Transmigrate into Luo Luo's Adventure: The Dark War for Supremacy Begins

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Very well, the wild gorilla died well, the golden iron beast died to save him, he turned around and became brothers with the tiger king, but the golden iron beast's bones were not cold yet! I really don't understand why he forgives the Tiger King, and what qualifications he has to forgive the Golden Iron Beast.

Overall, it's not bad. The two war kings are from the same ethnic group, and their combat power is unbalanced. According to your plot, no one knows that the Wild Orangutan is of the same family as the Tiger King. The Wild Orangutan can hide while the Tiger King attacks the small town and slowly eats away at it. A clan has one leader, that is, one person knows the laws of the universe, then these two war kings are the leaders.

The writing is very good. The plot is self-explanatory based on TV. The logic is very strong, and the characters are very three-dimensional. The characters are clear, there is no mercy, only the decisiveness is really very comfortable to watch. There is also a silent trust between the two brothers. They are beings who can trust each other. However, the sense of substitution for the person issue is weak. If it is changed, the experience will be better. The dilemma now is that there is a traitor in the iron beast army, and there is Jingjing in the Fire Dragon Valley. I am afraid that the traitor or others will be curious to unlock the seal. Then the energy amethyst will not be used as a wedding dress for Jingjing!

Two updates a day is too little, and it's a new book. You should work on it until the 150th chapter and then update it twice a day, and update more in the early stages.

Good luck, author. The writing is very good. Don't stop updating. I look forward to finishing it.

So beautiful

So beautiful

It's pretty good looking, with clear levels, not overwhelming, very flattering

It's very in-depth, the author has ideas, and the entry point is great. It's worth reading.