, but he is also growing little by little. He looks forward to the day when the eldest brother truly becomes the "eldest brother of the sect". Only in this way can he be worthy of the second senior brother.

This book is really good. I basically have all the things I like, but the traffic is not good and not many people read it. I have a suggestion for the author, which is the name of each chapter. The author's name is too formal and not very attractive for reading. I think you can add some names that summarize the chapter after the existing chapter names that can attract people's reading interest. This way you can catch the reader's attention. As long as you catch it at the beginning, you will continue to read it, because the author's writing style is really good (these are just suggestions, personal opinion, and I don't say I have to point fingers or anything. I really like this book and want others to see it). Finally, I wish the author and everyone who likes this book good luck in work and study, and all their wishes come true [blowing kiss][blowing kiss]

Everyone is so cute! They are all flesh and blood (much better than some human-machine ones [crying]), and the author has created them well! ! And the author's writing is also very delicate (personal). It is not the story of one person, but the story of the entire sect. I hope that each of them will be well [love] [love] The author is also a part of the story. I think the author loves all the characters in the story (*^ω^*) The author is very happy every day (sympathy)

It's quite good-looking, and the protagonist's character is also quite to my liking. However, please don't have CP. I want the protagonist to be single and beautiful.

It's so cheesy and has a sharp writing style. I've read every book less. It's the last time I saw this style of writing. It's so delicious. I love it, but it feels like it's far away from the end. There are so many foreshadowings that haven't been unfolded yet. I'm itching to wait. I'm still thinking about it. I've already finished the second and third chapters of the climax plot. The author seems to be very busy now and will have to stop updating for a while. The wait for updates is so long. I wanted to tweet and found that I can't find this article in my tweets (Anxiang

My comments are worthless and what follows is the product of my madness. It's so beautiful that men are menstruating and women are going insane. This is the nemesis of depression and an alarm clock for vegetative people. She is so beautiful that the five guards in the village miss and love the widow. She is so handsome that tears flow from the corners of her mouth and flood into the Qiantang River. She is so beautiful. It was beautiful, it was God, it was my rose tears that illuminated my dark life and gave meaning to my world. I ran and jumped, and I danced the tango on the balcony on the 20th floor, which made me realize that God does exist. I was so beautiful that I shed tears. From now on, the world will no longer be short of water. Shen Yuxi, you are so cute (being beaten), the wood spirit root is good, the wood spirit root is wonderful! Shen Yuxi, your little habits are so cute! Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa. Covered! The author's writing style is very good, and the senior brother in his novel is so good that I don't know how to describe it. He has a correct outlook on life. While others may complain (?) Because of Shen Yuxi's noisy inner voice, he thinks in Chapter 315 that "in the final analysis, Shen Yuxi is the one who will be blamed and misunderstood for even "just thinking", and is not allowed to even "just think".". When I saw this, I can only say that no matter whether this pair is cb or cp, I will accept it, wow wow, it's great, although I will have a regret when reading the article, probably because the protagonist or the protagonist's sect did not win the first place, after all, most novels are like this. Infinitely glorious, I don't mean to say that the author's writing is bad, I'm just a little regretful, it's too daily, and daily life is wrapped in a knife. I actually read the article a little confused, after all, it was fast forwarded, Ye Xi is a good boy, hey, it's not impossible in the next year, I am not picky. Jing Cangyi is so gentle. No wonder Shen Yuxi likes her. Rereading Chapter 302, wow wow, so gentle. The fight between Senior Brother and Jing Cangyi was very interesting. It was a pity that Shen Yuxi did not play. She was obviously looking forward to it, but for the sake of fairness, the Second Senior Brother who showed off his power in his heart was so cute (nonsense...)

It feels pretty good~ But who is the male protagonist? Has he appeared? 👀

The article is very good, but it is not a fast-paced article. It may not fit the characteristics of fast-paced and refreshing articles here. The reading volume is relatively small and the rating is low. It has a grand world view, the writing is delicate and interesting, the characters are created, and the grudges and entanglements are well designed.

It's nice to watch, the second senior brother's voice is very funny, and the first senior brother is also... Interesting? (I can't find any words to describe it) The girl in the first episode was very miserable, and I personally felt that it was a waste. The content is smooth and reasonable. Can the big brother have more scenes?

Overall, it has good qualities, I recommend it. After finishing, maybe you can correct the problem that sometimes the language connection is not smooth? Of course I don't force it, it's up to you, the author, to think of it yourself! I haven't tied it yet, because I know it is a slow-burning article. I will read the slow-burning article more slowly, try to remember more details, and then I will be more surprised when I face each other later. As far as my current progress is concerned, I have begun to look forward to whether there will be any big sugar when the two trees bloom [laughing] I'm the author. When you see this review, can you tell me how many words you plan to write? Although I haven't tied it yet, I always feel that I have to finish it and read it again. Mainly, I feel that it will be more uncomfortable to follow the serialization of popular articles🥹🥹🥹 Oh, by the way, don't be fooled🥹🥹🥹I really took it into my heart, it's good for your appetite, please don't be fooled🥹🥹🥹

Super Invincible is good to watch, but it made me feel that I was not watching it from the perspective of the protagonist, but more like I was watching a narrative. I was really curious, why no one came to watch it? [Cry][Cry][Cry][Cry][Cry][Cry][Cry][Cry] In addition, the author, your writing style is really great, show your heart to your heart╮(￣▽￣)╭[Love][Love][Love][Love][Blow a kiss][Flow a kiss][Flow a kiss][Flow a kiss]

The writing is really great [blowing kiss] (it succeeded in making me, a person who has been reading for a long time, calm down and read chapter by chapter) Great cheers for the author. (I feel that the author is really the biological mother of the protagonist group, and I feel that the writing is super serious) The small encyclopedia and detailed descriptions of some scenes at the end of each chapter (at first I thought it was just to make up the word count, but later I discovered that writing is a world where the author and the reader share their thoughts, which also made me get [blowing kisses]). They made me feel that the author was really very careful in writing, and it felt like it had been planned for a long time (I wonder if there is a small map or something like that🤔). It's just that I can't remember the names of people and the corresponding characters (especially those of the Master's generation), and sometimes I feel a little confused [face covering]. Is there any kind of chapter or review that sort out the identity of the characters (maybe I haven't found or seen it) [Working on drafting] Maybe I haven't reached the chapter about the senior brother yet, so I feel that the senior brother seems dull (in terms of character), which makes me a little anxious for him, and I am also curious about how the author will write the emotional line between the senior brother and the junior sister. I really like the daily interactions between the protagonist group. Although after reading some of the character settings, it was so well written that it made me feel uncomfortable😭. I also felt that the protagonist group was just a group of people who had gone through ups and downs and hugged each other for warmth. The ending must be HE for all members [crying], although the past is determined to be impossible, and the reality may not be lucky, but at least I want to see them get what they want in the end [crazy] (if lines can also be opened) I hope the author will work harder and update more (you should also pay attention to your health), and look forward to the continuation of the main plot [Sending Hearts] (This is my first time to read the group portrait chapter by chapter, the words are a bit poor, please don't criticize if you have different opinions [eat melon])

This book is very nice! ! Believe me! But it feels like there is no CP Recently I have started to foreshadow the writing, looking forward to it

It's very beautiful. Each character is very three-dimensional, well drawn, and has its own charm. At first I thought it was a joke, but it turned out to have a sour undertone, which made everyone feel distressed. In the beginning, the sect was opposed to each other. Later, the cp who came out of the secret realm together was really good. I hope there will be a follow-up plot. There may be. I haven't seen it yet. By the way, why isn't the rating high? It's really beautiful.

Shuangqiang[cool][cool][cool] Master Long Aotian was paralyzed on the surface when he saw CP, but he was complaining about his second senior brother inwardly.

It's good to watch at the moment. I'll give it five stars first. I'll change it later if the plot is surprising. Ahhhhhhhhhhhh, I really like Sanjiu CP and that Wanrong and Tan. It's bad. I forgot their names. But it doesn't matter. I like it!

The plot setting is very interesting. What surprised me the most was the character creation. Everyone has another side or a real side that I didn't expect at all. As the plot progresses, the characters become more rich and three-dimensional. It's just a little delayed, and I feel like I'm still in the early stages of writing the story line. After reading about a hundred chapters, I found that the main line is too slow.

I have read all the updated chapters. The plot and characters are actually okay, but the author loves side descriptions, and sometimes the protagonist will not appear in many chapters. Personally, I don't like not seeing the protagonist appear for a long time, so I decided to wait for the end and not plan to follow up.