I Became a Stunning Senior Sister, and My Junior Sister Wants Dual Cultivation from the Start

How are the realms of cultivation divided? The author will explain.

It's quite satisfactory. The outline should be that the heroine becomes stronger, the junior sister sticks to her, and suppresses foreign enemies (guess). There is no too unfair plot (good review, I hope I won't do it again). In fact, I wanted to give up when I saw a man coming through the soul, but I like the subject. After reading it later, I thought about it and the senior sisters have rejected the junior sister for more than a hundred years. If there is no soul, Wearing, the change in the attitude of the senior sister towards the junior sister is too sudden, and it is very likely to be criticized, so I think this soul traveling is a necessary plot or an important plot to promote the relationship between the senior sister and the younger sister (in fact, it can be a woman's soul traveling, and then give her a setting: Yan Gou, so it becomes a real double heroine novel). Later, I saw the author fuse the two souls, Taking the essence and discarding the dross made the senior sister's character different, and she became more tolerant towards the junior sister (in fact, in the middle part, the senior sister deliberately let the junior sister know that she was immune to all poisons. I thought we were about to get together, but in the end, she changed back to her previous cold appearance). I also hope that the author can remove some unnecessary words and behaviors. (For example, making love to the senior sister and junior sister, grabbing two people to make a cauldron, etc. I hope the author will not write it. Although I know this is normal, I still feel that it pollutes the affection between the senior sister and the junior sister.) Overall, the plot of this book is good, and the characters are also well-developed. I personally like it.

The author writes at least 5 chapters a day for a new book like this.

I stayed up late and finished reading the current chapter, which has been updated to chapter forty-four. Let me give some suggestions to the author: (1) The world view, realm structure, etc. Can be explained in advance at the beginning of the book. This allows readers to have a good reading experience. (2) What is the selling point of this book? It is the novel experience of the protagonist changing his gender, and the love affair with his junior sister. In this case, the author can try his best to write in this aspect. (3) Isn't it a little too fast when the protagonist merges his personality? There is no transition in the middle, which makes the subsequent text difficult to follow and the viewing experience is poor. (4) The author's handling of the parts that need to promote the plot is a bit blunt. It can be modified appropriately. (5) The protagonist of this article is a woman, so the female perspective must be brought into the writing. (6) No matter what the score of this book is, I hope the author can write it to the end, even if it is unfinished, I don't want to be a eunuch. (7) After the author finishes writing, he can take a look at it from the reader's perspective. There may be unexpected gains. Finally, five stars are given (○｀ε´○)

How to say it. I might have thought it looked good in the past, but now it really doesn't work. I really can't stand it. It feels like taking an online class. The overall writing style feels like something everyday and something else, in short I can't put it into words – it's weird. Personal views: 1. The character's personality can be designed to be a little more extreme to highlight the character's characteristics. If necessary, you can also design opposing characters and negative characters to strengthen the character's personality, which will inject life into the article. Take the junior sister in the article as an example. She gave me the feeling that she exists only because of the existence of the protagonist, like a puppet in the script. 2 I hope the author will put more thought into the plot. If I really can't make it up, I'll steal the chicken head, pork belly, and leopard tail from the big boss, and secretly make it my own. 3. If you want to create high-quality articles, you can learn writing techniques from some large-scale articles. Don't learn the scale - it's a little bit toxic That's about it, the above is my personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it! ! Looking forward to the author's next book, ugh~. Boutique Recommended study books 1. Jian Lai (front and back teaching materials) 2. Hong Yan's famous works (family teaching materials) 3. Find prohibited items by yourself

It's very nice, and the writing is clear\(//∇//)\I just want to ask you book friends, are there any other books like this? It's the kind of person who doesn't want to be funny. Nowadays, tomatoes are funny.

Very good-looking, mainly Yujie yyds

Now that I have seen it, maybe because the previous writing is a bit messy, few people have read it, but overall it is not bad. If you have read too many Lily abuse stories, you can go here to relieve yourself. It is generally relaxing, and there are no grievances or semi-sad stories. It is relatively easy to read. I also hope that the author will not engage in any abuse stories in the future. (The details of the car are too few, the author must increase his efforts) (˵¯͒¯͒˵)

I was driving too fast, I was really worried about the author g, Author, how many chapters does this book have? I feel like the pace is a bit fast.

Great novel. I hope that multi-player sports can be used as soon as possible [laughing]