Giving the First Emperor Thirty More Years to Live Has Nothing to Do with You, Yi Xiaochuan

Author, author, how can you be so short? [Laughing evilly] Lu Su is gone, so am I. Goodbye

I like this book very much. It made me understand a lot of things. Great support for the author!

Personally, I think the writing is pretty good, and the author himself seems to be a very thoughtful person [Like] [Like] It was too outrageous later on. I thought it was okay in the early stage, but it collapsed?

How to say it? After reading a few chapters, I feel it's a bit watery, but the writing is still very good. There is also a time-travel story about cultivating immortals. It's convenient for the heroine. You can have a harem of 2 to 3 people. Anyway, within five people is best. In addition, you can simplify some things. Don't be so watery later on. The system can also be more powerful. After all, you are already a system writer. Some things in your outline are a bit wordy, or you can write a little extra to talk about this with readers in the extra. Some of the sentences are not fluent. I don't know if you are a novice or a veteran. This is a problem. Some parts are not very smooth to read, and when encountering things, sometimes you have to be a little cruel. You can be good, but not too bad, and not too much. After all, the characters have to live by themselves. I hope I hope to write better and better in the future. I seldom write this kind of thing. The main reason is that I read it very well, but some sentences don't make sense, or they are too wordy. I can be more concise in terms of etiquette, or write it correctly. I hope the author can read it, because this is what we book friends want. If you have suggestions, we will give you feedback. I hope the author can also listen to the suggestions and create a good book to read [laughing] [laughing] [laughing]

I don't know how to evaluate it, but those who are short on books can take a look. I hope they can cut out 60% of the inner drama of the protagonist. I feel that the plot is a bit slow and there are too many inner dramas, but it is still interesting.

Brother, wow, brother, wow, my sister is now number one on the monthly list, and she is also number one on the overall list. Brother, brother, please pay attention to me😭 Happy sister, brother~ If the brother doesn't want to care about his sister, just say so. Why should he treat his sister like this? It seems that the sister is being sentimental. That's right. The brother is weak and needs more rest. The sister is so clinging to the brother. It's the sister's fault. It hurts the brother's body. The sister is also very distressed. But no matter how much the sister's heart hurts, the brother must also take care of the sister. Do you think that's right? Brother ~ @219

They are all very good, and the writing is very smooth and normal. Come on, the author just has an emotional problem with Lu Shu and the protagonist. I hope it is just a friendship and not in-depth communication. I hope the protagonist can become an immortal and achieve enlightenment. Or later ascend to the throne and conquer all realms. Anyway, just don't have anything to do with Lu Su.

Yes, it has some truths about life. Generally speaking, so does the protagonist. The writing is very good. I feel that everyone lives for it. It can make you feel some of the truths of the book and understand some of life. So come on, please continue to work hard, and please don't care about my evaluation. Please be yourself.

Yi Xiaochuan's shame as a time traveler, neither the people who loved him nor his lover could be saved

Thanks to the author, listening to your words is better than reading ten years of books. You have a very profound view on life, and it is particularly reasonable. There are some profound influences that inspire me. No matter right or wrong, no matter how far-reaching it is, it is all human nature and it is the will of God.