Mutual healing + school life + sweet romance + childhood friends
A sensitive girl next door x a gentle, easily moved older boy next door
Ning Chuiyun had grown up without love and didn’t know how to respond to other people’s feelings. No one had ever taken her feelings seriously, so of course she didn’t know how to love someone else.
High school always seemed to press down on her for no reason. The wind brushed her hair, while her family continued to bring her pain. After being put down yet again, she sat beneath a streetlamp, tears in her eyes, clutching her head and sobbing.
A faint touch came from above. Who was it? She lifted her head and saw He Hu awkwardly patting her on the head, lips parted, unsure what to say.
Her lips parted, her voice hoarse. She was crying so hard she could barely catch her breath. “Why... did you... come?”
“I... was... worried... about you...”
When two people who don’t know how to love meet, which one of them will open up first?
Before long, she had grown used to the boy’s comfort. Whenever she cried, she would lean on his shoulder, breathing in his familiar scent until she felt safe. Perhaps they had already become the closest people in each other’s lives back when the wind blew around them in the park.
“Don’t cry...”
“Why... not?”
“It... hurts... here...”
“I... like you.”
“Huh?”
“Do... you like me?” Ning Chuiyun asked, her voice tinged with shyness. She looked at the boy before her, his face flushed red, and could no longer hold back. Rising onto her toes, she kissed him. The scene she had imagined countless times in her dreams had finally come true.
He Hu froze, but didn’t push her away. He let it happen, a hint of amusement in his eyes as he murmured incoherently,
“I... like...”
The wording is very beautiful, more like prose than a novel. Although the introduction says that the heroine has a freewheeling character, the first impression she gives is that of sentimentality. Both the male protagonist and the female protagonist are perfect artistic images that combine truth, goodness and beauty (perhaps the female protagonist has psychological flaws, but she is very kind in nature and is unwilling to trouble others or harm others), so that it is difficult for people to shine. If you look at this novel from a step-by-step perspective that celebrates kindness, friendship, and growth, it's actually pretty good. But from a plot perspective, it's not exciting at all. Try to enrich the characteristics of the heroine. If there are problems in the heroine's native family, it should be used as a clue in the novel. In the first six chapters, there is no hint of this aspect, which results in the image of the heroine not being three-dimensional enough. How to set up the conflict, it is not a conflict that the male protagonist discovers that the female protagonist is worried, because the probability is 100%. Please think of the protagonist as a flesh-and-blood person, with greed and desire, who should be slowly overcome on the road to growth, so that there is conflict. So do others. The teacher's portrayal is good, with both a stern side and a considerate side. The heroine's love for the hero is ignorant and can become stronger and stronger. After a series of conflicts, it gradually weakens and becomes more rational. At this time, the "do whatever you want" character is definitely a key point (it must be reflected in specific examples). Scenery description, appearance description, psychological description, etc. Are only tools to serve the plot. It is important not to declare the plot to be the master. Only when the plot is implemented, readers will love to watch it. If high school life is hard and you can't write about sweet love, then boldly write about hard high school life! The pain of answering questions, declining grades, and confused future are all intertwined with love! If there is no way back, is there no way forward? Finally, the theme of the novel returns to the difficulty of growing up. The male protagonist and the female protagonist finally get admitted to a university. They look back on the three years of high school and look at each other with a smile. During this period, the protagonist can be confused, anxious or depressed, and the key is two-way redemption. To describe the specific cases that lead to confusion, anxiety and depression, it is impossible to achieve the resonance effect by merely relying on hazy dreams, humid rainy seasons, and confused inner renderings. Of course, the author's wording is very beautiful. If you make good use of this advantage, you can definitely gain a wave of readers. The future is promising, come on! 😘
The plot of the story is very exciting. It is a good youth campus novel. The author's writing is very youthful. I am looking forward to the development of the plot in the future. Keep up the good work!