Esports: After Retiring, I Started an Online Romance with a Big Shot

The plot is quite good, but it needs some minor tweaking; there are some issues with punctuation and word choice in a few chapters, which affects the reading experience. The two male leads are well-developed characters. However, the part near the end where the male lead mentions that he and his teammates are considering retirement was a bit heartbreaking. In the end, they can only be teammates for a year or two, which is realistic, but also a little hard to accept.

There's room for improvement. Few of the female characters are good; they all seem silly and prone to causing trouble. Because it's geared towards female readers, it might alienate many. It's unfair to say that female characters in a dual-male lead story have to be villains. The most memorable character was a little girl named Wanzi who uttered a single normal sentence.

It's a good story, but Yan Jin suffered so much over the past five years... The writing was alright when the misunderstanding was cleared up, but it's still a pity. Five years, the best five years of their lives... And the outside world doesn't know about their bond, which is a real shame.

It's so good! The values ​​are so positive! Our Jin Jin is such a pitiful baby, but his moon shines on him, and they will be together forever, happy forever! Wishing all the couples eternal happiness! Keep up the good work, author! (Actually, I feel there's a slight shortcoming: I didn't have a specific image of Jin Jin's appearance, but Duan describes his appearance a lot, and I feel like I'm favoring the seme a bit. I'm so sorry, ...

This is a really good novel. The beginning is a bit angsty, it's so heartbreaking, I really want to hug the little support character. After all the suffering, happiness will follow! It's a bittersweet story with a lot of flashbacks. The plot is a bit convoluted, and the emotions are intense. One person bears too much, but thankfully it's a two-way street!

I spent the whole morning reading this book. Here's a summary. The romance between the two male leads in this book is very direct and doesn't drag on. It has everything it needs, and it's well-organized with smooth transitions between chapters. While the male lead is from a wealthy family, it avoids the unpleasant plot points often found in wealthy CEO novels.

They are two very cute people, their relationship flows smoothly, and the flashbacks are well interspersed. The only slight flaw is Shen Yanjin's early self-narration, which reveals a bit too much of his inner thoughts. This is likely due to a bias in word choice and language expression. In contrast, Duan Mingyue's later inner thoughts are perfectly fine, just right, and vividly portrayed.

Duan Mingyue ❤️ Shen Yanjin is so sweet! Mingyue is incredibly intelligent, and little Yanjin is also very cute and shy. In short, they are just so incredibly good to watch! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

This book is truly a gem among Tomato's dual-male protagonist novels!!! The writing is excellent and flows smoothly. The ending is pretty much the same as other e-sports novels; the protagonist isn't made weak and timid, and the male lead is very considerate and understanding. It's also the first time I've seen an e-sports novel where the protagonist retires right at the beginning. It's definitely worth reading, highly recommended!!!

Aside from the somewhat rushed ending, the character descriptions, psychology, details, and foreshadowing were all well done. The parts where Duan Mingyue and Yingold had some misunderstandings were really heart-wrenching, which indirectly shows that the book is good. If possible, I hope the author can publish more books. I like it.