Genshin Impact: The Yellow Flash of Teyvat

I feel that the author's writing pace is too fast. He could add some legendary missions and invitation missions to make the transition, otherwise there will be nothing to write later.

The writing is barely interesting, the plot narrative is too straightforward and simple, and the emotions are foreshadowed. . . [Thinking] It seems there is no fighting plot. . . It seems that there is not. Generally speaking, it is suitable for yy, keep up the good work.

The writing is too complicated and difficult to understand, especially the last few pictures are completely different from the previous ones. The personality changes. The first one is good and the second one is not good at all. Since you know that the protagonist lacks memory, why do you still publish this kind of task to let him see his past memories? Moreover, we have said that we want the protagonist to live a good life in Teyvat, so why do you ask him to remember it and not be able to go back? Moreover, I saw the few pictures of the protagonist's memory, Guchen Jiesha from another world? , The most important thing is that since you are writing about Minato, you should write well. Why did you suddenly give the Sharingan Mangekyou a mission? This is something I don't understand. Since you gave Minato the magic board to strengthen his strength, it's okay, but you don't want the magic to change, okay? The Sharingan is installed in the last paragraph. After the fight with Thor, why did you let a fox take out the eye? I don't understand

Give it five stars, I think it has potential.

How did your mother write this book? Holy shit. Originally, the fire was still lit in the front, but it was changed directly at the back, right? What is written here?

They are all my women😍😍😍

How to say it? The writing style needs to be improved. I have no choice but to bring it in.

Come on, author, I think your book is very interesting.

Forced to become a strict wife [vomit][vomit][vomit]

What did you write? The feelings are so fragile.