Struggling in the World I Wrote

It's a very good book. I enjoyed reading it. The background setting is quite novel and the character settings stand up. It's beautiful. 😄 Go crazy When Nott redeems all four people, and then the "shot that rings the world" happens, and then all four people become demons, the order's combat power will be even higher (laughs, escape at the speed of light (boring, I want to see rivers of blood) Greatness is a curse, built on corpses. ——Heinrich Himmler For Isreal, Nott is everything to her, and she can only protect Nott's heart until death; she forcibly takes Nott's goal of saving the world (for the protagonist, it may be atonement for the world) on herself, but because Nott is too weak and the protagonist's guilt, she It reflects the temporary breakdown of the relationship between the two and Isreal's continuous development of feminization (laughs, for Isreal, this world is not one ten thousandth as good as Nott. I hope that the person who saves everything can also save her. I also hope that when the two meet again, Isreal and Nott can hug each other and cry. Scholar Liang Ji asked his son Liang Shuming: "Will the world be good?" Liang Shuming replied: "I believe the world is getting better day by day." Three days later, Liang Ji threw himself into a lake (I don't know why I added the last paragraph, but I just wanted to add it)

It's good-looking, and the characterization is very vivid from what I've seen so far. Isa chose the protagonist's dignity and life. This is the best result in my opinion. Compared with letting the protagonist insist on staying in the team, the consequence is that the protagonist is too weak and dies on the road, causing the backbone of the team to collapse, or others or even Isa sacrifices to save the protagonist, making the dreams and ideas of the entire team a joke. Isa knows the meaning of her choice. To be honest, the reason why she took the risk is to realize the dream of the protagonist. She also said that she will always wait for him in that village after she succeeds. I personally can't hate this character. The character of the protagonist is also very real. His contradiction lies in his lack of strength and his dream of salvation. This is caused by his arrogance as a former creator. Especially meeting the part he understands will only deepen this arrogance. This arrogance itself is also the charm of the protagonist, which is reflected in the word struggle. If he can practice this kind of arrogance to save the world, it will not be a bright spot.

In terms of emotional description in the author's writing style, the part where Isreal was questioned three times in a row is most vivid and vivid. ""Then can you accept that when you end everything and see him again, there is a strange woman standing next to him? Can you accept..." (Please see the original text of Chapter 3 for details) After the previous foreshadowing, coupled with the heroine's answers, it makes people feel very vivid and makes them feel like a real person. After all, it's the Golden Three Chapters! ! ! And the proud and easy-going Rebecca (I join the Beka Party!) In terms of fighting at White Lion, the fighting is great! \The part where Rebecca was worried that the protagonist would die but still couldn't open the secret treasure made her heartache when she suddenly stabbed me (*´I`*)/ (Becca, you must seize this opportunity and step forward bravely! Successfully become the heroine!) I suggest you read that part where Isreal is angry and read it carefully. Is it red and warm, Lao Yi? (I love, love, love) After I watched it, auv is called authentic~ Damn Isreal, just wait to be surpassed by Rebecca! Other aspects are also clearly prioritized, and the minor ones are mentioned in one stroke, which makes your brain feel refreshed (cough, I would like to write more about Becca's tongue kiss [laughter])

It's broken [crying] Why is it broken [almost crying]. I've been keeping it for so long and I didn't dare to check the account to see how many updates there were, but it's gone! Why are there no books in this genre that I like anymore? [Crying][Crying][Crying][Crying][Crying] I have to start looking for books again. I don't know how long it will take this time. The book is really good-looking, with good plot structure, character creation, and environment creation.

The book is very beautiful, the characters in it are quite interesting to me, and the characters are well developed. The emotions of the characters are delicate and abundant. It can be said that the characters are really described and come to life. The plot also has ups and downs, with ups and downs that make people want to watch it in one sitting. The descriptions in some places really poked me, and the writing is pretty good. I really like this novel you wrote! The bad thing is that the writing is a bit not smooth. For example, I understand that the author wants to describe in detail in some places, but detailed description should try to avoid providing repeated information. Sometimes the author writes two sentences with somewhat overlapping meanings, which gives people a strange feeling (hhh), just like Cheluolian. For example, the author likes to repeat some words used to express turning points twice. I understand that this represents a certain stuttering and the emotional excitement of the characters. However, it appears too many times, especially when describing psychology, which greatly affects the perception. The last point is that the author likes to put a comma after these turning words, but, which greatly affects the reading experience. For example: "But you did not explain the reason for your point of view" and "But, you did not give the reason for this point of view", which look and feel very different. It is true that separation will enhance the tone and reflect the character's emotions and personality, but it doesn't look very good. The above are some of my thoughts, and I hope the author can continue to create wonderful stories!

This year's college entrance examination, I still stayed up late watching [Pause][Pause][Pause]. The plot of this book is beyond words. Everyone's character is great. The conflict between the heroines has not yet broken out. I guess it will be very interesting later. But, I still want to see the normal plot development. If it is too deliberate because some plots may be more interesting, it is very good to set the stage. And I believe the author can do it. I hope to polish it well and I can start with 5 million. I believe the data will get better and better. Then, I think that in emotional dramas, the psychology of the characters must be consistent with the background. I hope that every character will not be ignored. I have not found any poisonous points now. I hope to maintain it and speed up the update. Damn it, you give the data this way and that. The front of this book is uncomfortable and slow-paced. In the end, I may have to keep the book. I hope the author will insist on it. If the book has not been updated in June and there are no major poisonous points, a master certification will be sent first (if I pass the exam). If I don't pass the exam, I will get a big health care [Top post] [Top post] [Top post] [Top post] [Top post]

This Japanese-style Western fantasy novel has the same feeling as staying up late to watch The Dark Lord and the Yandere Sister. Come on, author! My suggestion is that the current plot feels a bit like being oppressed by danger. Although the world view is set in such a dangerous world, it is still a bit depressing to watch. This will also make readers feel that the male protagonist is "weak" and always feels that he is in a "sense of loss of control." The best thing is to arrange more daily plots of traveling or resting, or for the female protagonists to become stronger under the guidance of the male protagonist, and to give the female protagonists more performances to improve their combat power, which can also reduce the feeling of losing control. Then push the emotional line a little more. Have more sweet interactions with the heroines, and write more about the twisted psychology of the heroines. How the heroines changed from innocent girls to psychologically twisted patriarchs. The biggest highlight of the yandere novel is the twisted soul! This process of change caused by the male protagonist is a great point The shaping of the male protagonist is also very important. It can be weak, but the arc of the male protagonist's character must be shown. Don't be afraid of people saying that you are too procrastinating for not promoting the main plot. You must know that most people actually focus on this type of article for yandere fighting and distorted literature. Writing these two points well is the most important. The shaping of the world view and combat effectiveness is the icing on the cake.

It's a very good book. Although it seems to be a relatively old-fashioned book as can be seen in the introduction, the actual content is quite interesting. It can be seen that the author is trying to break out of this framework. The combination of first-person and third-person is a great touch, and the transition is smooth. There is more than one male protagonist in the team that I like very much, which makes it more reasonable. The purpose of driving the male protagonist out of the team is for the male protagonist's good, and the reasons are sufficient and reasonable. This kind of plot is slightly different from books with a similar theme, and the differences are added up little by little. But there are still some shortcomings. I think there are some problems with the progressive transition of emotions. The most prominent one is the scene where the male protagonist and the knight were quarreling. They were clearly talking and laughing before. Although it touches the male protagonist's pain points, the male protagonist should only explode after trying to stop the knight for once but to no avail... The knight was already on top so he didn't listen to the male protagonist. This is normal. Also, I hope that the male protagonist can have a little gauntlet to strengthen his strength. It doesn't have to be too strong. The male protagonist is too weak now and the gauntlet is almost useless. Finally, I feel that it is a bit difficult for the author's book to become popular, and I hope the author can persevere. The author can try to change the writing style to a lighter style, and it will feel very suitable. Come on, author, I will support your words! ! !

It's really good to read, but the score may be low because of the small number of chapters. Sure enough, I can't believe the Tomato score. The author shouldn't be discouraged, he will definitely get better and better as he writes! I can't stand Tomato's "Shuangwen" anymore. I'm not interested in the flat and single-faced male protagonist's character, the pursuit of revenge, and the retribution of flaws, which seem to be "realistic" and in line with human nature. I'm not interested at all•ᴗ•💧. It's been a long time since I've seen a male protagonist with a kind heart, big ambitions and small wishes like this article (I think of Emiya Shirou for no reason! But there are definitely many people with bad personalities). I think it's good for an article that can make readers think. Originally I didn't want to write a short composition, but the author's updates are too slow! ! ! The winter vacation is so slow (of course, slowness is not a problem, as long as you can stick to it once a day, it's pretty good). The main reason is that I am really afraid that the author will become a eunuch halfway through the writing! ! ! So I wrote a short composition to encourage you o(^▽^)o Come on, it's so beautiful. I really like the portrayal of the characters in it, and the plot development is very solid (I don't think the development is slow, it's good to be steady and steady like this), but I feel that the emotional portrayal is too fast and a little anxious. In fact, it could be more delicate. Even if the author's explanation and description are logically reasonable, there is a saying that liking someone in two or three days is still not realistic (ah, how can I put it, it's not that it's impossible to like someone in two or three days, but the portrayal is still not very good in this aspect) qwq), I don't know if the author is a newbie, but if you keep writing like this, it will definitely pay off! Come on ٩(๑^o^๑)۶

The author's writing style is relatively good, but the beginning feels a bit too strong and very abrupt. This feeling will not get better until the sixth chapter, and the perception will continue to get better from the sixth chapter. Previously, you would have thought that the protagonist was just an aggrieved ghost who kept internal friction because his ideals were too lofty. It was myself who caused the suffering, so I resented myself, and because I saved the hero, I had support and the motivation to live. However, because I was not strong enough, I began to distrust and become afraid. I didn't think about it from the perspective of my teammates at all. It can be said that he is a completely unlikable character. But it is from the sixth chapter that the protagonist has a new understanding of his situation with the brave and the rescue team, and strengthens his belief that he wants to go on and do something. This is the growth of the protagonist. I believe the author wants to shape the protagonist into a character who cannot be liked by others at the beginning, who is hated by others, and who often Such an epic story about going through a series of difficulties and twists and becoming a hero with the help of his own beliefs and companions can only be said to be the most touching novel I have read on Tomato recently, but I also hope that the author will really put his heart into creating a protagonist who has firm beliefs and can be called a hero. To sum up, it is not a fast food, but a novel that you need to use your brain and energy to read. It is totally worth watching in your free time.