Siheyuan: As Long as I'm Alive, No One Can Turn This Place Upside Down

It's quite good; at least it's a normal courtyard house. Jia Dongxu may have flaws, but he can't be as bad as some books portray him. Would someone as shrewd as Yi Zhonghai choose such a bad person? Besides, no one in the courtyard has ever spoken ill of him!

Let's stop writing. People come to see a courtyard house, and here comes this old man who foresees a murder in the middle of the night, immediately drawing his gun and engaging in a standoff. Couldn't they have had a few people lying in wait? And then, after he leaves, he's arrested on murder charges. Do you think that's reasonable? Do you have any witnesses?

Dragging it out. Things that could be explained in two or three sentences are stretched into several chapters. The plot progresses slowly. A 300,000-word novel about a courtyard house could cover about half the story. With this kind of pacing, you could write ten million words.

The subject matter is good, but I have no idea what you're trying to write. You're about to be killed, and you have to keep it a secret? What's going on? What shady thing have you done? Seriously, I'm speechless.

To be fair, if Jia Dongxu hadn't died, none of the events in the TV series would have happened. While men and women are supposed to be equal now, in some ways, having a man in the house and not having one makes a world of difference.

The first 30 chapters were alright, but the later ones went off-topic. You need to keep the main theme of your writing in the courtyard house, focusing too much on power struggles will make it stray from the central theme.

The story begins in a hospital, and the doctor said the patient could be discharged in a couple of days, but after chapters fifty or sixty, the patient is still not discharged! The author simply changed the setting of the courtyard house story to a hospital!

It's pointless. One event is written into more than 30 chapters, and even a small matter can be written into 3-4 chapters. There are also problems such as typos, missing words, and extra words. Later on, even the names of the characters in the drama are wrong. The names of Yan Bugui and Factory Director Yang are wrong.

There are very few stories about Jia Dongxu, and the content is well-written with a fresh perspective. However, I noticed that the author only updates once every other day, with only two chapters each time, which is a bit too little to read.

The author needs to be more rigorous in constructing the plot. The storyline of Jia Jia's relatives eating into the family fortune is fabricated. It's clear from the drama that the Jia family didn't have such relatives. The Zhang family of Jia Zhangshi might have relatives, but they had no contact. However, the Jia family definitely didn't.