Pink-Haired Lolita Turns to the Underworld: How Many Masters Could the Supernatural Have?

Nice! When I first looked at that image, I thought it looked like Xing from Beng 2, but after the strange eyes and the ability to see through evil came out, it looked more like him. Now my mind is filled with the uncle's laughter.

The setting of the nun is so good. Not only does it exist in the eyes of the protagonist, but it can also protect its owner like the black and green thing of Kelsey in Porridge, and it can also possess people. It is simply born to be handsome [Love] [Love] [Love]

It's a single, micro-bill, and the writing is excellent. There are very few descriptions of women's clothing and female bodies, and zero descriptions of female abduction. It's a masterpiece with strange rules and stories, the heroine is invincible, and she has a crazy critic-like personality. There is Ji Ning'an in Tomato Rules, and there is Kamiya Mingetsu in Ke Xue's world. The "Lord" and the "Destiny Master" have two equally violent beliefs! The same thermal weapon capabilities, the same crazy personality, and the same leadership spirit. It's such a passionate book. The female supporting role is very well portrayed. I think it's good for Te Yasha to be the second female lead. After all, Jiang Feiyu's loyalty is not pure. He has calculations, exploitation and selfishness. Tyasha has written her story very clearly through two copies, and has perfectly created a believer in God who is wholeheartedly willing to sacrifice his life for the heroine at any time. If the first dungeon says that Tyasha is still a poor person whose body was played with, then the second dungeon perfectly solves this problem by directly changing the ending of Tyasha as a child. I can only say that the author's arrangement is a stroke of genius. Must write it down! A masterpiece worth collecting.

Md, it's so refreshing, hahahahahaha, I feel an inexplicable sense of refreshment when I watch the protagonist, and I kill it through the memories of the plot, really. Update quickly!

Damn it, it looks great, highly recommended! ! ! ! Master Ji's mental state is so beautiful! ! ! ! ! ! ! Hahahahahahahahahaha! !

It was quite stuffy in the room, and suddenly I felt inspired, so I picked up the pen that had not been wet for a long time. I always felt that I should write something, but I didn't know where to start. Maybe it was because I was in a depressed mood today. I wrote the next "Additional update" and then gave up. The jujube tree in the courtyard had produced a few fruits this year for some reason. I picked it and tasted it. It was a bit bitter and not good. But when I think of the author in my dream, the sourness in my mouth becomes a little sweeter. I turn to look out the window in my spare time. There is summer, but it is not just summer. There is complexity, there is leisure, there is splendor and splendor that cannot be concealed by spring flowers and autumn moon, there are green locust trees and tall willows swallowing new cicadas, the wind blows into the strings, and there are gauze kitchen vines. It's a matter of opinion. If you don't like the subject matter, you don't have to read it. Don't criticize it. Please don't get entangled in the emotional line of this book. A novice author, don't be harsh, don't be angry, don't talk nonsense, Lily is not serious, but it's fun, don't scold it. Now let's talk about the problem with this book. As a Chinese teacher, I give my own evaluation objectively. (Can be accepted or not) 1. For group portraits and long narratives, the number of characters must be appropriate, and they must have extreme good and evil, or complex emotions. Without these, there will be no aura. And the author, your close-up is good, but don't try to deepen it (suggestion, as a suggestion for your current writing style). Too much emphasis will lead to distortion. 2,! ! ! ! ! Golden Chapter 3 can retain 90% of readers, but your writing is not intense enough (suggestion). Now your content and long narrative may be too straightforward, which is not bad, but if you want popularity, people, and discussion, do you have top-notch writing skills? No, only 1 in 10,000 or 1 in 100 million people have it. Therefore, it is recommended that you leave a part blank (appropriate), or leave room for discussion. The reader will always be a part of the book. 3. Some parts are procrastinating (you can't write something profound, so don't procrastinate. Without the modification of writing, the problem will be huge), some parts are too concise (the logic of the protagonist), I don't want you to go over it in one stroke, and don't speak in vernacular, you just need to express it, and we will help you. Just like I have a student who writes about various aspects of life. Guess what he is, crazy! ! ! Her writing style is very good, which is to reshape a logical concept and bring it in. It is absurd but makes people feel reasonable. 4. There is no contradiction. Human beings and weirdness are not in opposition. It's okay, but if you think about the conflict between physical combat power and the traditional system, you can't write it. There is no passion in fighting. You don't have to write it, but don't write it randomly. 5. You mentioned that humans and weirdos can coexist harmoniously, so write the same origin (a way of writing, not recommended, this is just a possibility, and does not conform to the core of the book). Weirds also have their own lives, and they may be persecuted. What about Boss? What to write? Demon? It's the same old story. If you want to write, write about the necessity of conflict. Only when there is a huge irreconcilable conflict between the two parties will anyone read it. 6. It's not cool enough. This is a fact. What you wrote is okay, but it's not enough. In addition to major changes to this book, it must either break away from the basics of pure funny abstraction and write it in a fun way, or it must have its own characteristics. What a pleasure, what a pleasure it is! ! Seeking truth in illusion, if you can't do it in reality, just do it if you feel aggrieved (you are good at this) 👍 🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻 It feels good to feel comfortable. 7. This book is okay, but it is far from a good book. The logic, characters, literary talent, and plot are all average, so there are no ups and downs. If it is still like this, then it should have a score of 8.5 To 7.5 In the end. If you think it is okay, then go for it. 8. Suggestion: I think your writing style is very malleable. Go and look at the characterization in short stories. If not, look at animations. Blue Fox's Golden Iron Beast, Pluto, Fire Linfei, Lion King (too much characterization leads to less fullness), and Lolo are all god-level depictions of long narratives. My suggestion is that you write long narratives when there is no way to write an image quickly. To sum up, @DddK your book is too flat, the characters have no characteristics (it is recommended not to write too many), and the weirdness is not enough. Your dream of writing a big villain was weirdly shattered when the rules were not constrained, so read it carefully. @DddK I'm not scolding you or harsh, it's just my personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it

Nice! ! In other novels, I have to remember the rules, but I don't have to remember them at all in this novel. It's so cool! !

Question (personal): After reading the comments, I can see the summary, but some details are not enough, there are a little too many swear words, and some descriptions of appearance are repeated. At present, only Jiang and the protagonist can see a little trace of the emotional line, and there is little introduction to the awakening weapon, so I can write about it in detail. There is a problem with the increase in experience. There is no specific experience increase (such as how much experience is gained by killing a low-level weirdo or a mid-level weirdo). There is no level at which a certain firearm (or type) is unlocked. Having these can give readers a clearer reading experience. Recommendations (personal): Emotional line: 1. Directly state at the beginning whether there is a male/female protagonist, multiple or single. The speed of the love line, and whether their specific ending will be sprinkled with sugar or a knife 2. (Yes): You can lay out more about how the relationship between them develops step by step.

Master Ji: Next, it's private time! Hahahahahahahaha (crazy) XDM, don't say anything and just rush.

I like it very much. I can easily empathize with it when I watch it myself (? The plot is very exciting and silky. When the plot first declines and then rises, the "suppression" is not obvious, but when it "rises", the pleasure rises straight away, giving the illusion of taking off from a flat ground, without any mental depression.