National Fate: I Lost My Memory and Have to Play Zhang Qilin

How to say it? I have read many books, and my book reviews are very sharp. It can be seen that some of the descriptions are not delicate enough, and the innocent description is not smart enough, and there is no clear growth line, but it can definitely get an 8 points. The shortcomings are very conspicuous, that is, they are not delicate enough, but the characters are well grasped. There will definitely be some OOC, but not many. It's just that the author wants to write a new story, which is very bold. This is what attracts me to this book. It is another national destiny theme in another world, and the focus is on different adventures! ! , I have seen a well-written book before that scored more than 9 points. The difference between the two books is that there are some good sentences in the description book, but there are very few. In addition, Tomato knows everything, there will be system errors and some inexplicable bad sentences and typos. If there are no good things to attract attention in the early stage, many people will really give low scores. In addition, many people read fanfics mainly to complain about CP and to make up for regrets. However, Wu Xie's appearance and the choice of Wu Xie instead of the Evil Emperor will screen out some people, because some of the descriptions in it make Wu Xie too immature, such as being dug out after being buried in the sand. The moment he woke up, he should have clearly understood why Gu Sixi was no longer nearby, so he should have some psychological expectations. He has not experienced anything before, instead of wasting time looking for him in a place that may face a second collapse. It is normal to not want to face reality, but in such a crisis, he has no choice. Wu Xie is actually a very smart person. You can't write about his naive points in his most innocent period and then refute them later. I didn't see a clear growth line, all I saw was an ambiguous atmosphere. The point is that Wu Xie's description failed, which is also an important reason for the low score. How to say it? I have seen more than 200 chapters, and I seem to know why the rating is low. One is that the guy who is having an affair with Wu Xie is a fake guy, but it is a bit similar to the main character who has amnesia. It is a role-playing type, a bit similar to the guy's emotions and memories. The command is forced to be input, and then the robot is allowed to act according to the command, causing him to actually have a The little brother from the original world is still there waiting for them to come back and was the one who first interacted with Wu Xie. But this little brother is another person. He doesn't know Wu Xie at all, but simply because of the insinuated feelings and projected feelings, he had an ambiguous period with him. The atmosphere of the two of them falling in love is very clear in the writing, and there are many descriptions. The protagonist's sentence about Wu Xie being cute is very ambiguous, actually. It's even a bit similar to the feeling of being about to talk. But the problem is that this is a stolen fanfic. You can have an original protagonist, and you can write the protagonist as a little brother, but you can't have two little brothers, and then you have to write an emotional story with the two little brothers. There will be a sense of dissonance, and the cp jade is too conspicuous. The relationship progresses very quickly, too quickly, which leads to a deep sense of separation. It feels like the protagonist is almost kissing and holding hands, but Wu Xie has not recorded emotions on him at all. The two of them have already had close contact. But you are a fake person, and he loves another person. You are just a fake product. The author also wrote a side story later, that is, the one in the original world has a small side story, which will make the sense of separation even more severe, and it is even weirder. There is a kind of bloody feeling where you find a substitute, you love me, and then the substitute falls in love with you, which is a little bit bloody.

Hi, treasure! (Drifting and parking) (picking off sunglasses) (appearing with a rose in his mouth) (tripping over the pants he had thrown away before) (sliding on the pants in a hurry) (holding the chin) (holding the forehead) (in short, doing a lot of poses while sliding) (delivering the rose accurately) (raising eyebrows) (wink) (sliding away on the pants) [lick screen] [lick screen] [lick screen] Beautiful! It's a miracle as beautiful as Venus' golden ratio! I wish I could burst out crying and screaming from the foot of Five Elements Mountain, run all over the Five Mountains and climb Mount Everest, cry like a spiral, kneel down on my knees and cry for your beauty until my soul is shaken, my internal organs tremble, and my tears form the Yangtze River, the Yellow River, and the Pacific Ocean to nourish you! [Learned][Top post][Lick the screen]

Come on update! And can Wu Xie appear soon [laughs] [grievance]

It's okay, but the other three people don't like it. Let's get the tender cows together. I really don't want to see those three people.

How did the heroine meet Wu Xie? And what is going on with the system White Star? When encountering such a system. The host is given amnesia (ー△ー;). The heroine has experienced so many worlds and her body should be very strong. How can she become unemployed at the first step? I have lost my memory, so why do I still remember Wu Xie? Author, you are a novice. Encourage and encourage you to have the courage to write.

It's super good-looking. Maybe it's a little dirty at the beginning, but it's pretty good. It's made up of multiple copies. Especially after Wuxie came, our little brother acted super doting!

I've read a lot. It would be nice if I could give my little brother a little more detailed description, and I could give him a little more stamina and strength. Come on, author, I will always support you. ✌︎˶╹ꇴ╹˶✌︎

It's okay, but Qiping. Com, Gu Xu, and Gu Sixi are too slow.

Very interesting, very interesting, and full of content\(//∇//)\. It's just the author, can you write quickly until Wuxie comes out? ψ(｀∇´)ψ I especially hope that Wu Xie will come out.

Big cheers for the author, it's super cool (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡