One-Punch Man: The Phoenix Man

@Almighty Niubi is very well written, I just hope you can add " " to what the character says, otherwise it will feel weird and a bit uncomfortable.

The writing style is weird, as if it is a flowing narration, there is no sense of immersion, and I never feel like I am reading it.

The writing style is a bit poor, and the sense of immersion is poor. If you are hit by a dog's energy bullet, you will disappear for a long time. The most important thing is that it is impossible to break the defense. The rest is very good. Write more about the protagonist. I don't like to read your original plot that is so long.

Why is no one watching?

The first part was just okay, but after killing the pineapple, it became the original plot. The main character didn't appear in ten chapters, which was too messy [laughing and crying]

Can the author add double quotes "double quotes"?

It's too fluid, and there's no sense of immersion.

After reading it, I still think it's okay. Keep up the good work.

What the hell are you writing? The plot is vague and vague, and the protagonist has no personality at all, as if he writes whatever he thinks. There is no characteristic of a novel at all, and the whole novel feels like words.

He was hit by an energy bomb and disappeared for several chapters, and the sense of immersion was really bad. The most confusing thing to me is how the protagonist self-destructed a good double agent, but you failed to write it down. Isn't there a boss driver knight behind One Punch Man?