(A ruthless, cunning villain protagonist)
(A bloody, murderous story! Don't read if that's not your thing!)
Chu Xun's soul transmigrates into the body of a bodyguard working for a small escort agency in the Great Spirit Dynasty. After bandits raid them, their leader slits Chu Xun's throat, but somehow he comes back to life.
Ding! Congratulations, Host, you've obtained the Dragon Ball sign-in System.
Ding! Day One of the seven-day beginner sign-in. Congratulations, Host, you've received a beginner's gift pack!
Includes the Saiyan bloodline, unrestricted version, and a battle power tester, unrestricted version.
Ding! Day Two of the seven-day beginner sign-in. You've obtained a technique editor.
Ding! Day Three of the seven-day beginner sign-in. You've obtained a Universal Capsule Pack. (Each daily sign-in grants one additional random Universal Capsule.)
Ding! Daily sign-in reward: 1 Senzu Bean.
“Holy crap! Holy crap! My throat hurts so much!”
This chapter is rambling and padded with too much word count; nine-tenths of it is just filler.
Do you really need to write some inner monologue for a brown bear? Isn't it just a character who shows off its muscles, roars a few times, and then gets killed by the protagonist?
Too much rambling! Too much nonsense! Watery writing style.
It doesn't feel like the Dragon Ball world; it feels more like an ancient martial arts world.