To Repay My Debt, I Started Taking Care of a Cold, Proud Girl

Five stars to encourage the author. I'm not sure whether it's a single girl or multiple girls. It seems to be pretty good. Hmm... Anyway, I hope it's a single girl. I really like Fang Yi. Let's treat each other as two adults redeeming each other.

It is unimaginable to see such fine chaff in 🍅. 1. The author's writing style is delicate and vivid, full of the flavor of youth pain literature, which made me wonder what era we are in now. 2. The plot is rich and there are many foreshadowings. Each character has his or her own youthful pain, but due to Bai Qing's time travel, their respective stories are connected and narrated. 3. The author's previous books all ended abruptly after 1,000 or 2,000 words. I hope the author can continue to persevere, come on!

[Face covering] The writing style is not too great, but it is much better than three spoons or something like that. It is actually quite good when placed on a whole tomato. At least it is not overly embarrassing. [Thinking] Before Chapter 60 or 70, to be honest, the main plot is unreasonable to a certain extent, but there is also a trivial and broken hidden thread (try to make it substantive in the following chapters. If you have the energy, you can consider changing the previous chapters and interspersing some content), making everything It makes sense [what] As a redemption story, the redemption of the heroine is almost complete. If the next step is to have a simple and irrational love story, it will deviate from the topic. The male protagonist himself will definitely be dealt with, but how to deal with the two themes of Zixiao's family and the teacher is particularly important [smile] If it is handled properly, even the 9.9 Zhuang Shengmengdie will be afraid of it. [Laughing evilly] But there is one biggest flaw in this article. A slow pace is good, but the progress must be visible at a glance without being awkward. After reading a lot of books, you can get very little done. You can increase the details of "objects", for example, instead of describing the heroine suppressing her laughter, you can write about other actions without explaining them. Instead of directly describing them, you can mention them from the side. Herzog's wife is like this [rolls eyes]. If you have time, you can go and see Long San's lower part, the red well section. If you have a stomachache, it will be extremely painful. Three stomach-ache attacks in a row, within two pages. [Hugs face] Forget it, generally speaking, the writing is pretty good. It just depends on how you deal with Zi Xiao. It can't be as thin as the heroine's treatment. [Love] If the author still has energy, he can write something similar to a prequel. It tells the story of the male protagonist's previous life and rationalizes the male protagonist's behavior in the first 70 chapters. These chapters can be titled separately instead of interspersed in the text, just like "The Past in Time" in The Three-Body Problem.

It feels like a bit of a stream of consciousness, a little confused, but it's not a big problem. It's a good redemption story. It's just that the sword is really thorough [face covering] and it's still a bit slow. It's really depressing, but there is indeed a little light. The female protagonist is probably saved, but the male protagonist is still waiting for redemption. The two-way redemption is beautiful. I don't know how it will be written. Please give it a try, author. (By the way, is the boy who looks like a girl a boy or a girl? I don't understand. Or are there actually two people? Are they twins?)

This novel is good, the articulation is clear, and there is a hint of warmth in the depression. According to the current situation, the protagonist should save everyone. In fact, I rarely give five stars. Now I will give five stars to support the author. The author has published so many new books. Don't be distracted. Just pay attention to one book [Love] [Top post]

When is Zisha, I want to see the heroine get sick [shy]

My depressive literature, the writing is pretty good, I hope it doesn't end badly.

Even though I can't understand it, I might as well like it.

It's a good light novel. The male protagonist feels a bit like the male protagonist in Japanese comics. He is the kind who looks at everything and has a relationship with each character. He feels like a practical male protagonist. Come on, author.

Very good, surprising Good guy, it's all about yandere