Cultivation in League of Legends: I Got Teemo's Invisibility from the Start

If you are cultivating immortality, it is good to cooperate with the steps to ascend to the gods. Apart from being a bit of a holy mother, everything else is pretty good. He carries a lot of trolls and is obedient for what he is told. But you don't have many obedient people. It feels like your status is really low and anyone can do it in disguise.

If only hero skill talents are too monotonous, you can create some, such as runes, summoner skills, or summoner talents, such as gathering storm, etc.! Directly written as a perverted and cool article! Don't miss the good girls, and don't waste the bad girls! Accept them all!

It's too short, there's no way I can't keep it! Take a look at the one next door, which has a minimum of three photos a day, and updates are added from time to time.

Although there are some minor flaws in the front, the potential is still there. Please write well and keep going!

Not bad, worth having

The subject matter is very good. Just a little short

Seeing as you haven't rated it yet, I'll give you a good review. It seems pretty good so far, and the subject matter is novel.

Very nice, quite innovative

Fine! Not too cliché, but interesting!

In some places, the writing is very flavorful, and the conception also has a sense of realism. However, I feel that the portrayal of some characters is somewhat contradictory, vague and sloppy, and has a feeling of being hastily brushed off. For example, the description of the protagonist's father at the beginning, although a supporting role is not important, portrays an image in the middle, and a paragraph is written with a bit of flavor and self-expression. His realistic style becomes abstract later on, and he wants to go over it in one stroke, blur it out, and have a sense of dislocation from the realism in the previous part. In my opinion, the author, if you want to write about a detailed description, such as the shaping of the image of your father, you have to insist on shaping him to completion. I feel that using this kind of scene description to enrich the story seems to be your strength. At least that's what I see so far. A suggestion, if you think what I said is wrong, you don't need to adopt it. I'm just talking about my feelings after reading it. The shaping and lines of some supporting characters can make the work thicker to read.