Having Fun with Warhammer

What is the main line? What happened? It's like a house without a foundation, and dishes without seasoning or salt. It's too passive. It's like playing a plot in a legendary game that automatically finds its way. It's tasteless.

It's a bit outrageous [smile] The gangs in a small hive city on a planet are actually super humans who are comparable to Eldar succubi and kill big demons. One can't help but think of how Chaos managed to sustain itself in front of the Empire for 10k years

I have read Chapter 62 so far, and the plot is okay. The hooks are relatively small. That's why I feel that the protagonist's IQ is getting lower and lower. From a slightly shrewd person in Chapter 2, he has turned into the hive Arnold in Chapter 62. Is this the price of playing with Warhammer with a smile? [Note], and the protagonist and Melissa. Judging from Melissa's amnesia in the article and the author's comments, she may be the original Qingmei. And she is the girlfriend of the boss. Although the protagonist's current IQ does not seem like a relationship, and the relationship between the protagonist and Melissa is more like enemies, the relationship between Groove still reminds me of the Dragon Clan of Groove. For me, it is a little bit annoying. I hope there won't be any plot of recovering memory and falling in love. The protagonist should continue to be a bad guy [Bookshelf Plus 1]

In fact, I don't want to give a star - I'm too lazy to rate it, but these three stars are all for the golden opening, the dark lower nest, the sister who froze to death, the deceased mother, the old father, the struggling people, the sector war changed the planet's production capacity, the governor's greed and changes destroyed the survival of the lower nest people, that incitement The one who is silently angry, the giver of alms and givers, loyalty and betrayal, the coming storm, so many targets, and then they are gone. There are not so many conflicts and hidden lines in the back. There is no main line of clear purpose and contradiction, and there is no sense of rhythm. It is like a walking chicken with automatic path finding. . .

It's okay. Anyway, I am Yun Zhanhammer, so I read it as a time travel novel.

What a contradiction. The protagonist knows it's Warhammer, but he doesn't even know the basic settings in Warhammer.

This book can be used as a Western fantasy brave adventure story with the setting and background of Warhammer. I personally think it is very interesting. But author, you have to think about how to write it later. The protagonist is an illegal psychic and can transform into a demon. When he leaves the planet, how to write the protagonist without telling the identity of the protagonist so that he will not be hunted all the time. The issue of strength is also troublesome. The further you get to the back, the harder it is to find the boosts. The protagonist is a big monster when activated. Ordinary demigods are no match for you. You can only secretly weaken or strengthen all the enemies behind you. Even if the problem of the protagonist is put aside, there is also the problem of team strength. It should be seriously strengthened. The teammates are too weak and they are all auxiliaries. There is no deputy C. Each team has to have its own role in the team battle. Otherwise, the characteristics will not be remembered. This is like a king. The jungler has 4 auxiliaries. If you win a replay, they will all be defeated. You write dozens of chapters about them, but after ten chapters, you have no impression of them before. The protagonist has too many battle scenes, his strength has grown too fast, and he has become a big demon. You have to slow down and write the story of the team and write some daily stories. You cannot be the same as Warhammer. The previous basic design can no longer be regarded as a standard Warhammer. It is truly dark and hopeless, everyone is suffering, and everyone lives in a cesspool. You call it Warhammer, but the protagonist has never suffered a big loss, has no pain or incompetent rage. Even the protagonist of Battle Through the Sky has had three years to endure countless pain and torture. Although defeat turned into victory in the end, this is just a kind of exercise. It is a kind of bitterness first and then sweetness. When you finally reach the top, it is a sense of satisfaction. Western names are difficult to remember. If you don't put in a little extra effort, you will actually forget them after a while. It is best to come up with a nickname that is easy to remember, such as God of War, Balrog, etc., Which is nice and easy to pronounce. Even if you are more ruthless and kill someone, you can also xxx Wolf Warrior. When book friends mention Wolf Warrior, they can remember what he has done. If I have a Western name, I will be confused after reading a hundred chapters. Even with these problems, it is still very interesting. I suggest that the author can continue writing this book to enhance his writing skills and practice. He can write a fantasy novel about Western warriors.

The writing is okay, but it's a bit outrageous. There is a bottom hive organization with psykers running all over the ground and making psyker potions. Is your potion a ghost potion? The plot of the bottom nest is a bit watered down. With this style, I feel that this bottom nest is going to defeat all the enemies of mankind.

The protagonist clearly knows about Warhammer, but why doesn't he know about psykers and the five evil gods? [Thinking][thinking]

When I read the first chapter, I was quite looking forward to it, until a time traveler protagonist came...