Genshin Impact: The Yellow Flash of Teyvat

The author's pacing feels too fast. Adding some legendary quests and invitation quests could help transition things out, otherwise there won't be much to write later.

The writing is a bit lacking, the plot is too straightforward and simplistic, and there's hardly any emotional buildup... 🤔. And there's hardly any action scenes either. Overall, it's suitable for wishful thinking; keep up the good work!

The writing is too disorganized and incomprehensible, especially the later chapters which completely contradict the earlier ones, portraying a completely different person with a drastic personality change. The earlier chapters were well-written, but the later ones are terrible. If you knew the protagonist lacked memories, why issue a mission to let him see his past?

I'd give it five stars; I feel it has potential.

What the hell did your mom write in this book? Holy crap. It started with a fire-making scene, then suddenly changed to something else entirely? What kind of nonsense is this?

They're all my women 😍😍😍

Well, the writing style needs improvement; there's no way around it, you just have to immerse yourself in it.

Keep up the good work, author! I think your book is great.

Forced to become henpecked 🤮🤮🤮

What kind of writing is this? The emotions are so fragile.