From the Start in the Backrooms: Alice Becomes the Ultimate Legend

Actually quite good But there is a sense of familiarity with AI

Did the author use AI to expand the writing?

In fact, it's not bad. The setting is novel and interesting, and the protagonist's abilities are also interesting and exciting. But I think there is something wrong with the author's narrative. After reading the whole story for so long, the protagonist is confused and unstable. Many plots are really not described clearly. I don't know why it suddenly jumps to the next plot. For example, in the scene about killing a rabbit, a person fell asleep in his dream. The priest suspected that the protagonist did it, and the protagonist felt wronged. The protagonist felt that the symptoms were similar to those of people in the pipe world, and suddenly thought that maybe it was because of himself that he fell into emo (the twist was abrupt and there was no foreshadowing). Afterwards, the Cheshire Cat tells a bunch of riddles of unknown meaning, and then the protagonist suddenly realizes and goes to find the White Rabbit (the reader's perspective is most annoying when the protagonist knows that the author knows that everyone is connected, and the reader is confused by the riddle plot, and it is not a mystery). After finding the white rabbit, the protagonist began to hesitate whether to kill him (it was too jumpy, I still stayed in the previous plot to find out the reason why the priest's apprentice slept to death and confronted the white rabbit. After finding the white rabbit, he began to ask for revenge for pushing him into the hole. I had a black question mark on my face, so I still don't understand what I wanted to find the white rabbit for) Suddenly it didn't matter, he casually killed the white rabbit, and then obtained the transit station space, where he told the Cheshire Cat another riddle about how there was a complicated connection between me and the white rabbit, and those people were destined to meet or something. (???? So what on earth is the protagonist struggling with? I don't understand at all. Why did it suddenly break down? Why did she ignore the two people who were waiting with her outside the rift and jump directly to the transfer station) After reading this episode, I was filled with doubts. Why did the protagonist go to find Rabbit? If it was for the person who slept to death, why was it not mentioned at all later? Why does the protagonist feel responsible for the person who slept to death? The protagonist did nothing; if it was because the protagonist could not control his power, why did he go to find the rabbit later; if it was related to the rabbit, why did the protagonist know that it was related to the rabbit? Why are you so confused about whether to kill the rabbit? The protagonist is not looking for revenge on the rabbit, but is looking for the rabbit to ask questions, and he wants to kill the rabbit without even mentioning the problem? After killing it, he said that Rabbit didn't want to kill Alice but just wanted to kill Meng Xing. So did Rabbit just want to make Meng Xing become Alice, just want him to wake up? Then the protagonist is not killed by manslaughter [what] Just one plot was so confusing to me that I couldn't understand it. A lot of the author's information was not conveyed to the readers. The narrative felt like the author was stuck in his own perspective, thinking we knew, but I really don't know what you are writing about! I think this may be the reason why the data in this book is not very good. I hope the author will change the narrative of riddle jumping.

Beautiful, love watching. But hoping to strengthen Alice, Bang Bang ended the battle with two punches 🤭

It's very well written, I really hope the author can keep reading. Nowadays, many sex stories are based on relationships. For example, in Pineapple, there are campus and urban romances. You can't find any that have plot as the main focus and relationships as the supplement, or that have no relationship lines at all. I have been looking for a well-written TS novel focusing on adventure for four or five years, but there are only less than five books.

The author writes the female characters very well, with flesh and blood, and girls can play with them. And I can't see any male characters so far. It's just that the author has some places where the connection is not natural, but it's okay. I think the writing is pretty good😊

Putting tomatoes in this writing can be said to be a dimensionality reduction blow.

Some of the descriptions are vague and the plot twists are a bit abrupt. As readers, do we have an omniscient perspective? The work gave me the illusion of having an omniscient perspective but seemed to deliberately conceal the contradiction. It was unnatural when the information was missing, resulting in a certain degree of separation.

I suddenly thought when I saw the previous article, the protagonist asked the cat how to get home, and also said that it was Meng Xing's home, and the protagonist has always had this name, so the protagonist seems to have traveled through time, has he been dreaming? Everything is what he thinks, like a rootless tree. The author won't play this trick on us when the time comes, right? I couldn't accept the ending of "Awakening from Meng". Even if I don't wake up, I still feel uncomfortable. 🤦

Although it's quite AI, it feels a bit rigid.